Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Coat-Tail Ghost"A collection of my poems
54 total reviews
Comment from dmt1967
i like that poem it was very well written and very well planned out i like the way it told a story very smoothly and i like the drawing thank you
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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i like that poem it was very well written and very well planned out i like the way it told a story very smoothly and i like the drawing thank you
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from burneymac29
This was a very engaging poem that I believe could easily be adapted into a feature length novel. It has everything you need. I still enjoyed it as a poem too though. Great pacing and i was hooked from the very beginning
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This was a very engaging poem that I believe could easily be adapted into a feature length novel. It has everything you need. I still enjoyed it as a poem too though. Great pacing and i was hooked from the very beginning
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind words. I would never have the stamina for a novel...
Steve
Comment from janalma
Loved this ghost story. My dad used to tell stories like this when I was a kid. Oh, the power of the imagination. I laughed at the conclusion of the tale. Best story-in-a-poem I've read so far. Loved the vernacular.
Some of your verses read smoother than others, but they all work, in my inexpert opinion.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Loved this ghost story. My dad used to tell stories like this when I was a kid. Oh, the power of the imagination. I laughed at the conclusion of the tale. Best story-in-a-poem I've read so far. Loved the vernacular.
Some of your verses read smoother than others, but they all work, in my inexpert opinion.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from terry drake
The poem was well constructed and carried a nice cadence throughout with good rhyme choices. You should be proud of this offering and despite its length was an easy read.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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The poem was well constructed and carried a nice cadence throughout with good rhyme choices. You should be proud of this offering and despite its length was an easy read.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from Taurean Monkey
That's a great (if a tad long) story told in a poem. You're obviously from the UK, with some of the colloquialisms you've used (loony bin, etc), I was worried I wouldn't understand some of them when I read your author notes, but just smiled as I read. Great quatrains and rhyme scheme used to tell your story, which I enjoyed. Thanks
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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That's a great (if a tad long) story told in a poem. You're obviously from the UK, with some of the colloquialisms you've used (loony bin, etc), I was worried I wouldn't understand some of them when I read your author notes, but just smiled as I read. Great quatrains and rhyme scheme used to tell your story, which I enjoyed. Thanks
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Well my branch of the UK is on the other side of the world...
Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from wiljacro
HI! kiwisteveh.This is just the tale for a campfire yarn or for telling in a firelit room during a thunderstorm. Plenty of atmosphere but, also lots of laughs. A great read, well written. Good luck in the Contest! wiljacro.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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HI! kiwisteveh.This is just the tale for a campfire yarn or for telling in a firelit room during a thunderstorm. Plenty of atmosphere but, also lots of laughs. A great read, well written. Good luck in the Contest! wiljacro.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from appuhere
ha ha..... outstanding effort.... you made me smile.... the flow of the words was too good..... rhyming was awesome, our choice of words were good too.... but the best part of the poem was the story you narrated through it.... its really a good one and funny too.....:)
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ha ha..... outstanding effort.... you made me smile.... the flow of the words was too good..... rhyming was awesome, our choice of words were good too.... but the best part of the poem was the story you narrated through it.... its really a good one and funny too.....:)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much for the generous review and the six stars - much appreciated.
Steve
Comment from BadEducation
Amusing and enjoyable. An entertaining read. The story flowed particularly well and it was a pleasure reading it. I also appreciated the rhyming.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Amusing and enjoyable. An entertaining read. The story flowed particularly well and it was a pleasure reading it. I also appreciated the rhyming.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind words.
Steve
Comment from ennahanid
This deserves a 6 but I don't have one to give I'm afraid. This was a terrific story and a similar one I have heard before but not nearly a good a telling as this one, I just loved it, the voice was brilliant and I thank you so much for the smile on my face this morning - Dinah
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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This deserves a 6 but I don't have one to give I'm afraid. This was a terrific story and a similar one I have heard before but not nearly a good a telling as this one, I just loved it, the voice was brilliant and I thank you so much for the smile on my face this morning - Dinah
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Dinah - I'm glad to have raised a smile.
I appreciate the virtual six as much as a real one!
Steve
Comment from ShaneSC
Fun poem. Funny, cute, entertaining and with a great ending. It is obvious the author put some work on it. It flows nicely, taking you along without a hitch. The rhymes are simple, but they are perfect for the piece...I loved it. I felt for a second I was at a campfire myself, listening to it... The scariest part? The phone on the wall and no internet verses, without a doubt...
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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Fun poem. Funny, cute, entertaining and with a great ending. It is obvious the author put some work on it. It flows nicely, taking you along without a hitch. The rhymes are simple, but they are perfect for the piece...I loved it. I felt for a second I was at a campfire myself, listening to it... The scariest part? The phone on the wall and no internet verses, without a doubt...
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2012
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I guess I should have had 'we didn't even have computers' as my scary climax then!
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve