Old Decrepit Woman Revised.
Written about a painting I saw.177 total reviews
Comment from angel123
This is an interesting spiritual poem. Although it is not written about an actual person, it is a reality for so many like her in the world. I enjoyed reading your poem and it flows well. Your artwork choice really enhances your poem.
Angel123
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
This is an interesting spiritual poem. Although it is not written about an actual person, it is a reality for so many like her in the world. I enjoyed reading your poem and it flows well. Your artwork choice really enhances your poem.
Angel123
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you angel.
Comment from mermaids
Thank you for sharing this form of poetry, you have given me some ideas for poems here. You grasp the essence of life here, many in the world are in this lady's situation. Your poem gives the reader much to think about.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
Thank you for sharing this form of poetry, you have given me some ideas for poems here. You grasp the essence of life here, many in the world are in this lady's situation. Your poem gives the reader much to think about.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you mermaids.
Comment from stephybs
This is really very good! And yet also very sad, But one thing is for sure is what we see through our eyes we feel with our hearts. Very touching, Stephy
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
This is really very good! And yet also very sad, But one thing is for sure is what we see through our eyes we feel with our hearts. Very touching, Stephy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thanks Stephy.
Comment from Melspoems
This is an interesting poem.
Full of imagery,
"bruised and beaten baby" great alliteration and very intense line.
"now decaying with worms in the terrible terrain" another good line for imagery and alliteration.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
This is an interesting poem.
Full of imagery,
"bruised and beaten baby" great alliteration and very intense line.
"now decaying with worms in the terrible terrain" another good line for imagery and alliteration.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you Mel.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
MY GOODNESS! THIS IS SO SAD, HOWEVER I THINK This IS A GREAT POEM WITH EXCELLENT WORD'S SELECTION AND EVEN FLOW. THE PICTURE IS THE PERFECT ONE.
WELL DONE!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
MY GOODNESS! THIS IS SO SAD, HOWEVER I THINK This IS A GREAT POEM WITH EXCELLENT WORD'S SELECTION AND EVEN FLOW. THE PICTURE IS THE PERFECT ONE.
WELL DONE!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you Aurora.
Comment from bayoupoet
This poem is very well written
with such deep, descriptive
imagery. The painting really
must have entered your heart.
sandra
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
This poem is very well written
with such deep, descriptive
imagery. The painting really
must have entered your heart.
sandra
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you Sandra.
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You are very welcome!
Comment from Herb
I thought this very visual and very real. The repetition worked well and created impact. Never heard of a 'Ekprhastic' before (neither has word0 so I also learned something which is always good.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
I thought this very visual and very real. The repetition worked well and created impact. Never heard of a 'Ekprhastic' before (neither has word0 so I also learned something which is always good.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you Herb.
Comment from Speedpause
Wow. When I kept seeing this listed, just the name alone made me not want to read it. I'm not really sure why. But then I felt like I had to, and it's such a sad story within a poem. I can't say I enjoyed the concept, because it was sad, but I enjoyed your writing. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
Wow. When I kept seeing this listed, just the name alone made me not want to read it. I'm not really sure why. But then I felt like I had to, and it's such a sad story within a poem. I can't say I enjoyed the concept, because it was sad, but I enjoyed your writing. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you Speed.
Comment from dbmccarter
A very vivid and disturbing poem. I liked that you gave the information in the notes. It was interesting. The repetition of "Old decrepit woman" was effective.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
A very vivid and disturbing poem. I liked that you gave the information in the notes. It was interesting. The repetition of "Old decrepit woman" was effective.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you carter.
Comment from Connie C
Such powerful imagery you have here that it was almost painful
to read about this "old decrepit woman" and what she has to
endure, a snake pit, her possessions stolen, decaying with worms.
Your author's notes were interesting and helped me through a
second reading. I'm glad this isn't about an actual person. Great
picture--so much wisdom in her face. Connie
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
Such powerful imagery you have here that it was almost painful
to read about this "old decrepit woman" and what she has to
endure, a snake pit, her possessions stolen, decaying with worms.
Your author's notes were interesting and helped me through a
second reading. I'm glad this isn't about an actual person. Great
picture--so much wisdom in her face. Connie
Comment Written 26-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2011
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Thank you connie.