All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Colors of Life"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from IndyElsie
I love this poem! i remember those coloring pages and the voice of the girl really comes through. I love the topic, I love how you approached it from those dreaded ccd classes. Well done. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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I love this poem! i remember those coloring pages and the voice of the girl really comes through. I love the topic, I love how you approached it from those dreaded ccd classes. Well done. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Indy!
Comment from sunnilicious
Oh my goodness.... I totally loved this poem. It's so cute. Adorable perspective. A child must form their own personality. Nicely written. Excellent work.
In case you didn't already figure it out, cut the PS lines out and this would be wonderful Children's Poetry too.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Oh my goodness.... I totally loved this poem. It's so cute. Adorable perspective. A child must form their own personality. Nicely written. Excellent work.
In case you didn't already figure it out, cut the PS lines out and this would be wonderful Children's Poetry too.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Sunni!
Comment from judiverse
This is so delightful. You captured the speech and thinking of the seven-year-old very well. Cute comparison of Jesus and Santa Claus. Neat attention to the capital H for Him. The little girl has a hard time keeping all the rules in mind, although she's very pleasant and tries. the confusion over Jesus and Santa is clever. Red is for the devil, according to the teacher, and blue is for Jesus. Hard for the little girl to comprehend. Great job of showing the confusions, and then the expectations of the teacher. Best wishes in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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This is so delightful. You captured the speech and thinking of the seven-year-old very well. Cute comparison of Jesus and Santa Claus. Neat attention to the capital H for Him. The little girl has a hard time keeping all the rules in mind, although she's very pleasant and tries. the confusion over Jesus and Santa is clever. Red is for the devil, according to the teacher, and blue is for Jesus. Hard for the little girl to comprehend. Great job of showing the confusions, and then the expectations of the teacher. Best wishes in the contest. judi
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Judi!
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This has a very good message about how we squash children's creativity and try to mold them into little adults. It also speaks to acceptance of others. Thank Him we are not all the same. Good lick in the contest!!! Debbie
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This has a very good message about how we squash children's creativity and try to mold them into little adults. It also speaks to acceptance of others. Thank Him we are not all the same. Good lick in the contest!!! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Deb!
Comment from Oldsteamer
That's awesome .
I didn't se that coming at all.
The self conversation is adorable.
The teacher is a trip.
Yes coloring outside the lines Is very bad.
Regards,
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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That's awesome .
I didn't se that coming at all.
The self conversation is adorable.
The teacher is a trip.
Yes coloring outside the lines Is very bad.
Regards,
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Thx OS!!:) bad bad bad me!! :)))))))
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Author,
I enjoyed this talk with the little 7-year old girl. Little kids ramble on, don't they? And that's exactly how I see your poem, rambling, with hardly a pause for breath.
I thought the interruptions for a capital "H" were cute. And I like the idea that Jesus wouldn't mind if she didn't stay inside the lines. The Sunday School teacher insisted that Jesus had a blue dress... why? I guess we like to fit kids into a mold, our mold for them. They should feel free to use any color they want. Only devils are red? What a thing for a Sunday School teacher to say! My, my. What damage we do with our little tongues!
I say, let's do away with lines! That is what your poem is all about. Live your life exactly the way you want to, and disregard molds that people set for you.
Jesus gave freedom, but people take that away. Salvation is simple. God wants followers, not robots.
blessings
Kimbob
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Hi Mystery Author,
I enjoyed this talk with the little 7-year old girl. Little kids ramble on, don't they? And that's exactly how I see your poem, rambling, with hardly a pause for breath.
I thought the interruptions for a capital "H" were cute. And I like the idea that Jesus wouldn't mind if she didn't stay inside the lines. The Sunday School teacher insisted that Jesus had a blue dress... why? I guess we like to fit kids into a mold, our mold for them. They should feel free to use any color they want. Only devils are red? What a thing for a Sunday School teacher to say! My, my. What damage we do with our little tongues!
I say, let's do away with lines! That is what your poem is all about. Live your life exactly the way you want to, and disregard molds that people set for you.
Jesus gave freedom, but people take that away. Salvation is simple. God wants followers, not robots.
blessings
Kimbob
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Kimbob - you've got the message!
Comment from guinea
I thought this was well written from a child;s pov. They really do have an innocense about them. Shows deep thinking. The imagery is great.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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I thought this was well written from a child;s pov. They really do have an innocense about them. Shows deep thinking. The imagery is great.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx guinea!
Comment from Cleo Belle
What a lovely lot of nonsense thoughts, told wonderfully, and childishly, and simply. I found this really exquisite, and love the directness of the child's viewpoint.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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What a lovely lot of nonsense thoughts, told wonderfully, and childishly, and simply. I found this really exquisite, and love the directness of the child's viewpoint.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Cleo!
Comment from c_lucas
Most picture of Jesus has him in a white gown. This very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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Most picture of Jesus has him in a white gown. This very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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The Catholics always put him in blue Charlie ... and so do C of E for that matter ... he's only in white when he's preaching - blue when he's praying (Catholic pics were a source of great entertainment to me - though I'm C of E)
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Thank you for the info.
Comment from adewpearl
Sadly, there ARE teachers like that, who drain the spirit of creativity and the love of learning out of children. You portray this wretched old grump extremely well.
I love the little girl narrator, who tries so hard to please but who also knows her own heart and who knows what colors she would like Jesus to wear :-)
To accuse a child of being a little devil, that is just abuse. I love the child's innocence as it contrasts with this old biddy of a woman, too rigid to be allowed near children.
I like that the little girl keeps slipping up and having to correct the capital H in He. LOL This is extremely well written :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Sadly, there ARE teachers like that, who drain the spirit of creativity and the love of learning out of children. You portray this wretched old grump extremely well.
I love the little girl narrator, who tries so hard to please but who also knows her own heart and who knows what colors she would like Jesus to wear :-)
To accuse a child of being a little devil, that is just abuse. I love the child's innocence as it contrasts with this old biddy of a woman, too rigid to be allowed near children.
I like that the little girl keeps slipping up and having to correct the capital H in He. LOL This is extremely well written :-) Brooke
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Brooke - this was just a fun off-the-cuff piece - figured "spirituality" means a lot more than saying "oh how beautiful" :)