CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from joan marie
Even without the artwork the image is still there. Red hot rivers of lava flowing and ebbing as they make way to the sea or whatever can stop them. Great entry. joan marie
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Even without the artwork the image is still there. Red hot rivers of lava flowing and ebbing as they make way to the sea or whatever can stop them. Great entry. joan marie
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from elainec4
Sixteezkid,
You're on a roll!! Enjoyed this haiku as well! You seem to do well with any format! Choice of words and color of background serve to escalate action and put the reader "there". elaine
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Sixteezkid,
You're on a roll!! Enjoyed this haiku as well! You seem to do well with any format! Choice of words and color of background serve to escalate action and put the reader "there". elaine
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from jshep
When I saw the title of the poem I was thinking it was going to be about a river. Did not expect a raging flaming river-brilliant. You know there is the Red River in Texas. The two connecting lines are perfect with a great description turn in the satori. Well done. Joyce
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When I saw the title of the poem I was thinking it was going to be about a river. Did not expect a raging flaming river-brilliant. You know there is the Red River in Texas. The two connecting lines are perfect with a great description turn in the satori. Well done. Joyce
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
No, the rules said the exact word "vulcano" must be used. But your understanding of it as "volcano" makes your poem excellent. I love your strong words and content even in a short piece like this. Great job. Contact me if you want about the misunderstood word. Everybody'd blasting me. Need a friend.
Delora
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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No, the rules said the exact word "vulcano" must be used. But your understanding of it as "volcano" makes your poem excellent. I love your strong words and content even in a short piece like this. Great job. Contact me if you want about the misunderstood word. Everybody'd blasting me. Need a friend.
Delora
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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It was just a typo by Ray. (unless that's the way the Brits spell it, but I don't think so). Volcano study is called vulcanology. Anyway, Ray has corrected the spelling in his prompt. What's everyone blasting you about??
Comment from Nicollette
Great haiku !
love the 'red river rages'
good luck in the contest! they are all such good entries
all the best
Nikki
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Great haiku !
love the 'red river rages'
good luck in the contest! they are all such good entries
all the best
Nikki
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Great work, Sue. This is a very nice little haiku - simple and yet you leave no doubt about what is happening. Colors work well.
good luck - sherry
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Great work, Sue. This is a very nice little haiku - simple and yet you leave no doubt about what is happening. Colors work well.
good luck - sherry
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from Freeflyer
This is another great competition entry of yours. The picture you paint could be nothing but a volcano at its best. Good luck.
Freeflyer
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This is another great competition entry of yours. The picture you paint could be nothing but a volcano at its best. Good luck.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from fastdigits
Your second poem of the day that
I have reviewed. This one even
without any art work attached, you
have with your word painting laid
a torrent of words which paint
a picture of this dormant giant
of nature erupting in all her glory
and making the river run red with
with majestic colors of red.
Well done and good luck
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Your second poem of the day that
I have reviewed. This one even
without any art work attached, you
have with your word painting laid
a torrent of words which paint
a picture of this dormant giant
of nature erupting in all her glory
and making the river run red with
with majestic colors of red.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from skye
Red river rages is the powerful image in your haiku.
Haiku is my favorite form of poetry. The short, succinct lines with only so much room to say it all, condensed down to the very essence...
Well done.
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Red river rages is the powerful image in your haiku.
Haiku is my favorite form of poetry. The short, succinct lines with only so much room to say it all, condensed down to the very essence...
Well done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
Comment from Judian James
Here I am again. This volcano contest has had one outstanding entry after another. This will be a difficult vote when it goes to the booth. Your entry is excellent Sue. well done. haiku is no joke. You've done a great job
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Here I am again. This volcano contest has had one outstanding entry after another. This will be a difficult vote when it goes to the booth. Your entry is excellent Sue. well done. haiku is no joke. You've done a great job
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009