All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Not enough?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from McMurry903
This is a very powerful poem, Sharyn. I must admit I've drove right past the unfortunate before as well. There are so many people suffering thru hard times it is really bad. You conveyed a strong message here. Beautiful presentation as always, my friend. Congrats on the win! Brian
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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This is a very powerful poem, Sharyn. I must admit I've drove right past the unfortunate before as well. There are so many people suffering thru hard times it is really bad. You conveyed a strong message here. Beautiful presentation as always, my friend. Congrats on the win! Brian
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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thank you so much Brian! :)S
Comment from Winslow
Dear Visionary,
For the guilt accumulates and becomes an excessive burden. Our lives are supported on the backs of others. And the homeless, why is it so, I can't help or no not how.
I see you won the contest. Congratulations.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Dear Visionary,
For the guilt accumulates and becomes an excessive burden. Our lives are supported on the backs of others. And the homeless, why is it so, I can't help or no not how.
I see you won the contest. Congratulations.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thx so much Winslow! :)Sharyn
Comment from J.R Dickinson
This is especially a superb piece. I love style of this particular work because I've never seen it before, but I' new to poetry myself and testing the waters. You can tell its a very emotional meaning for both the man and yourself/narrator. It's unfortunate things like these happen everyday, and though you're numbing over the world and his misery,you can tell, sense, the inkling of yearning to help though we are incapable of helping everyone, and sometimes helping others can be grim in consequences for yourself. Which brings this tale to life,and it makes you hope the upper society who CAN do something will eventually succumb to a heart and reach out.
This was a rewarding read. Thank you for writing it.
-J.R
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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This is especially a superb piece. I love style of this particular work because I've never seen it before, but I' new to poetry myself and testing the waters. You can tell its a very emotional meaning for both the man and yourself/narrator. It's unfortunate things like these happen everyday, and though you're numbing over the world and his misery,you can tell, sense, the inkling of yearning to help though we are incapable of helping everyone, and sometimes helping others can be grim in consequences for yourself. Which brings this tale to life,and it makes you hope the upper society who CAN do something will eventually succumb to a heart and reach out.
This was a rewarding read. Thank you for writing it.
-J.R
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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thank you so much for reading and for your heart-warming response, JR! :)Sharyn
Comment from seren james
Very well said in this poem. Lovely presentation. Lovely story. We experience this everyday. And we wish the world to be equal. Then we are powerless. So we do nothing. Your message is strong and well said.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Very well said in this poem. Lovely presentation. Lovely story. We experience this everyday. And we wish the world to be equal. Then we are powerless. So we do nothing. Your message is strong and well said.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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thank you so much, seren! :)Sharyn
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written my friend there are many people that are begging on the streets in today's society this is very sad well done and congrats on the win my friend regards Jill
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This is very well written my friend there are many people that are begging on the streets in today's society this is very sad well done and congrats on the win my friend regards Jill
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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thanks Jill! :)S
Comment from Pili Pubul
Oustanding , moving and unfortunately very realistic.
Excellent style and word choice ,powerful imagery
of what unfortunately has become too common.
" this world has become to much for me " sad. Great poem.
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Oustanding , moving and unfortunately very realistic.
Excellent style and word choice ,powerful imagery
of what unfortunately has become too common.
" this world has become to much for me " sad. Great poem.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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thank you so much, Pili - I REALLY appreciate your reading, understanding, reviewing AND the fabulous SIX! :)Sharyn
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You are so welcome poet....
Comment from GWHARGIS
We have that problem here as well. Seven churches in my little county host something called room at the inn. It is where homeless people come to a church and are given shelter for the night, a hot cooked breakfast, a bagged lunch, then come back for a hot cooked dinner. Each church hosts for two weeks. My church doesn't call it charity. We list it as having friends over. Very rewarding for all involved.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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We have that problem here as well. Seven churches in my little county host something called room at the inn. It is where homeless people come to a church and are given shelter for the night, a hot cooked breakfast, a bagged lunch, then come back for a hot cooked dinner. Each church hosts for two weeks. My church doesn't call it charity. We list it as having friends over. Very rewarding for all involved.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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What a lovely idea GW. I wish more people could find it within their hearts to reach out like that. :)Sharyn
Comment from DALLAS01
Congratulations on this win. You have encapsulated in this write an UN-nerving dilemma that I think many of us struggle with: (I feel bad but am still able to walk away.) I have questioned this stubborn flaw in my makeup on more that one occasion. Then there are times that I overcompensate in other, unrelated areas of my life. Guess it's all about progress not perfection.
Love the way you put this together, reminded me of a haibun.
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Congratulations on this win. You have encapsulated in this write an UN-nerving dilemma that I think many of us struggle with: (I feel bad but am still able to walk away.) I have questioned this stubborn flaw in my makeup on more that one occasion. Then there are times that I overcompensate in other, unrelated areas of my life. Guess it's all about progress not perfection.
Love the way you put this together, reminded me of a haibun.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much, Dallas, for your response to this one - and for your lovely SIX! We have such mixed feelings, don't we? :)Sharyn
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I often flip like a coin. Heads one day, tails the next.
Comment from RominaItalia
You not only covered the requirements for the contest, but you covered this moment exactly as it is, for many of us. Your poem AND notes are perfectly written. Thank you.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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You not only covered the requirements for the contest, but you covered this moment exactly as it is, for many of us. Your poem AND notes are perfectly written. Thank you.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Ciao my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from amada
Congratulations in winning the contest. This is a very truthful work with lines that jump out for attention. My fave, "and made-cheap-in-China "must have's"
sewn by children." I choked in this one.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Congratulations in winning the contest. This is a very truthful work with lines that jump out for attention. My fave, "and made-cheap-in-China "must have's"
sewn by children." I choked in this one.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2013
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Bless you, Amada - thank you so much! :)Sharyn