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The old guitarist

Description of the Picasso painting

52 total reviews 
Comment from humpwhistle
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A very astute and compassionate portrait of Picasso's guitarist.
A street artist? Probably.
As I look at this painting, what stands out to me is the length of his fingers. Too long in proportion to the ulna--even taking perspective into account. I expect this meant something to Picasso. What? I do not know.
Traditionally, that style of guitar would be strung with gut strings, not steel. And even casual guitarists would have calloused fingertips.

I'm not criticizing. Just mentioning things I see.

Best of luck.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thank you so much Lee for the kind review. You are right about the gut strings, you certainly know your stuff. Do you think I should change it?
reply by humpwhistle on 23-Sep-2019
    No. I don't think it's a crucial detail. I just mentioned it because I used to play classical guitar. I don't expect anyone else will mention it. L
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thanks. X
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words are heartfelt, descriptive, and creative. The reader
pondered on the sadness the poem conveys. I felt compassion
as I read on. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Many Thanks. Jen
Comment from Mrs. KT
Exceptional
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Hello Jen!
Absolutely moving and exquisite in message and format. Love the shortened lines and the visual and emotive imagery within. Your words definitely paint a picture worth reading again and again.
Thank you for sharing!

diane

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    I love your review and the stars of course. Thank you so much. Jen.
Comment from Reese Turner
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A nice salute to an old man who will not give up his music. I will think of this poem and wonder if he is a yank in Spain or Spanish? Sometimes I regret that I did not continue to play my guitar, but I am lazy and karaoke is just too easy!

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    I like Kareoke too. Thanks for the review. Jen.
reply by Reese Turner on 23-Sep-2019
    But, I must ask, in your poem, is the old man Spanish or American?
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Probably Spanish. Why?
reply by Reese Turner on 23-Sep-2019
    An American on the skids in Barcelona is a different picture to me than a Spaniard. I know, it is still a man, a child of God, but I am an American vet and so it matters - even in fiction - to me. Thanks
Comment from Pam (respa)
Exceptional
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Jen.
-This is a lovely poem
with good imagery
and rhyme, and tells
a good story about this man, too.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of his world.
-He is old, full of pain,
and unappreciated, but he
has his music and his guitar.
-The last two lines really
bring the emotion out
in this poem; they are
beautifully written, but sad.
-You make us feel this
man's plight, but he is
not giving up.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    I love your review. Thank you so much. Love Jen.
reply by Pam (respa) on 23-Sep-2019
    You are very welcome and deserving. You really got into the soul of the man and the painting.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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You brought the scene in your eloquent words here Jen and I could imagine this guitarist on the streets in Barcelona, a city I have visited a few times and it is full of street musicians and artists, a magical city full of culture and vibrancy. There are homeless people on the streets too, your poem is in fine company with this painting and I adore Picasso and have painted many of his portraits in water colour, they adorn the walls of my Spanish home. Much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thanks Dolly, so pleased you liked it. Barcelona is my favourite city, it is so vibrant. Love Jen. X
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
Exceptional
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"The old guitarist", is an exceptionally well-written and deftly descriptive piece. With craft and skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. It was a privilege to both read and review a piece of this standard. To me, this is a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thank you so much for your kind words and stars. Take care. Jen. X
reply by duchessofdrumborg on 23-Sep-2019


    Jen, my possum, you deserved both.
    Take care,
    the Duchess X
Comment from Cindy Warren
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The poor guy! I want to send him a warm coat and a sleeping bag instead of that blanket. And I think he could use a guitar pick. Then I want to slap those sneering faces. So sad to think there are people like that, and they're treated so poorly. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thanks Cindy. Jčn
Comment from lyenochka
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I like how you describe this street musician to create this empathy for him in the reader and an admiration for his devotion to his music.
One comment:
"but are unnoticed by he" (grammatically, it should be 'him' not 'he' but I know you needed it for the rhyme.)
Perhaps: unaffected is he

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thanks so much Helen for the review and the suggestion. Jen. X
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Jen. This is a beautiful verse describing a street musician that is living on his memories waiting for something good to happen for him. I really like the subtlety of the language and the sensitivity you penned the verse with. My empathy grew for the player as I read on. Good luck in the contest. Robert

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thanks Robert
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 23-Sep-2019
    You're welcome!