Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Dead Duck"A collection of my poems
46 total reviews
Comment from Airy
A good poem and very funny. No doubt those who read it would laugh. You pretty much grab attention of the reader in the first verse and the picture just makes it worse. The name fit the picture too well and I give you lots of credit! Good job!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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A good poem and very funny. No doubt those who read it would laugh. You pretty much grab attention of the reader in the first verse and the picture just makes it worse. The name fit the picture too well and I give you lots of credit! Good job!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind words and the six stars!
Steve
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It's no problem at all.
Comment from KiwiGal
Worth waiting for! It's been too long between drinks, mate.
I read it slowly, savouring I didn't know what re the ending. When I got to the 'bucks' I starting thinking of something 'dear', so you caught me off guard, which makes the ending more delicious. Never saw that coming.
I think the artwork is absolutely perfick for the tone of the poem.
And keep 'em coming... please.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Worth waiting for! It's been too long between drinks, mate.
I read it slowly, savouring I didn't know what re the ending. When I got to the 'bucks' I starting thinking of something 'dear', so you caught me off guard, which makes the ending more delicious. Never saw that coming.
I think the artwork is absolutely perfick for the tone of the poem.
And keep 'em coming... please.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Heard this joke for the first time a few weeks ago, although I hear it is an oldie - thought it would work well as a poem and it has certainly got a (mostly) good reaction. There are some funny people in the world who think that the last two lines don't rhyme!
You may have missed a couple of pieces I wrote for blind contests....
Steve
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I'll have to go back and check. Worth spending the time on.... In the meantime I'll dig up some of my jokes I think you'd make a good poem out of..
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I'll have to go back and check. Worth spending the time on.... In the meantime I'll dig up some of my jokes I think you'd make a good poem out of..
Comment from chrissy8
This is absolutely hilarious!! You managed to put a joke into your poem which is a feat within itself. A whimsical and cute treat to wake up to this morning. Thank you so much for writing this poem and sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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This is absolutely hilarious!! You managed to put a joke into your poem which is a feat within itself. A whimsical and cute treat to wake up to this morning. Thank you so much for writing this poem and sharing!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. Glad you enjoyed my piece of fun.
Steve
Comment from LadyCosgrove
Exactly the lift I needed today lol
A brilliant and funny story in rhyme, guaranteed to produce a laugh. Thanks for sharing this one. x
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Exactly the lift I needed today lol
A brilliant and funny story in rhyme, guaranteed to produce a laugh. Thanks for sharing this one. x
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from barkingdog
Kiwisteveh...
What can I say? I am shaking my head thinking, he didn't really do THAT.
CAT scan ... LAB Report.
I was laughing enough just with the dead duck and the parade of animals that the vet was bringing in as 'experts'.
You are some 'wild and crazy guy' as Steve Martin would say.
I was having a bit of a down day and now I am feeling so much better. Thank you for the visuals and light humor delivered in perfect rhyme and meter.:)
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Kiwisteveh...
What can I say? I am shaking my head thinking, he didn't really do THAT.
CAT scan ... LAB Report.
I was laughing enough just with the dead duck and the parade of animals that the vet was bringing in as 'experts'.
You are some 'wild and crazy guy' as Steve Martin would say.
I was having a bit of a down day and now I am feeling so much better. Thank you for the visuals and light humor delivered in perfect rhyme and meter.:)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thank you.
Timing must have been right on this one - I have had a few people comment that it brightened up their Sunday morning.
Steve
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I always get so angry when my sixes are gone. There are just too many good writers and not enough gold stars. I loved it. Every vet in the country would post it in his office if it was printed in a frame or something ready to hang. :) barking dog
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I always get so angry when my sixes are gone. There are just too many good writers and not enough gold stars. I loved it. Every vet in the country would post it in his office if it was printed in a frame or something ready to hang. :) barking dog
Comment from bob cullen
It was a good piece of poetry until the last line, it then became great.
Your rhyme and balance is superb. The reality of a visit to the vet spot on, particularly when it comes to the bill. The CATscan and LABreport were worth waiting for.
I love humour, especially when it is this good
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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It was a good piece of poetry until the last line, it then became great.
Your rhyme and balance is superb. The reality of a visit to the vet spot on, particularly when it comes to the bill. The CATscan and LABreport were worth waiting for.
I love humour, especially when it is this good
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Bob - glad you enjoyed my piece of fun.
Steve
