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Comment from rama devi
I love the theme of kindness, and your title is great!
I like how this starts with one tone and pivots to another--one more hopeful.
As mentioned privately:
It's wonderful! Tight and polished with no need of editing except for that one cap. Touching write. One of your best. Love the title. I think the no end-line punctuation style choice serves this poem well. Good flow and voicing. Great phonics and smattering of alliteration.
I like this stanza the most:
The brevity of gentle caring
need not be measured, but rather treasured
as a sparkling iota of time
And I love how you echo the assonant sounds of measured and treasured with together in the next stanza and tender in the previous one, thus giving a subtle concrete 'auditory' metaphor of how we're all linked.
I also like how you shift gears in this stanza:
Or, is this true?
From my warped mind, am I seeing things
as they are for me, instead of a common reality?
Because the opening stanza sounds so confident that it's true, but it's a provocative statement that certainly gave me pause, as I don't agree with it. So this stanza came as a relief...as a middle ground where one questions how what you've said is partly true and perhaps partly simply a matter of perception.
The closing note of 'reaching hands' is pitch perfect!
One typo I missed earlier:
with a womb(-)like connection
seems difficult for most
The hyphen is a good idea, but the word is readable without it too, and poetic license permits it as is. Personally, I'd use the hyphen. It's a great line.
I love the sense of AHA in this as well as the overtone of raw emotions and authenticity.
Warmly,
rd
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I love the theme of kindness, and your title is great!
I like how this starts with one tone and pivots to another--one more hopeful.
As mentioned privately:
It's wonderful! Tight and polished with no need of editing except for that one cap. Touching write. One of your best. Love the title. I think the no end-line punctuation style choice serves this poem well. Good flow and voicing. Great phonics and smattering of alliteration.
I like this stanza the most:
The brevity of gentle caring
need not be measured, but rather treasured
as a sparkling iota of time
And I love how you echo the assonant sounds of measured and treasured with together in the next stanza and tender in the previous one, thus giving a subtle concrete 'auditory' metaphor of how we're all linked.
I also like how you shift gears in this stanza:
Or, is this true?
From my warped mind, am I seeing things
as they are for me, instead of a common reality?
Because the opening stanza sounds so confident that it's true, but it's a provocative statement that certainly gave me pause, as I don't agree with it. So this stanza came as a relief...as a middle ground where one questions how what you've said is partly true and perhaps partly simply a matter of perception.
The closing note of 'reaching hands' is pitch perfect!
One typo I missed earlier:
with a womb(-)like connection
seems difficult for most
The hyphen is a good idea, but the word is readable without it too, and poetic license permits it as is. Personally, I'd use the hyphen. It's a great line.
I love the sense of AHA in this as well as the overtone of raw emotions and authenticity.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Startling imagery--gently cradling...with a womb(-)like connection earns your stars in itself, as does a sparkling iota of time. onus rhyme measured/treasured. Cheers. LIZ
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Startling imagery--gently cradling...with a womb(-)like connection earns your stars in itself, as does a sparkling iota of time. onus rhyme measured/treasured. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello Jesse,
I pray you are well during this global pandemic. I love your title, Crading Kindness for your poem. Kindness is one of my favorite words. I believe very deeply, that Kindness is easy if you have love in your heart. It shouldn't be turn off and on like a light switch. You wrote a beautiful heartfelt poem of hope for our world. I really enjoyed your beautiful poem's message of kindness, gentleness and compassion. Charity starts a home at an early age, where you learn to be kind. Caring for others should be treasured. Well-done, Jesse!! Happy writing:-) No errors.
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Hello Jesse,
I pray you are well during this global pandemic. I love your title, Crading Kindness for your poem. Kindness is one of my favorite words. I believe very deeply, that Kindness is easy if you have love in your heart. It shouldn't be turn off and on like a light switch. You wrote a beautiful heartfelt poem of hope for our world. I really enjoyed your beautiful poem's message of kindness, gentleness and compassion. Charity starts a home at an early age, where you learn to be kind. Caring for others should be treasured. Well-done, Jesse!! Happy writing:-) No errors.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from Karen Estep
Excellent writing! I thought your insights were very heartfelt, and there where many true statements made about kindness. Good luck with your writing adventures!
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Excellent writing! I thought your insights were very heartfelt, and there where many true statements made about kindness. Good luck with your writing adventures!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from roof35
You have some poignant thoughts in this poem. I loved the illustration. Was the hummingbird deciding to be nice? I think so. Therefore, it paired beautifully with your words. This is nicely done.
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You have some poignant thoughts in this poem. I loved the illustration. Was the hummingbird deciding to be nice? I think so. Therefore, it paired beautifully with your words. This is nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Cradling Kindness, has a message for us that, I think, finds good in what is perceived as a general failure for people to develop a lasting sense of kindness for the world. We can manage to pony up a decent moment of true comforting when necessary. Cannot seem to sustain it.
Love this image. Imagine the mantis flipping off the bird as it swoops in.
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This poem, Cradling Kindness, has a message for us that, I think, finds good in what is perceived as a general failure for people to develop a lasting sense of kindness for the world. We can manage to pony up a decent moment of true comforting when necessary. Cannot seem to sustain it.
Love this image. Imagine the mantis flipping off the bird as it swoops in.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from oliver818
I really like the way you start this piece.
Turning kindness off and on
like a light switch
appears to be the way of the world
I think it's very poignant because rather than suggesting some people have no kindness while others do, you put the blame on the individual who deliberately decides not to be kind and I agree totally with that. Even selfish people like Trump believe they are being kind at times, even if they do it horribly wrong.
Your descriptions of kindness are beautiful and i really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing
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I really like the way you start this piece.
Turning kindness off and on
like a light switch
appears to be the way of the world
I think it's very poignant because rather than suggesting some people have no kindness while others do, you put the blame on the individual who deliberately decides not to be kind and I agree totally with that. Even selfish people like Trump believe they are being kind at times, even if they do it horribly wrong.
Your descriptions of kindness are beautiful and i really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Wonderful poem! Virtual six! And yes, I agree that those simple gestures of kindness is possible if we are only willing to try. If only the whole world would work on practicing kindness as part of daily life.
Good to see you back, Jesse!
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Wonderful poem! Virtual six! And yes, I agree that those simple gestures of kindness is possible if we are only willing to try. If only the whole world would work on practicing kindness as part of daily life.
Good to see you back, Jesse!
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from Joan E.
I think that you are correct and that we need to spend a lot more time and energy on practicing kindness. Welcome back and thank you for sharing your words of wisdom. I admired your title and symbolic picture selection plus your tercets. Your "womblike connection" is a vivid description. Well done- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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I think that you are correct and that we need to spend a lot more time and energy on practicing kindness. Welcome back and thank you for sharing your words of wisdom. I admired your title and symbolic picture selection plus your tercets. Your "womblike connection" is a vivid description. Well done- Joan
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thanks, again, Joan, for your exceptional review and rating.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from Irish Rain
Beautiful Mr. Jesse.
Love the title, 'Cradling Kindness'...
I think some people do, I think others
don't have time to care for much, or for
long these days.
As though the heart that should feel, now
has a very limited attention span.
I love this, and hope you are doing better.
Blessings...
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Beautiful Mr. Jesse.
Love the title, 'Cradling Kindness'...
I think some people do, I think others
don't have time to care for much, or for
long these days.
As though the heart that should feel, now
has a very limited attention span.
I love this, and hope you are doing better.
Blessings...
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thanks, my friend, for the super review and exceptional rating.
Take care,
Jesse
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You're most welcome!!