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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Creepy Neighbours"A book of Stories, Essays and Poetry.
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Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Sad situation to be. You tell a story about unfriendly neighbours. Told in abcb rhyme you tell a tale that is not unusual. Disputes about fixing fences and so on. Let's hope things improve if this story is fact. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Sad situation to be. You tell a story about unfriendly neighbours. Told in abcb rhyme you tell a tale that is not unusual. Disputes about fixing fences and so on. Let's hope things improve if this story is fact. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 28-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2013
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Dorothy I assure you it IS FACT. That is why I labelled it Biographical hehe. Hope you will look at my other stuff Not met you before I don't think. These get mentioned in my book as well by the way. Might have some more verses to add soon
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just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!!
Comment from Alena Smith
that's funny for me, but frustrating for you, i understand. i think all of us had a neighbor like that at one point or another.
great description of how much pain in the butt they are/were
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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that's funny for me, but frustrating for you, i understand. i think all of us had a neighbor like that at one point or another.
great description of how much pain in the butt they are/were
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Still are mate. Thanks for the great review. All you great reviewers have gone and helped me achieve recognition status for this poem which is also a part of my autobiography if you would like to check that out. Thanks again.
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just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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ok, thank you. I will go take a look at this
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New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!!
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Well, I'd say you're having trouble with your neighbors which is always a pain in the neck, especially when they're not friendly. We'll just have to pray they'll move on. God loves you and we do too.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Well, I'd say you're having trouble with your neighbors which is always a pain in the neck, especially when they're not friendly. We'll just have to pray they'll move on. God loves you and we do too.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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AMEN Evelyn that would be wonderful. Thanks for dropping by. Have a ton of Reviewing waiting for me get to it soon.
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Hey I realise you are doing Evelyn's reviewing and writing if you have time just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!!
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
This sounds as though it upsets you deeply.
"Creepy neighbours" sure can make life difficult and unpleasant.
W ritten with honesty and emotion and appears that your emotions mirror your words.
I hope all is soon much more settled and positive for you.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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This sounds as though it upsets you deeply.
"Creepy neighbours" sure can make life difficult and unpleasant.
W ritten with honesty and emotion and appears that your emotions mirror your words.
I hope all is soon much more settled and positive for you.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Well we have left it in God's hands so it is all up to Him, now.
Thanks for dropping by.
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just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!!
Comment from Matthew M.
I agree creepy neighbors can be the worst. I just moved to a new place and all the people are fairly quiet and keep to themselves. None are mean, but they just aren't over-friendly. I'm just not used to it. So I can understand your concern.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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I agree creepy neighbors can be the worst. I just moved to a new place and all the people are fairly quiet and keep to themselves. None are mean, but they just aren't over-friendly. I'm just not used to it. So I can understand your concern.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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yeah well it seems to be modern society these days. I remember as a child having terrific neighbours where we all used to talk and help each other and be aware of anyone having needs etc. We have one neighbour who is terrific. Hubby likes chatting but a very busy guy. His wife does our lawns for us and cleaning and the kids, teen agers are so abnormal in a good way to most teen agers today. All to do with upbrining I reckon. Thanks for your review.
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just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!!
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem with words that flow well and rhyme good. Too bad you have such terrible neighbors. Nothing worse than neighbors like that.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Good poem with words that flow well and rhyme good. Too bad you have such terrible neighbors. Nothing worse than neighbors like that.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
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Hi mate for sure for sure. You would have seen mention of these in my book as well. More verses coming.
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just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!!
Comment from Oatmeal
Sankey,
I have been searching for a theme to write about and thanks to you, I think I have found one. We have horrible neighbors too that sliced my garden hose and cut up my watering cans. This happened after I figured out that the people before us left their hose. The neighbors were using it along with our water to water their yard and their dog!!!!
Your poem was an inspiration for me. The theme was great and the descriptive words were well chosen. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was nothing wrong that I could tell. No SPAG and no typos.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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Sankey,
I have been searching for a theme to write about and thanks to you, I think I have found one. We have horrible neighbors too that sliced my garden hose and cut up my watering cans. This happened after I figured out that the people before us left their hose. The neighbors were using it along with our water to water their yard and their dog!!!!
Your poem was an inspiration for me. The theme was great and the descriptive words were well chosen. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was nothing wrong that I could tell. No SPAG and no typos.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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Hi Oatmeal. Can I tell you a funnt story? On the messageboards we had a guy posting "Quotemeals" Sayings from various persons of note. Trouble is a lot of us got - how do they say it in the Saouth..."tarred" of all these pretty useless sayings so we tagged em OATMEAL!! HEHE!! Sorry had to share that. Nice to meet you hope you will check out some of my other stuff and point me to yours. I must confess I am inundated with a heap of reviewing awaiting my attention. If you are just now seeing this Poem believe you me you missed a lot of mess a bit earlier. Stick around Thanks again.
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Sankey,
Wow that tale you told me is a good one. Nobody has ever told me anything like that. LOL
A few guys here told me they were going to eat me for breakfast!!!! LOL
Anyway, like I told you, you may of given me a theme for my writing. I am having writer's block. All of my stuff is here. Even things I wrote when I was growing up.
All of the children's stories are in Oatmeal's Gardens in my portfolio. I write fiction and non fiction.
I will look up your stuff tomorrow after I get some sleep.
They tell me that this one is one of my best-
IF
If I could take the pain away
With only a smile - make you high
If I could promise you every day
A good day and you'd never have to cry
If I could give you just a rest
Take your cares away
This time could you pass the test?
Never ask "can" but "may"
You see, if I could do it all
Have a written guarantee
Then would you stand so tall
When you were next to me?
If I could work a miracle
Like Christ, I'd have to die
Then my sweetest baby
Would you sit down and cry?
©2006 Camille Whiteman
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Very nice. When am I gonna fit more time in to read all this great stuff. Will add you I think I am gonna like your work. Look forward to more reviews from you whenever.
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just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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hi wrote a poem somewhere about Writer's block and in here...New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!!
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Sankey,
A fence is always a good idea. lol
I wish you the best.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Sankey,
I will look it up.
Thank you so much.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment from michaelcahill
HA!! I thinks we met these folks in your book. Great poem. Good rhymes and meter and all that. Funny without being too mean. Got a kick out of this. Ready for a sequel, I know there are more stories!! mikey
like the additions. Still think a sequel is in order. I know they are up to no good. Hahaha. We won't tell!!!
See!! The last verse should start part two of this. See my last comment. "up to no good." I'll stick with that. The fence looks great though. mikey
That is a shock!! I'm so used to seeing it lying on the ground. hahaha.
Finally!! I guess the neighbors did you a small favor as this turned into an Epic! I like "slew foot" that's a new on for me. well done. Good wins! mikey
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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HA!! I thinks we met these folks in your book. Great poem. Good rhymes and meter and all that. Funny without being too mean. Got a kick out of this. Ready for a sequel, I know there are more stories!! mikey
like the additions. Still think a sequel is in order. I know they are up to no good. Hahaha. We won't tell!!!
See!! The last verse should start part two of this. See my last comment. "up to no good." I'll stick with that. The fence looks great though. mikey
That is a shock!! I'm so used to seeing it lying on the ground. hahaha.
Finally!! I guess the neighbors did you a small favor as this turned into an Epic! I like "slew foot" that's a new on for me. well done. Good wins! mikey
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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Thanks yeah you did meet em in the book thanks mate.
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Hey folks have been back in and cleaned up a lot more and now put a pic of the fence or the fallen down fence in there now. Enjoy! More to come later.
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My! Boy, that is a sorry fence indeed. I suppose it would keep a ground hog out though. hahaha
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just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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Hi mate....New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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As you know Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!! More verses (changed previous too)in that vein
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a very apt poem from the author. You are writing about everybody's worst nightmare, and that is the nightmare of bad neighbours. I am fixing the house I just bought, and I'm trying to be considerate to the neighbours by doing the noisy work in the middle of the day. I hope they understand. I have spoken to them a few times and they seem nice. Excellent addition to the poem and great format.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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This is a very apt poem from the author. You are writing about everybody's worst nightmare, and that is the nightmare of bad neighbours. I am fixing the house I just bought, and I'm trying to be considerate to the neighbours by doing the noisy work in the middle of the day. I hope they understand. I have spoken to them a few times and they seem nice. Excellent addition to the poem and great format.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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Well we were fortunate when we first mo0ved in 26 years ago to have good neighbours all around. I have mentioned them all in my book of course. I may add more to the poem there is more needs to be said about these. Thanks again.
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Hey folks have been back in and cleaned up a lot more and now put a pic of the fence or the fallen down fence in there now. Enjoy! More to come later.
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just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!! New verse added and previous adjusted for relevancy
Comment from BethShelby
I read this one when you posted it before. It is still very funny. I know fanstory won't count a new rating.
This poem is quite funny but it certainly gets your point across and tells quite a bit about what these neighbors are like. I like the rhyme here. It's no fun having neighbors who aren't pleasant to be around.
I think you might have some formatting problems. It would look better if the whole background was black if you are using white type rather than just behind the letters.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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I read this one when you posted it before. It is still very funny. I know fanstory won't count a new rating.
This poem is quite funny but it certainly gets your point across and tells quite a bit about what these neighbors are like. I like the rhyme here. It's no fun having neighbors who aren't pleasant to be around.
I think you might have some formatting problems. It would look better if the whole background was black if you are using white type rather than just behind the letters.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2013
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Hi Beth yeah was not happy with the Formatting need to play around with it more thanks for agreeing with me on that. You would have met these in my book as well. Maybe coulds add this in there later in that chapter hehe. Will work on the back ground thing thanks.
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Hey folks have been back in and cleaned up a lot more and now put a pic of the fence or the fallen down fence in there now. Enjoy! More to come later.
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just added some more to my Creepy Neighbours poem
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Somer good news Beth! Sorry more than one new verse added and I just did another edit if you'd like to look.
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New verse added and just fixed the set up of poem if you would like to check
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Creepy's paid for the fence yesterday! Yippee!! New verse added and previous adjusted for relevancy