Sparkling Eyes
My Son53 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
As they say, 'the eyes are the windows to the soul.' Your free verse is super, Yvonne--a virtual 6. Your use of descriptive words/phrases describe Stewart as the awesome man, son, friend, and EMT he is. Readers (me) get a chance to learn of this hero due to your awesome free verse about him. I love the way you mentioned the sparkle in his eyes early in you free verse and concluded with that expression. I could see everything you mentioned and feel like I know him a bit better.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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As they say, 'the eyes are the windows to the soul.' Your free verse is super, Yvonne--a virtual 6. Your use of descriptive words/phrases describe Stewart as the awesome man, son, friend, and EMT he is. Readers (me) get a chance to learn of this hero due to your awesome free verse about him. I love the way you mentioned the sparkle in his eyes early in you free verse and concluded with that expression. I could see everything you mentioned and feel like I know him a bit better.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much. With all due respect, he's not an EMT. He's a paramedic, which is more advanced than an EMT. 8-)
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So sorry, Yvonne. Please forgive mean I remember reading in your poem 'paramedic.'
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Just don't let it happen again. Just teasing. hahahahahaha
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Right, coach!
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the words to your poem they are so true. Most mothers can tell things about their child more by their eyes than the words they say.
When one of my great grand son was born Looking into his I just knew he would be different That day I nicked him eyes
Later we found out he had emotional and other problems and that I pray for days for him and my daughter his grandmother who has been raising him.Since birth
Take care
Cookie
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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I love the words to your poem they are so true. Most mothers can tell things about their child more by their eyes than the words they say.
When one of my great grand son was born Looking into his I just knew he would be different That day I nicked him eyes
Later we found out he had emotional and other problems and that I pray for days for him and my daughter his grandmother who has been raising him.Since birth
Take care
Cookie
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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I hope all your prayers are answered concerning your grandson. Nothing is more painful to a mother/grandmother than something wrong with their child.
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Your very welcome, and thank you for your prayers take care
Cookie
Comment from AnnieDawn
Your son looks like a caring person and one can tell by looking at his picture. My granddaughter does the same kind of work and people say the same about her. Two people to be proud of. Caregivers the both.
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Your son looks like a caring person and one can tell by looking at his picture. My granddaughter does the same kind of work and people say the same about her. Two people to be proud of. Caregivers the both.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
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Yes, they are. Thank you so much.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a lovely tribute poem to a son who is also a paramedic with kind qualities to be admired both in his career and with a nine-year-old daughter. Warm and compassionate eyes are definitely a great asset; they might be what we have all come here to earth to acquire, or at least work on. Thanks for sharing! I thought you did a great job with free verse, with only the suggestion of a half-rhyme with 'caring' and 'endearing.'
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This is a lovely tribute poem to a son who is also a paramedic with kind qualities to be admired both in his career and with a nine-year-old daughter. Warm and compassionate eyes are definitely a great asset; they might be what we have all come here to earth to acquire, or at least work on. Thanks for sharing! I thought you did a great job with free verse, with only the suggestion of a half-rhyme with 'caring' and 'endearing.'
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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Well, I know it wasn't exactly what it should be, but it was on my heart to write it. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Sugarray77
I adore this verse and the use of FreeVerse as the mechanism you chose to honor your son. What a lovely way to describe him ~ sparkle~ that says so much about his character. Well done on this poem, Yvonne.
Melissa
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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I adore this verse and the use of FreeVerse as the mechanism you chose to honor your son. What a lovely way to describe him ~ sparkle~ that says so much about his character. Well done on this poem, Yvonne.
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much, Melissa.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
What a beautiful tribute to your son here and your words are full of love and the care you have for him. He sounds like a kind and warm-hearted person who gives so much in his job. A hero at work and a wonderful father at home, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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What a beautiful tribute to your son here and your words are full of love and the care you have for him. He sounds like a kind and warm-hearted person who gives so much in his job. A hero at work and a wonderful father at home, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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Thank you. I'm so glad you could see what a wonderful man he is. I always said God knew I didn't know what I was doing, so He sent me good material to work with. 8-)
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a Beautifully written poem.seeing him play house with a nine year old daughter is very endearing. He lives for others and nothing shows it more than the sparkle in his eyes. Nice photo.
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This is a Beautifully written poem.seeing him play house with a nine year old daughter is very endearing. He lives for others and nothing shows it more than the sparkle in his eyes. Nice photo.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
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Thank you. He is wonderful. I always said God knew I didn't know what I was doing, so He sent me good material to work with. 8-)
Comment from RetroStarfish
Great free verse poem and I love the story that it tells. You've painted a wonderful picture of your son's compassion and zest. The world needs more shining, sparkling people like him.
A really small thing... I wonder if in the second line it shouldn't be shiny things (plural) in sunlight, as the two preceding words are pluralized.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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Great free verse poem and I love the story that it tells. You've painted a wonderful picture of your son's compassion and zest. The world needs more shining, sparkling people like him.
A really small thing... I wonder if in the second line it shouldn't be shiny things (plural) in sunlight, as the two preceding words are pluralized.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2021
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Thanks for reviewing, and for catching that booboo.
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Sparkling Eyes, describes the glistening, living crystals that blink, and wink and remind us that there is a kind heart and a keen mind behind those sparkling eyes.
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This free verse, Sparkling Eyes, describes the glistening, living crystals that blink, and wink and remind us that there is a kind heart and a keen mind behind those sparkling eyes.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
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What a lovely thing to say. Thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, this must be Stewart! What a wonderful man. Thank you for sharing about your son and the blessing he is to others as a paramedic and as father and as your son. Beautiful!!
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Oh, this must be Stewart! What a wonderful man. Thank you for sharing about your son and the blessing he is to others as a paramedic and as father and as your son. Beautiful!!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
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I was blessed with sons who were good to me and good men. I always said God knew I didn't know what I was doing, so He sent me good material to work with. 8-)
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You're a wonderful mom, Yvonne and I'm sure all your sons would say that! 💖💖
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Bless their hearts. They told me so.