All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Our Game"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from pattipac
Your well-penned free-verse poem of revenge plays like a dirge upon the page. Your controling husband knows all the ways of entrapment that keep you suffering and dangling like a helpless puppet on a string. But, revenge knows how to cut quick and deep, when his one weakness lures him into your bed.
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Your well-penned free-verse poem of revenge plays like a dirge upon the page. Your controling husband knows all the ways of entrapment that keep you suffering and dangling like a helpless puppet on a string. But, revenge knows how to cut quick and deep, when his one weakness lures him into your bed.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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GRRRR! you've got the right idea there pp! :)Sharyn
Comment from prayingpoet
Wow! I was afraid to go to bed after reading this! Wonderful wording, great progression, rhythm and flow. Your word pictures were "dead on"!
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Wow! I was afraid to go to bed after reading this! Wonderful wording, great progression, rhythm and flow. Your word pictures were "dead on"!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
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thx so much, pp! always fun to write "dark" for a change, hmm? :)Sharyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
We only have your word on that, Sharyn, we need proof! You have a vivid imagination, and I love it!! The imagery in this poem, is so vivid, not too pleasant either, LOL, you can certainly find the words when needed. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
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We only have your word on that, Sharyn, we need proof! You have a vivid imagination, and I love it!! The imagery in this poem, is so vivid, not too pleasant either, LOL, you can certainly find the words when needed. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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ok - my next piece is on the fate of odd socks - how's that for a cheery contrast dear? :))))
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I must make sure I read that one, it sounds soooo exciting!!!! LOL, you certainy find the subjects! xsx
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yep - you'll be crying over socks Sandra ... :))))
Comment from Kevin C
This is an excellent write. It reads in a cadence that matches the dark emotions. You capture these feelings that are clear to the reader. Your words just explode that captivates the reader and your author notes are great. I think your artwork just adds. Nicely done and good luck with the contest.
Kevin
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This is an excellent write. It reads in a cadence that matches the dark emotions. You capture these feelings that are clear to the reader. Your words just explode that captivates the reader and your author notes are great. I think your artwork just adds. Nicely done and good luck with the contest.
Kevin
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
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thx so much, Kevin! :)Sharyn
Comment from Shadow Pahn
I really enjoyed the piece, it took me a while to make the link to the game of chess, which is weird, because of the picture, but in my defense, i was distracted by checkered boobies
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I really enjoyed the piece, it took me a while to make the link to the game of chess, which is weird, because of the picture, but in my defense, i was distracted by checkered boobies
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
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Thx SP - guys and boobies - what can I say? :)))
Comment from Bina1
I'm glad your wicked Valentine should not be taken to heart! You just walked on the dark side for a bit! Very witty, thank you for sharing.
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I'm glad your wicked Valentine should not be taken to heart! You just walked on the dark side for a bit! Very witty, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
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thx Bina! :)S
Comment from yonashalom
Hmmm, you sound dangerous, there lady. I advise your hubby to carry some protection. LOL. Dark words and excellent use of them in this quick moving poem. A black Valentine's day for sure ...:) Good luck in the contest. ~Yona
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Hmmm, you sound dangerous, there lady. I advise your hubby to carry some protection. LOL. Dark words and excellent use of them in this quick moving poem. A black Valentine's day for sure ...:) Good luck in the contest. ~Yona
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
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Thx Yona! :)S
Comment from mizzkris20
This is a great poem. Your poem screams with emotion from start to finish. You are a very talented writer.I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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This is a great poem. Your poem screams with emotion from start to finish. You are a very talented writer.I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
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thx so much mizzkris! :)Sharyn
Comment from MumEsGirl
Great writing as always, lovely rich and highly descriptive words which enhance the message.
I wish you luck with the amazing write
hugs
kate
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Great writing as always, lovely rich and highly descriptive words which enhance the message.
I wish you luck with the amazing write
hugs
kate
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
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thx so much kate! :)S
Comment from L. Sherman
What a thought provoking poem. The picture was a wonderful accompaniment. I love the slinking nature and the darkness of the words and how it creeps up to a very matter of fact end. The comparison to the game Chess is also cleverly handled.
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What a thought provoking poem. The picture was a wonderful accompaniment. I love the slinking nature and the darkness of the words and how it creeps up to a very matter of fact end. The comparison to the game Chess is also cleverly handled.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
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thx so much LS! :)S