Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Coming Home Again"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
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Comment from LairDog5
You did a lot with the 200 word restriction and the words you had to use. You've managed to create a very touching and deep story that held my interest to the end. This seems to be a strong contender. Good luck.
Regards
Lary
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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You did a lot with the 200 word restriction and the words you had to use. You've managed to create a very touching and deep story that held my interest to the end. This seems to be a strong contender. Good luck.
Regards
Lary
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Lary
Thank you so much for the kind review. I am pleased that you enjoyed it. Thanks again Carol
Comment from Belinda
I do admire your quick mind and creativity, Carol. How could you incorporate those seemingly unmatched words into a short piece worth reading and worth thinking about? In such a short time, too. I owe you a congratulations.
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I do admire your quick mind and creativity, Carol. How could you incorporate those seemingly unmatched words into a short piece worth reading and worth thinking about? In such a short time, too. I owe you a congratulations.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Belinda
This story came from somewhere within...I do not know...when I started writing I had no idea where I was going and then it was there. Crazy, huh? Thanks for reading and for the kind comments. Carol
Comment from c_lucas
Some children are born in Hell. They have very little chance of escaping it. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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Some children are born in Hell. They have very little chance of escaping it. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Charlie Thanks for the wonderful comments and for understanding what I was trying to help the reader see. I think I said it best when I said "No justice in the ghetto."
Thanks again Carol
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You're welcome, Carol.
Comment from Readywriter52
Alcohol and drug abuse can be hard on a family. Her father didn't help when he ended up in prison. Both of them might as well dead. The twins are lucky to have a sister who can take care of them.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Alcohol and drug abuse can be hard on a family. Her father didn't help when he ended up in prison. Both of them might as well dead. The twins are lucky to have a sister who can take care of them.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
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Readywriter
Thanks for the kind review. I greatly appreciate it. Carol
Comment from adewpearl
Carol, this is an excellent flash fiction story, and I would have been impressed just because you wrote a 200 word story that is so compelling - but add to this that you used all those words from the eclectic list of required words, and not one of them seemed forced - now I'm really impressed!!! This is a moving story, contest aside. : -) Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Carol, this is an excellent flash fiction story, and I would have been impressed just because you wrote a 200 word story that is so compelling - but add to this that you used all those words from the eclectic list of required words, and not one of them seemed forced - now I'm really impressed!!! This is a moving story, contest aside. : -) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Brooke I can't tell you how pleased I am that you enjoyed the story. When I started I had no idea where or what to write and I can't explain it, but this story just came out of me. Contest or not...it just felt like the right thing to be writing. I don't recall that ever having happened to me before. I thank you again for the awesome review. Carol
Comment from dragonpoet
THis is a well written and interesting story. It is sad but this story probably happens more than we care to accept. You have good character cescriptions and setting cues. The descriptions flow into eachother making you want to keep reading.
I don't see any spelling or grammar errors.
dragonpoet
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THis is a well written and interesting story. It is sad but this story probably happens more than we care to accept. You have good character cescriptions and setting cues. The descriptions flow into eachother making you want to keep reading.
I don't see any spelling or grammar errors.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
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dragonpoet
I am deeply flattered by the six stars. I am glad that you enjoyed the story. It's true this happens far too often in our lives. Thanks again Carol
Comment from Adri7enne
Good story, with drama and pathos, good dialogue and well-written. Got the words in without losing your story line at all. Good job, Begin Again.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Good story, with drama and pathos, good dialogue and well-written. Got the words in without losing your story line at all. Good job, Begin Again.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
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Adri7enne
Thanks for the kind review. I greatly appreciate your comments. CArol
Comment from Earthwriter
excellent job i felt this was a very strong entry into this contest it had a very whimsical feel to it reall an enjoyable read. good luck
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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excellent job i felt this was a very strong entry into this contest it had a very whimsical feel to it reall an enjoyable read. good luck
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Earthwriter
Thank you for the kind review. It is greatly appreciated. Carol
Comment from nor84
I'm in the same contest, and now I'm getting worried. This one's very good, and I didn't see any errors. In fact, I'm going to have to say a little bit more to get by the Fanstory witch with her book.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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I'm in the same contest, and now I'm getting worried. This one's very good, and I didn't see any errors. In fact, I'm going to have to say a little bit more to get by the Fanstory witch with her book.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
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Nor84
I haven't read any of the competition yet, but I am sure they will all be good. I appreciate you kind comments. Carol
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Comment from Shirley B
Great job. You have started out a great story with a group of words that when you first look at them make no sense what so ever. you did a great job of putting them together into something that is entertaining. Good luck ion the contest. Excellent entry. Shirley
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Great job. You have started out a great story with a group of words that when you first look at them make no sense what so ever. you did a great job of putting them together into something that is entertaining. Good luck ion the contest. Excellent entry. Shirley
Comment Written 30-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2009
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Shirley
I agree...At first, I couldn't imagine what I would write and then it kind of wrote itself. Thanks for the kind review. Carol
