A Sonnet For Anthony
My first Shakespearian Sonnet.56 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi Nancy. Sorry, I wasn't aware that rhyming was needed in sonnets? Show you how little I know about them. One way or the other, the content an demotion registered in this sonnet is very well done. especially for a first. Bob
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Hi Nancy. Sorry, I wasn't aware that rhyming was needed in sonnets? Show you how little I know about them. One way or the other, the content an demotion registered in this sonnet is very well done. especially for a first. Bob
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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hi bob, amazing good friend.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is an exquisite sonnet, Amada. I can't imagine the great sorrow you feel, yet still your sonnet is filled with hope, and is as uplifting as the sunbeams in your couplet.
Your metaphor development is apt and you metre and rhyme is pristine, and I truly enjoyed you feminine endings in lines 10 and 12. Right on the edge of two stressed syllables, yet it works beautifully well, and adds lift.
Superb all around sonnet, and I look forward to many more from your quill.
Many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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This is an exquisite sonnet, Amada. I can't imagine the great sorrow you feel, yet still your sonnet is filled with hope, and is as uplifting as the sunbeams in your couplet.
Your metaphor development is apt and you metre and rhyme is pristine, and I truly enjoyed you feminine endings in lines 10 and 12. Right on the edge of two stressed syllables, yet it works beautifully well, and adds lift.
Superb all around sonnet, and I look forward to many more from your quill.
Many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you, dear friend Gloria.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Sonnet For Anthony
by amada
Excellent first Shakespearian Sonnet. It's such a melodic form. I can't write it but I do enjoy reading it. I hope this is fiction...it's so sad. I can't even imagine loosing my grandson. Well done!!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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A Sonnet For Anthony
by amada
Excellent first Shakespearian Sonnet. It's such a melodic form. I can't write it but I do enjoy reading it. I hope this is fiction...it's so sad. I can't even imagine loosing my grandson. Well done!!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Gypsy.
Comment from Begin Again
I know nothing about how a sonnet should be written, but I know a lot about losing children and grandchildren. the last couple days for some reason I have written about my 4 yr old son. I can feel your loss and the pain you carry, but most of all, your words are filled with love. you know he is in a better place, but that does not remove the grief. Many hugs to you, my friend and I send a smile as well. Carol
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I know nothing about how a sonnet should be written, but I know a lot about losing children and grandchildren. the last couple days for some reason I have written about my 4 yr old son. I can feel your loss and the pain you carry, but most of all, your words are filled with love. you know he is in a better place, but that does not remove the grief. Many hugs to you, my friend and I send a smile as well. Carol
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Oh, so nice of you, thank you, Carol.
Comment from Wendy G
This is both beautiful and very very sad. The reader feels your heartache, and the struggle, and yet the acceptance of what has happened, knowing He is with God. Well written.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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This is both beautiful and very very sad. The reader feels your heartache, and the struggle, and yet the acceptance of what has happened, knowing He is with God. Well written.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Wendy.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello amada,
Your sonnet is very moving. As a new grandmother to two grandsons, your message resonated with me deeply. I simply do not know how I would be able to carry on if they should pass on before me...
I love the comparison of the robin to your grandson. And your final couplet is stellar. There are bits and pieces of your sonnet that could scan a bit more smoothly, but the important thing is you have written this beautiful offering from your heart, and that is where all excellent poetry resides.
Sending you healing wishes and continiued strength...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Hello amada,
Your sonnet is very moving. As a new grandmother to two grandsons, your message resonated with me deeply. I simply do not know how I would be able to carry on if they should pass on before me...
I love the comparison of the robin to your grandson. And your final couplet is stellar. There are bits and pieces of your sonnet that could scan a bit more smoothly, but the important thing is you have written this beautiful offering from your heart, and that is where all excellent poetry resides.
Sending you healing wishes and continiued strength...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Diane.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A beautiful image to go
go with your sonnet, Amada.
-I am very sorry about the
loss of your grandson; thoughts
and prayers are with you and
your family.
-In my opinion you wrote a beautiful
poem for Anthony, and considering
the personal nature of it, what is
important is it comes from your heart,
and this did.
-You used the first two verses to
introduce Anthony and his untimely
fatal accident.
-You have a good volta, showing
how you still think of him and love
him, I'm sure.
-A very good closing couplet.
-If you would like help with
making the sonnet better,
let me know. It's all a question
of wanting to change a few small
things or leaving it as a tribute
to your grandson.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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-A beautiful image to go
go with your sonnet, Amada.
-I am very sorry about the
loss of your grandson; thoughts
and prayers are with you and
your family.
-In my opinion you wrote a beautiful
poem for Anthony, and considering
the personal nature of it, what is
important is it comes from your heart,
and this did.
-You used the first two verses to
introduce Anthony and his untimely
fatal accident.
-You have a good volta, showing
how you still think of him and love
him, I'm sure.
-A very good closing couplet.
-If you would like help with
making the sonnet better,
let me know. It's all a question
of wanting to change a few small
things or leaving it as a tribute
to your grandson.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you sooo much, dear Pam.
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You are more than welcome, amada.
Comment from Raul1
This poem has all the stressed and unstressed words in order. I think that this is a well written sonnet. Well done. No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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This poem has all the stressed and unstressed words in order. I think that this is a well written sonnet. Well done. No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Hi Raul, thank you for feeling my lines.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Gert sherwood
amada
I read you sonnet and could feel the sorrow in you words for your Grandson who is now is ever where (smiles)
I notice how your words were written with ease, makes it a pleasure to read. Write more of your sonnets. I believe would help me to learn how to write a sonnet. (cause when I write a sonnet people tell me this is not the right way to write a sonnet.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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amada
I read you sonnet and could feel the sorrow in you words for your Grandson who is now is ever where (smiles)
I notice how your words were written with ease, makes it a pleasure to read. Write more of your sonnets. I believe would help me to learn how to write a sonnet. (cause when I write a sonnet people tell me this is not the right way to write a sonnet.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much dear frieend Gert.
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You are welcome amada
Gert
Comment from Janet Foor
I too love Shakespearean sonnets. I think you have accomplished the task of writing your first one beautifully. Very nice rhyme and good use of alliteration.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I too love Shakespearean sonnets. I think you have accomplished the task of writing your first one beautifully. Very nice rhyme and good use of alliteration.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, Janet.