All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 47 "No one Noticed"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Sasha
This is so sad and deeply moving. To die and no one notice is not necessarily a statement about the person that died but the people that remain behind. If this is biographical at least he had a friend to tend to him along with his cat. Beautiful poem with a sad story. Very nice work with this one.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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This is so sad and deeply moving. To die and no one notice is not necessarily a statement about the person that died but the people that remain behind. If this is biographical at least he had a friend to tend to him along with his cat. Beautiful poem with a sad story. Very nice work with this one.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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thx my dear - he had one lovely friend, a lady who'd been with him for many many faithful years - but his children were just disgusting vultures. I'm glad only she and I were there - he just slipped away - but we knew it was close, and he knew he was loved. :)Sharyn
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I'm so sorry to hear about your friend, Sharyn. Sad to be so alone with nothing but death to look forward to.
the end
of ten years dying,
faded red dream-catcher on his wall,
his dreams caught and killed, long gone,
This part speaks to me, since I supposedly have ten years, and today I noticed how the deck and pool and gardens are beginning to fall apart with me, and I can no longer use a hoe or any tool to fix any of it. I thought to myself how it's beginning to look like an old lady's house... because it is. Mark is too busy with work and inside repairs to bother with the back yard. I feel like my dreamcatcher is worthless too, since I have nothing to look forward to but getting sicker and weaker and then...
Very well done, as always. I like your "telling a story" style, which is no doubt why you can do monologues so well.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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I'm so sorry to hear about your friend, Sharyn. Sad to be so alone with nothing but death to look forward to.
the end
of ten years dying,
faded red dream-catcher on his wall,
his dreams caught and killed, long gone,
This part speaks to me, since I supposedly have ten years, and today I noticed how the deck and pool and gardens are beginning to fall apart with me, and I can no longer use a hoe or any tool to fix any of it. I thought to myself how it's beginning to look like an old lady's house... because it is. Mark is too busy with work and inside repairs to bother with the back yard. I feel like my dreamcatcher is worthless too, since I have nothing to look forward to but getting sicker and weaker and then...
Very well done, as always. I like your "telling a story" style, which is no doubt why you can do monologues so well.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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this must be so hard for you Phyllis! Bobby died of lung cancer which just took over his body - but he'd had emphysema for about ten years, bad enough for an oxygen tank - and he'd been a chain smoker, so no great surprises. But I always knew I was meant to be around when that time came to pass - it was just ironic that I was there at the time ... and he just slipped away. I'm sorry - this kind of stuff must be very hard for you to read my dear. Bless you for reviewing. You're pretty bloody amazing.
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Thanks, Sharyn. It's okay. I live with constant knowledge of it, for every time I go downstairs and come back up, I'm out of breath.. constant reminders. But lung cancer is not in my future. THat's painful and fasst. I'm not a smoker, just unlucky. Still not on full time oxygen,only for walking dogs and using my treadmill, so I have a long way to go. My mom died quickly without warnig from a stroke. She was lucky. My dad suffered in pain for months with bone cancer, not so lucky. We can't decide unless we take our own lives, and I'm not about to do that. Everyone dies. You will too. I just hope it's so quick that you never know. That's the best we can wish for. Life was never meant to be easy. THIS ain't Heaven.
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yep - been on my mind lately - my husband is in LA looking after his 95 year old mom who was refusing to eat ... obviously it's the question on our minds - is she ready to go? she's always been so full of piss & vinegar - hard to imagine!
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Well, if she made it to 95, she's had a good long life... at least I hope it was good. I'm hoping to get to 80. We'll see. You always seem so perky and "alive"... good that you know how to LIVE life while you have it! Cheers!
Comment from McMurry903
This is such a powerful poem, Sharyn. So very sad....You so vividly painted the somber scene. I'm sorry for your loss. It's very clear this poured straight from your heart. Brian
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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This is such a powerful poem, Sharyn. So very sad....You so vividly painted the somber scene. I'm sorry for your loss. It's very clear this poured straight from your heart. Brian
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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thx so much Brian - it happened about a month ago, but of course I've watched him getting weaker for years (he was a chronic smoker and developed lung cancer). Sad when a life seems to be wasted, hmm?
Comment from Gungalo
How horrible. To die and no one would notice. Though it may have been the preferred method by which he wanted to go if no one paid him any attention anyways. So very sad.
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How horrible. To die and no one would notice. Though it may have been the preferred method by which he wanted to go if no one paid him any attention anyways. So very sad.
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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He had a long-time lady-friend who was there and looked after him with a lot of love Gungalo - it was just ironic that while we were talking, he simply slipped away. It was expected. He had a sad life, but he always had a wonderful smile. :)S
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Sigh.
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha Sharyn,
A very sad poem that's very well written. no body noticed but you and the cat. Thank you for sharing.
Aloha, Ginger
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Aloha Sharyn,
A very sad poem that's very well written. no body noticed but you and the cat. Thank you for sharing.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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thx Ginger! :)Sharyn