All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "We'll Take Two!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from S.Yocom
This is an excellent example of how to write a good Quatern, Anonymous Writer. I love the repeating line, which works well in every stanza. Very nicely done.
Sally
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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This is an excellent example of how to write a good Quatern, Anonymous Writer. I love the repeating line, which works well in every stanza. Very nicely done.
Sally
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Sally - so glad you're a believer in eternal summers!
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is simply a beautiful poem - and I adore this form.
The rhyme is lovely and the lilt indicates perfect metering. Your choice of repeating line is very clever, and your presentation gorgeous!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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This is simply a beautiful poem - and I adore this form.
The rhyme is lovely and the lilt indicates perfect metering. Your choice of repeating line is very clever, and your presentation gorgeous!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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hey Dawn - glad you're into summers as much as I am!
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You are welcome!
Comment from Gungalo
And summer does appear in that repeating line of this very well written quatern. Beautiful picture and it signifies the warmth of summer. Awesome write.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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And summer does appear in that repeating line of this very well written quatern. Beautiful picture and it signifies the warmth of summer. Awesome write.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Gungalo!
Comment from Maustin
"Now let's fly south, out-run the sun,
To swim all year in turquoise blue,
And please tell Winter we're not done,
One Summer's gone, so we'll take two!"
Lovely work here. It is definitely a great thing to do. Love the lines above. Make me want to book something right now. Great presentatiion. Very inviting. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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"Now let's fly south, out-run the sun,
To swim all year in turquoise blue,
And please tell Winter we're not done,
One Summer's gone, so we'll take two!"
Lovely work here. It is definitely a great thing to do. Love the lines above. Make me want to book something right now. Great presentatiion. Very inviting. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Maustin - as you can tell, I LOVE summers!
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So welcome. I bet. *;)
Comment from Katherine2
Captivating write. I love the line we'll take two. I really enjoyed how summer can last in this poem, that we don't have to give up summer. How soon summer ends and with your words I felt like I could always have summer.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Captivating write. I love the line we'll take two. I really enjoyed how summer can last in this poem, that we don't have to give up summer. How soon summer ends and with your words I felt like I could always have summer.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Well why not? Thanks so much Katherine - so glad you enjoyed the concept of eternal summers! :)
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
Why not, indeed?
Now let's fly south, out-run the sun,
To swim all year in turquoise blue,
And please tell Winter we're not done,
One Summer's gone, so we'll take two!
Sounds like the perfect plan. Enjoy you Labor Day weekend in the sun!
cheers
js
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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Why not, indeed?
Now let's fly south, out-run the sun,
To swim all year in turquoise blue,
And please tell Winter we're not done,
One Summer's gone, so we'll take two!
Sounds like the perfect plan. Enjoy you Labor Day weekend in the sun!
cheers
js
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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well hell yes! :)
Comment from ennahanid
You'll take two but no thanks here, our seasons are not regular seasons at all and I must admit though I really miss them. This is lovely your Quatrain and beautifully presented and it was a pleasure to read you this afternoon - Dinah
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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You'll take two but no thanks here, our seasons are not regular seasons at all and I must admit though I really miss them. This is lovely your Quatrain and beautifully presented and it was a pleasure to read you this afternoon - Dinah
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2012
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thx Dinah!
Comment from Rembrandt
Excellent syllable count and movement of the key sentence through the stanzas.
Rhyme is spot on and not forced.
The idea is clever, especially for the snowbirds that flock to our home in Florida.
Of course, I can not know who you are, but I wish you the best in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Excellent syllable count and movement of the key sentence through the stanzas.
Rhyme is spot on and not forced.
The idea is clever, especially for the snowbirds that flock to our home in Florida.
Of course, I can not know who you are, but I wish you the best in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Rembrandt! aaah, you're a snowbird too then!
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No, I'm the heart-not-functioning-well-and- happy-to-feel-the-humidity-hug-me-when-I-walk-out-the-door-lady. The expression snowbird applies to my really wonderful ol' friends that I love seeing here in Florida.
Comment from jb wade
How marvelous. What splendid artwork. This poem makes me want to run away from home. The line 'Now let's fly south, out-run the sun' is great. Thanks for such a good read at the end of a long hot day.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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How marvelous. What splendid artwork. This poem makes me want to run away from home. The line 'Now let's fly south, out-run the sun' is great. Thanks for such a good read at the end of a long hot day.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx jb!
Comment from snemes
I agree. One summer is not enough. I've often said that I would never see another winter if I ever won the lottery. I enjoyed all of your wonderful daydreams about a tropical paradise. Time vanishes at double speed. This is so true when we are enjoying ourselves.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I agree. One summer is not enough. I've often said that I would never see another winter if I ever won the lottery. I enjoyed all of your wonderful daydreams about a tropical paradise. Time vanishes at double speed. This is so true when we are enjoying ourselves.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx my dear!