How This Critter Crits
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Intermezzo B.Y.O.B"GROWTH? ADULATION? HURRY -- CHOOSE!
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Comment from cjvaughn
Hey Jay,
I loved this paragraph...but this really hit it home for me...
you'll be searching out the life energy that runs through the piece...
I've done this my whole laugh, I thought I was weird. I never knew exactly 'what' it was that I searched for until I read this. It's the life engery of the story.
Nice job, Yoda, CJ
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2007
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Hey Jay,
I loved this paragraph...but this really hit it home for me...
you'll be searching out the life energy that runs through the piece...
I've done this my whole laugh, I thought I was weird. I never knew exactly 'what' it was that I searched for until I read this. It's the life engery of the story.
Nice job, Yoda, CJ
Comment Written 28-Apr-2007
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2007
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Yoda ... You're too much! You really seem to have connected with my series. It's so fulfilling! Thanks.
Jay
Comment from suda
Hello Jay,
I'm wide awake tonight, alert, and ready to crit. I loved you wordly-words in these sentences. They made me grin, and I even went as far as writing this as a message to myself, just because it's a reflection of reading, editing, writing...the whole shebang.
GREAT WORDS OF WISDOM:
Learn also what makes them clatter and clunk. And, most importantly, by learning to recognize tick-tockery as well as the hyper-clatteral and the infra-clunkery, you might just learn what to embrace in your own writing, what to add to, subtract from or abandon entirely.
I have pulled out my NEBULA AWARDS SHOWCASE of THE YEAR'S BEST SF AND FANTASY 2003 ~ edited by Nancy Kress. I also have my tools; red pen, highlighter, notebook... Now, I'm waiting on what's next. You left me hanging. I hope the next chapter is quickly forthcoming or I'm going to have my desk trashed with these gathered tools until...I get the rest of the story/lesson. (Smile)
I'm still with you, Jay. Again, thanks for sharing your expertise.
Susan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2007
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Hello Jay,
I'm wide awake tonight, alert, and ready to crit. I loved you wordly-words in these sentences. They made me grin, and I even went as far as writing this as a message to myself, just because it's a reflection of reading, editing, writing...the whole shebang.
GREAT WORDS OF WISDOM:
Learn also what makes them clatter and clunk. And, most importantly, by learning to recognize tick-tockery as well as the hyper-clatteral and the infra-clunkery, you might just learn what to embrace in your own writing, what to add to, subtract from or abandon entirely.
I have pulled out my NEBULA AWARDS SHOWCASE of THE YEAR'S BEST SF AND FANTASY 2003 ~ edited by Nancy Kress. I also have my tools; red pen, highlighter, notebook... Now, I'm waiting on what's next. You left me hanging. I hope the next chapter is quickly forthcoming or I'm going to have my desk trashed with these gathered tools until...I get the rest of the story/lesson. (Smile)
I'm still with you, Jay. Again, thanks for sharing your expertise.
Susan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2007
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Thank you, Susan. Your confidence in me makes me want to post it tonight. But, I've got a few more days of editing. Otherwise Zeneagle will butcher me. Probably by Friday. I think you'll enjoy it. You ought to book mark it, though, so you'll be notified in time to do it for money! Thanks again.
Jay
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Thanks for the heads up on the Friday posting...as far as earning money, I feel like the lessons I'm getting are worth buying your book for reference. I'm getting free lessons...and what's more, enjoying them!! PLUS, looking forward to them. Go figure!
Susan
Comment from Sissy
Hi jay,
I enjoyed this 'Intermezzo'. Very entertaining and fun to read, you have a nice engaging style with these, and make us have fun while we are learning. Good stuff!! Can't wait for the next part!
A few things to check out:
It's about how to align your deep-level analysis, as closely as possible with the writer's vision. (need that comma before the as?)
(if(,) for example, you are American),
Let's not make the process more than it is: (i)t is simply taking a story, chopping it into its parts, at first, possibly, with the studied caution of a medi
That's it!
Take care,
Sissy
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2007
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Hi jay,
I enjoyed this 'Intermezzo'. Very entertaining and fun to read, you have a nice engaging style with these, and make us have fun while we are learning. Good stuff!! Can't wait for the next part!
A few things to check out:
It's about how to align your deep-level analysis, as closely as possible with the writer's vision. (need that comma before the as?)
(if(,) for example, you are American),
Let's not make the process more than it is: (i)t is simply taking a story, chopping it into its parts, at first, possibly, with the studied caution of a medi
That's it!
Take care,
Sissy
Comment Written 09-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2007
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Bless you girl for your good eye. All chnges duly noted and made. Thank you! And to know you did it all for free! See you next time, hopefully a little earlier so you can make a little member money on it.
Jay
Comment from Tweedypie
Jaysquires, you have written an interesting chapter as usual. I'm waiting for that novel that you'll write after you finish this book on writing. Keep up writing this. I want to read more. There nothing more disappointing than to read a good book and the author gets discouraged, bored, or something and never finishes. Maybe they allowed someone's opinion destroy their creativity. I would like to quote Robin McGraw. She wrote in her published book this little bit of wisdom. "You can't control other people. You cannot control what they say, what they think, or what they do. People have the right to think and say whatever they want to. But you have the right not to take it to heart, and not to react. I have the right to continue to believe what I know is true.'"
I want to live by her standard. I will finish my stories no matter what.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2007
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Jaysquires, you have written an interesting chapter as usual. I'm waiting for that novel that you'll write after you finish this book on writing. Keep up writing this. I want to read more. There nothing more disappointing than to read a good book and the author gets discouraged, bored, or something and never finishes. Maybe they allowed someone's opinion destroy their creativity. I would like to quote Robin McGraw. She wrote in her published book this little bit of wisdom. "You can't control other people. You cannot control what they say, what they think, or what they do. People have the right to think and say whatever they want to. But you have the right not to take it to heart, and not to react. I have the right to continue to believe what I know is true.'"
I want to live by her standard. I will finish my stories no matter what.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2007
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Bless you, Tweedypie, for your kind words -- and in your own work for your perseverence. I will complete it, but I have such a hankering to do some more fiction. It will come. Thank you for caring.
Jay
Comment from JadeRabbyt
This is very insightful. I like how you dissect the process in an affable, comfortable, way. I also like your tick-tockery and infra-clunkery. Very nice. :)
JadeR
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2007
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This is very insightful. I like how you dissect the process in an affable, comfortable, way. I also like your tick-tockery and infra-clunkery. Very nice. :)
JadeR
Comment Written 06-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2007
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And... I like you Jade. Thank you so much for reading this and for your kindness. I do hope you will catch the next part when it arrives. It is the sister to this one and is much more heavy-set, much meatier -- and that's only bad in a beauty contest.
Jay
Comment from mmichelle97219
Thank you so much. I learned a lot from this, and will try to incorporate it into my routine. I try to be a fgood reviwer or critter, as I think by doing so will allow me to be a better writer. You have done well to share your thoughts on the subject with the rest of us. Well done.
michelle
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2007
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Thank you so much. I learned a lot from this, and will try to incorporate it into my routine. I try to be a fgood reviwer or critter, as I think by doing so will allow me to be a better writer. You have done well to share your thoughts on the subject with the rest of us. Well done.
michelle
Comment Written 06-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2007
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Michelle, you do this old man's heart good with the kindness of your thoughts. I love it when someone actually is able to get some good from my offerings. You da bomb, girl.
Jay
Comment from Cherish Minnow
I found your writing style to be informative and friendly -- which is good! Although I often feel that I am not qualified to critique a work I don't thoroughly enjoy, perhaps you can offer me some pointers and inspiration on methodology. It is true that by analyzing the mechanics of something we can understand more about what makes it work -- sort of like taking apart my toaster -- which is a novel idea (pardon the pun) to me of how to learn to write better.
Whoa, that was wordy. Suffice to say, I enjoyed your piece and look forward to more.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2007
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I found your writing style to be informative and friendly -- which is good! Although I often feel that I am not qualified to critique a work I don't thoroughly enjoy, perhaps you can offer me some pointers and inspiration on methodology. It is true that by analyzing the mechanics of something we can understand more about what makes it work -- sort of like taking apart my toaster -- which is a novel idea (pardon the pun) to me of how to learn to write better.
Whoa, that was wordy. Suffice to say, I enjoyed your piece and look forward to more.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2007
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Thanks Cherish Minnow for your kind words. If you stay aboard for the next session, I will be going into detail on deep-level analysis. Would love to have you with me.
Jay
Comment from bookishfabler
I'm not sure what to say about this chapter. I honestly was bit confused, but you have a way when you write with a sence of humor I enjoy. I didn't see any nits or spags. Funny you mentioned Deal or No Deal. I have it on in the background. LOL. Nice job
Peace & hugs
book
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2007
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I'm not sure what to say about this chapter. I honestly was bit confused, but you have a way when you write with a sence of humor I enjoy. I didn't see any nits or spags. Funny you mentioned Deal or No Deal. I have it on in the background. LOL. Nice job
Peace & hugs
book
Comment Written 05-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2007
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Sorry you were confused by it. It was awfully long to be an effective prologue to the real meat of the next chapter. I was going to have both combined in one chapter, but it became so unwieldy that I had to separate them. Do keep the faith until next time, okay?
Jay
Comment from Polly_Pisces
That is something I often struggle with...giving a critique...I have the tendency to skip this part if I don't like the story..I feel since I am so new at writing(4months)..that I don't really require the expertise I need to say what's wrong..I find myself all too often searching for something I like instead..where I can only give kudos..your work her has enlightened me somewhat...maybe after I'm in the game a little longer, I'll gain the confidence to critique all work I come across...well done..thanks for sharing..Polly
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2007
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That is something I often struggle with...giving a critique...I have the tendency to skip this part if I don't like the story..I feel since I am so new at writing(4months)..that I don't really require the expertise I need to say what's wrong..I find myself all too often searching for something I like instead..where I can only give kudos..your work her has enlightened me somewhat...maybe after I'm in the game a little longer, I'll gain the confidence to critique all work I come across...well done..thanks for sharing..Polly
Comment Written 05-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2007
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And thank you so much, Polly, for your vote of confidence. I'm glad you are enjoying it. Please stay aboard for the next segment. I'll really be getting into the meat of it then.
Jay
Comment from Showboat
Hey Jay,
Excellent essay here, very thoughtful and informative.
I loved this and had to chuckle when I thought of my favorite authors, Taylor Cauldwell, Daphne DuMaurier, Poe, etc. to read for fun.
However, they don't do us much good today as developing writers. The change to active voice, if nothing else, is huge.
Great job,
Gayle
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2007
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Hey Jay,
Excellent essay here, very thoughtful and informative.
I loved this and had to chuckle when I thought of my favorite authors, Taylor Cauldwell, Daphne DuMaurier, Poe, etc. to read for fun.
However, they don't do us much good today as developing writers. The change to active voice, if nothing else, is huge.
Great job,
Gayle
Comment Written 05-Mar-2007
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2007
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Thank you, Gayle, for your kind words. I'm glad you liked this chapter. The next one is the sister chapter. I hope to see you there. It will go into the specifics that this one lacked. Thanks again.
Jay