Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Poetry in the Blood"A collection of my poems
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Comment from Cheryl Daphine
Wonderful piece,I pictured Bella Lugosi, at the type writer in this one.Structure,flow and rhyme perfect,the contents empeccable.I laughed imagining 'Bella' trying to put out the flames.Good poem.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Wonderful piece,I pictured Bella Lugosi, at the type writer in this one.Structure,flow and rhyme perfect,the contents empeccable.I laughed imagining 'Bella' trying to put out the flames.Good poem.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the Bela Lugosi image - I started writing a quite different poem about poetic obsession, but the tragic tale just took over!
Comment from ~Dovey
This is an awesome quatrain contest entry, Steve. Your rhyme scheme and word choices flow naturally and you've woven a stellar tale. I really enjoyed the irony of the ending, but this was my favorite stanza:
Alliteration's lovely lilt
And onomatopoeia's rage
Do, like a knife sunk to the hilt,
Pour forth emotion on the page.
Excellent work! Good luck in the contest. :)
Kim
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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This is an awesome quatrain contest entry, Steve. Your rhyme scheme and word choices flow naturally and you've woven a stellar tale. I really enjoyed the irony of the ending, but this was my favorite stanza:
Alliteration's lovely lilt
And onomatopoeia's rage
Do, like a knife sunk to the hilt,
Pour forth emotion on the page.
Excellent work! Good luck in the contest. :)
Kim
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you - I started writing a quite different poem about poetic obsession, but the tragic tale just took over!
Comment from danpald
The poem is well in style to tale
The movement flows indeed
Yet the theme is dark to read
Seem the poet is suicide to be
I read the poem then again
Find the poet is at wits end
Perhaps the flow is to move as blood
From the wrist and not the heart
So the poet does form his craft
Flowing the blood of image well
Yet in the end the poem seems right
Only to discover burnt for not of the heart
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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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The poem is well in style to tale
The movement flows indeed
Yet the theme is dark to read
Seem the poet is suicide to be
I read the poem then again
Find the poet is at wits end
Perhaps the flow is to move as blood
From the wrist and not the heart
So the poet does form his craft
Flowing the blood of image well
Yet in the end the poem seems right
Only to discover burnt for not of the heart
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Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you - seems we are all driven to poetry!
Comment from bluerose675
Wow, this is excellent and truly worthy of a win. It's very cleverly penned and I like the twist at the end "fate's final joke". Good luck in the contest.
Norma :)
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Wow, this is excellent and truly worthy of a win. It's very cleverly penned and I like the twist at the end "fate's final joke". Good luck in the contest.
Norma :)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you! I only posted it 5 minutes ago, so it's gratifying that my first review is a six!
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You're welcome :)