All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "It's Time"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from MelissaBickel
Well there is nothing vulgar about this hot and passionate piece of poetry. In fact it is written so well, my toes curled. Now that is taking Jazz to a new level. Such an appropriate poem for such a lady as she was...so sultry and passionate.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Well there is nothing vulgar about this hot and passionate piece of poetry. In fact it is written so well, my toes curled. Now that is taking Jazz to a new level. Such an appropriate poem for such a lady as she was...so sultry and passionate.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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bless you for your lovely SIX Melissa! love to curl your toes, any time! :) Sharyn
Comment from HittorX
WoW! Mercy! Now that was pure pleasure to read. The flow was awesome, the words beautiful, captivating and magical! Well done! Now, I must read more of your material. Whew... I need a smoke. :-)
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WoW! Mercy! Now that was pure pleasure to read. The flow was awesome, the words beautiful, captivating and magical! Well done! Now, I must read more of your material. Whew... I need a smoke. :-)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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off to the cold shower with you now!! :) Sharyn
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Rofl, cold showers are a lie! they don't help. LoL
A pleasure to read your work.
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agreed - I think the idea is that they feel so damned bad they take your mind off everything else!
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Now that I concur with you one thousand and ten percent
Comment from nomi338
Oh my goodness! It is late at night and I am really thinking about waking up my wife and trying to act out this hot poem I just read. On second thought I 'd better not even try. I'm afraid that my best days are behind me and I would only wind up embarrassing myself and disappointing her. It is a great romantic and scintillating poem though. It has an old man wishing for younger days. Outstanding!
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Oh my goodness! It is late at night and I am really thinking about waking up my wife and trying to act out this hot poem I just read. On second thought I 'd better not even try. I'm afraid that my best days are behind me and I would only wind up embarrassing myself and disappointing her. It is a great romantic and scintillating poem though. It has an old man wishing for younger days. Outstanding!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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thank you so much, nomi! go on ... be a devil! :) Sharyn
Comment from Alexander E Poet
I thought this was a erotic and romantic I thought the words were very expressive and condoning of the hottest time, I enjoyed and appreciated your delivery of this piece of poetry very well done. Alexander
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I thought this was a erotic and romantic I thought the words were very expressive and condoning of the hottest time, I enjoyed and appreciated your delivery of this piece of poetry very well done. Alexander
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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thx so much Alex - glad you enjoyed it! :) Sharyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful free verse poem about the anticipation that makes the union that much more enjoyable. congratulations on your win. want to share some of those earnings? my account is anemic, lol
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this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful free verse poem about the anticipation that makes the union that much more enjoyable. congratulations on your win. want to share some of those earnings? my account is anemic, lol
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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mine too, sweets - spent all day just promoting this one yesterday - my eyes are rolling around in my head, and I feel like a slot machine addict! :) S
Comment from misscookie
This is a winner If I must say so myself.
I love the picture that you choose to go with yoiur poem. It is perfecy.You capture my attention with ever line.Thank you for sharing.
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This is a winner If I must say so myself.
I love the picture that you choose to go with yoiur poem. It is perfecy.You capture my attention with ever line.Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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thx so much misscookie! :) Sharyn
Comment from rama devi
Oh wow, girl, you certainly excel in passionate love poems and bravo for your much deserving win. This is awesome to rad aloud--musical with jazz elements and superb random internal rhyming perfectly timed for bluesy cadence. Superb tone, imagery, pohrasing and style. Very original and dramatic. I can HEAr it read aloud even when reading it silently!
Bravo bravo! You go!
Favorite lines
you look up at me
in faint surprise
as my disguise is blown
and notes of black and white
are thrown, like confetti of desire
Wow.
Kudos.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Oh wow, girl, you certainly excel in passionate love poems and bravo for your much deserving win. This is awesome to rad aloud--musical with jazz elements and superb random internal rhyming perfectly timed for bluesy cadence. Superb tone, imagery, pohrasing and style. Very original and dramatic. I can HEAr it read aloud even when reading it silently!
Bravo bravo! You go!
Favorite lines
you look up at me
in faint surprise
as my disguise is blown
and notes of black and white
are thrown, like confetti of desire
Wow.
Kudos.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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wow! rd! when a six comes from you, I'm totally honored!!!
Blessings,
Sharyn
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Comment from Lady & Louis
*pant pant pant*
Is it just me or is it hot in here?
Damn, Sharyn, you've a hell of a way with words. I don't do much reviewing these days, but I'm definitely adding you to my fan list. This is seriously good stuff, and I see I don't need to say "good luck in the contest" - I can say instead I'm not at ALL surprised you won, so congratulations!
So it's the clarinet that's glowing, eh? Never heard it called that before...
Has anyone thought that's a picture of Marilyn yet? ;) I'm glad you used it; I just had a look at the Wiki article about Jean Harlow and she's much more interesting than the old tales about her would suggest.
Louise :)
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*pant pant pant*
Is it just me or is it hot in here?
Damn, Sharyn, you've a hell of a way with words. I don't do much reviewing these days, but I'm definitely adding you to my fan list. This is seriously good stuff, and I see I don't need to say "good luck in the contest" - I can say instead I'm not at ALL surprised you won, so congratulations!
So it's the clarinet that's glowing, eh? Never heard it called that before...
Has anyone thought that's a picture of Marilyn yet? ;) I'm glad you used it; I just had a look at the Wiki article about Jean Harlow and she's much more interesting than the old tales about her would suggest.
Louise :)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Actually I was looking for Jean Harlow and Marilyn popped up! (Jean has a little double chin in her sexiest photos, so marilyn won by a touch!) thx so much my dears - I'll return the favor - and off to the cold shower with you (both)!
:)))) Sharyn
Comment from 9999pool
Bogey and Bacall..nah..the poem said a lot without them, LOL. As usual the contest got rules. But you wrote without the vulgar but hinges on the vulgar, there was heat and smoke in the tavern or somewhere, where eyes can meet and the desires are satisfy by way of a fantasy...and the not yet, not, not..is getting on the readers nerve..when is it going to happen? LOL.
And when it happened finally "for tonight's sublime and yes -it's time". I was asked to use the word ' sublime' for 'Ode to Vincent van Gogh' poem to describe his paintings...now I know why they said "not yet, not yet..not yet..and by the time Vincent was dead..he was still waiting.
Your hero did not went away satisfied though cos there is a BAD TWIST. This guy had been playing all the scenes in his music and his mind..it was just a figment of his imagination. No he is not big time having a real lady there, my friend.
I concluded this way to give the poem the passionate love as spoken by his music and the very vivid lady in his mind that the music serenades to only. Good vision and the poem simple as a b c to appreciate. Cheers Ritchie.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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Bogey and Bacall..nah..the poem said a lot without them, LOL. As usual the contest got rules. But you wrote without the vulgar but hinges on the vulgar, there was heat and smoke in the tavern or somewhere, where eyes can meet and the desires are satisfy by way of a fantasy...and the not yet, not, not..is getting on the readers nerve..when is it going to happen? LOL.
And when it happened finally "for tonight's sublime and yes -it's time". I was asked to use the word ' sublime' for 'Ode to Vincent van Gogh' poem to describe his paintings...now I know why they said "not yet, not yet..not yet..and by the time Vincent was dead..he was still waiting.
Your hero did not went away satisfied though cos there is a BAD TWIST. This guy had been playing all the scenes in his music and his mind..it was just a figment of his imagination. No he is not big time having a real lady there, my friend.
I concluded this way to give the poem the passionate love as spoken by his music and the very vivid lady in his mind that the music serenades to only. Good vision and the poem simple as a b c to appreciate. Cheers Ritchie.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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oooh what a pessimist! :) Sharyn
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LOL. As a visionary poet, we must not limit the obvious to be just the obvious, my dear. "Sometimes the obvious can be most misleading" - remember Sir Arthur Conan Doyle? Sometimes the pessimist is smarter than the optimist when it comes to living a life here, LOL. Cheers from cheesszzky Ritchie.
P.S. I hope my conclusion of the ending is visionary enough for this truly passionate exquisite poem. LOL.
Comment from Oldsteamer
That was beautiful.
For some reason I heard the start or Rhapsody in Blue
just the beginning with the clarinet.
Nothing is more sultry than Marilyn
and I'm stating to think the next great
thing is you.
You've got soul baby.
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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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That was beautiful.
For some reason I heard the start or Rhapsody in Blue
just the beginning with the clarinet.
Nothing is more sultry than Marilyn
and I'm stating to think the next great
thing is you.
You've got soul baby.
- R -
Comment Written 11-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2012
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well bless you, dear - I always did love Rhapsody in Blue ... and I'm a sucker for clarinet AND sax!!! Glad to share soul with you Reg!! :)) Sharyn