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Comment from Terry Broxson
Late in the week no more sixes, and yet I find a very creative poem based in part on the famous Beatles song. You have executed this very well. I love the play on the song, and the message is excellent. Good luck in the contest. Terry.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Late in the week no more sixes, and yet I find a very creative poem based in part on the famous Beatles song. You have executed this very well. I love the play on the song, and the message is excellent. Good luck in the contest. Terry.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hey Terry, I am happy to accept your virtual six stars, as they mean as much to me. Thanks so much for your very kind comments.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good riding for the even the odds poetry contest. You have done it well, and you have followed the rules. I wish you the very best in the contest. God bless. Patricia.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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This is a very good riding for the even the odds poetry contest. You have done it well, and you have followed the rules. I wish you the very best in the contest. God bless. Patricia.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Patricia, I thank you so very much for your kindness for my Hey Jude Poem, and always being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so appreciated.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi,
This shows the effect of bullying and the effects of being kind despite the mistreatment. You found a fitting picture to illustrate your words.
I think the use of exclude instead of excluded makes that rhyme sound forced. I don't know if that line is really needed.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi,
This shows the effect of bullying and the effects of being kind despite the mistreatment. You found a fitting picture to illustrate your words.
I think the use of exclude instead of excluded makes that rhyme sound forced. I don't know if that line is really needed.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Lol, Joan we are so on the same page w that, and I have changed it ten times. The line itself is needed in order to follow the rules of the contest. I think that was line nine. However, I have tried many other substitutes to replace it. and that is the line that starts the odd number so it seems out of place right after I?ve just done a bunch of even numbers. I even tried the words include, so we will just have to see how that I can make that work
Thank you my dear friend, for the very kind comments and your wonderful feedback..
Hi Joan, me again. .That actually was line 8 so I did change it to, On playground they would not include.
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You're welcome.
The new line works fine.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Joan
Comment from jmdg1954
Kids can be mean. They are not born with that bully-bone or mean-bone within them. Generally it's learned from some adult figure in their life.
You have a nice poem here showing someone bullied and able to turn the tide of events,
Nicely done,
John
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Kids can be mean. They are not born with that bully-bone or mean-bone within them. Generally it's learned from some adult figure in their life.
You have a nice poem here showing someone bullied and able to turn the tide of events,
Nicely done,
John
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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I thank you so very much for your kindness for my Hey Jude Poem, and always being so thoughtful in your reviews. Your kind words are always so ap
Comment from Sherry SG
Wow, what a wonderful entry to this contest with such constraints. Your poem conveys a beautiful story of bullying and overcoming bullying with kindness.
You have my 6 stars for wowing me. Am sure you will do well in the contest too.
Somehow the title reminded of the song â??Hey Judeâ??.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Wow, what a wonderful entry to this contest with such constraints. Your poem conveys a beautiful story of bullying and overcoming bullying with kindness.
You have my 6 stars for wowing me. Am sure you will do well in the contest too.
Somehow the title reminded of the song â??Hey Judeâ??.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Awe Sherry, you are such a Sweetheart! I truly appreciate your very kind words and gracious gift of six stars! Thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from lyenochka
This was a very cleverly done Even the Odds poem and it rhymed all the way through while telling a meaningful story! We do need stories that show us that one can overcome "misconstrued" attitudes.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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This was a very cleverly done Even the Odds poem and it rhymed all the way through while telling a meaningful story! We do need stories that show us that one can overcome "misconstrued" attitudes.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Awe, thank you so much Helen! I certainly apprecate your kind words, my sweet friend!
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Comment from Brandon Clark
You did really well conforming to the prompt. There wasn't a syllable that seemed forced just to meet the requirements. Also the message is important and hopeful.
Excellent job and good luck in the contest!
Brandon
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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You did really well conforming to the prompt. There wasn't a syllable that seemed forced just to meet the requirements. Also the message is important and hopeful.
Excellent job and good luck in the contest!
Brandon
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Brandon, you are so kind. Thank you for the kind words for my Hey Jude poem. It is so appreciated, my friend.
Comment from karenina
This contest has fired up the engines! Lots of interesting entries... So many ways the go!
With bullying such a hot topic right now I commend you on tackling this theme.
In my heart of hearts I wish every bully would see the error of their ways through kindness!
Let's hope writing it will make it so!
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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This contest has fired up the engines! Lots of interesting entries... So many ways the go!
With bullying such a hot topic right now I commend you on tackling this theme.
In my heart of hearts I wish every bully would see the error of their ways through kindness!
Let's hope writing it will make it so!
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Awe Thank you so much K! You are so kind and I appreciate your thoughtful words so much for my Hey Jude poem! Thanks again y sweet friend!
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And now I've been singing "Hey Jude" all night long! Doing the dishes, picking up the house, taking a shower....
Hah! I'm addicted!
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Lol! Mission Accomplished!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These are two clever synonyms and I enjoyed the rich descriptions in between in this unusual form. Kids seem to love anything rude, but when it turns to bullying then it is no fun, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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These are two clever synonyms and I enjoyed the rich descriptions in between in this unusual form. Kids seem to love anything rude, but when it turns to bullying then it is no fun, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Dolly, you are so kind. Thank you for the thoughtful words for my Hey Jude poem. It is so appreciated, my friend.
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You are most welcome x x x
Comment from nomi338
It takes extraordinary strength to be able to be kind in the face of cruelty, to be kind in the face of selfishness, to be brave in the face of cowardice. People often talk without thinking, speak out when they should remain silent. The one exercising kindness in this unkind social system, will resemble a giant, he will be misunderstood and possibly hated by those he overshadows.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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It takes extraordinary strength to be able to be kind in the face of cruelty, to be kind in the face of selfishness, to be brave in the face of cowardice. People often talk without thinking, speak out when they should remain silent. The one exercising kindness in this unkind social system, will resemble a giant, he will be misunderstood and possibly hated by those he overshadows.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Nomi, you are so kind. Thank you for the kind words for my Hey Jude poem. It is so appreciated, my friend.
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You are totally welcome. Your poem is a wonderful addition to the exceptional work found here.