Good Deed Gone Bad
Things don't always go as planned.46 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
Hahaha... I love this story and think it is the perfect entry for this prompt. I love how you developed the ..do gooder.. and his personality. Great set up and twist at the end. Good luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Hahaha... I love this story and think it is the perfect entry for this prompt. I love how you developed the ..do gooder.. and his personality. Great set up and twist at the end. Good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Hehehe. I was smiling the entire time I was writing. I knew where I was going and it made me giddy. Go to the voting booth its voting time now! LOL I appreciate your time to read, comment and review my work. Happy New Year.
Comment from Allezw2
With the best of intent, yet gone gang aft agley! Once I turned the corner on my motorcycle and saw this older woman standing by her car with the trunk lid open. I stopped to ask why and saw she had a flat tire. I had the spare tire and a jack out and changed the tire in jig time. I was putting
the tire and tools back into the trunk when an older man drove up and wanted to know what I was doing. "Swapped the flat tire for the spare." He told me to hold it right there. Then berated the women. "I said I'd be right here." He took the lug nut wrench out to loosen and and retighten the nuts. When I saw what he was doing, I said goodbye to the lady. She never said a word, just looked away. On the bike and gone.
So you never know.
Nicely done.
Live long and write well,
Fantasist.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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With the best of intent, yet gone gang aft agley! Once I turned the corner on my motorcycle and saw this older woman standing by her car with the trunk lid open. I stopped to ask why and saw she had a flat tire. I had the spare tire and a jack out and changed the tire in jig time. I was putting
the tire and tools back into the trunk when an older man drove up and wanted to know what I was doing. "Swapped the flat tire for the spare." He told me to hold it right there. Then berated the women. "I said I'd be right here." He took the lug nut wrench out to loosen and and retighten the nuts. When I saw what he was doing, I said goodbye to the lady. She never said a word, just looked away. On the bike and gone.
So you never know.
Nicely done.
Live long and write well,
Fantasist.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thanks for sharing your comments. Go to the voting booth, its voting time now! LOL I appreciate your time to read, comment and review my work. Happy New Year.
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You're quite welcome, Fantasist
Comment from Leann DS
That was great! I had no idea where you were going with that and the ending was a witty surprise! Lots of detail helped me visualize the entire scene as it played out. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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That was great! I had no idea where you were going with that and the ending was a witty surprise! Lots of detail helped me visualize the entire scene as it played out. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2021
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Thank you for your comments and review. Go to the voting booth its voting time now! LOL I appreciate your time to read, comment and review my work. Happy New Year.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is a funny story. I really enjoy reading it and like the surprise ending. This is a fantastic "Good Turn Gone Wrong" story. I think you should win.
Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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This is a funny story. I really enjoy reading it and like the surprise ending. This is a fantastic "Good Turn Gone Wrong" story. I think you should win.
Well done.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much. Show up and vote!!! LoL. Thanks for your review.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, well that was unexpected. As I read this I can see from a certain point of view that it was an attempted good deed and the older woman did not appreciate it, so It certainly does confirm with the contest directions.
Good luck.
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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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Hmm, well that was unexpected. As I read this I can see from a certain point of view that it was an attempted good deed and the older woman did not appreciate it, so It certainly does confirm with the contest directions.
Good luck.
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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I hope you saw the humor. Thanks for your review.
Comment from kmoss
This is a good story, starts out hopeful. I thought he was going to get arrested or shot though. Check out my poem titled Garden of Faith, it carries the same message as your story, without a sad ending. I still have faith in humanity and plenty of good deeds do go unpunished.
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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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This is a good story, starts out hopeful. I thought he was going to get arrested or shot though. Check out my poem titled Garden of Faith, it carries the same message as your story, without a sad ending. I still have faith in humanity and plenty of good deeds do go unpunished.
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2021
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I was trying for humor and hope that came through. Thank you for your review.
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I detected a smidge of humor.