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Comment from Dutchie
A friend of mine has an attic like that. She saves everything and does not want to throw things away. A lovely poem written with a great sense of humor. Many people are collectors and everything is a memory to something.... Great write!! Fia
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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A friend of mine has an attic like that. She saves everything and does not want to throw things away. A lovely poem written with a great sense of humor. Many people are collectors and everything is a memory to something.... Great write!! Fia
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much Fia. It took third. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
Lovely lighthearted poem showcasing what some may see as a flaw but actually I think imperfections are what make us who we are and hoarding means you are sentimental. Everything holds a memory, so I must admit I am a bit of a hoarder too. Not to the extreme as written about in this poem haha but I'm a nightmare for keeping concert tickets or T-shirt's that are faded or receipts from a special day. I am very sentimental and find it hard to part with things. So I understand where you're coming from. My only critique would be that the rhythm is a bit disjointed so it reads a little clunky but other than that, I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Lovely lighthearted poem showcasing what some may see as a flaw but actually I think imperfections are what make us who we are and hoarding means you are sentimental. Everything holds a memory, so I must admit I am a bit of a hoarder too. Not to the extreme as written about in this poem haha but I'm a nightmare for keeping concert tickets or T-shirt's that are faded or receipts from a special day. I am very sentimental and find it hard to part with things. So I understand where you're coming from. My only critique would be that the rhythm is a bit disjointed so it reads a little clunky but other than that, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. It took third. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Well deserved x
Comment from Sanku
My! You remind me of my mother .She was exactly like this ,but she could afford to be so because she had a big house with store rooms.but coming to live with me it is a different story .I live in a small apartment with limited storage so it is almost a daily fencing between both of us!
I enjoyed reading this . good end rhymes and smooth flow.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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My! You remind me of my mother .She was exactly like this ,but she could afford to be so because she had a big house with store rooms.but coming to live with me it is a different story .I live in a small apartment with limited storage so it is almost a daily fencing between both of us!
I enjoyed reading this . good end rhymes and smooth flow.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. It took third. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from WryWriter
Ironic that I read this fine work after dealing with a son and his significant other who trash my place to my dismay. You've hit it on the nail's head! A bulldozer is not a bad idea! It would tackle it quicker than I am able. I can't choose a favorite line for to do so takes away from this great poem. Love your artwork choice!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Ironic that I read this fine work after dealing with a son and his significant other who trash my place to my dismay. You've hit it on the nail's head! A bulldozer is not a bad idea! It would tackle it quicker than I am able. I can't choose a favorite line for to do so takes away from this great poem. Love your artwork choice!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. It took third. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Many of us, especially if you are a person who loves to craft, such as myself, have a hoarder in us. This is very fun and I saw no error. Was well written and I hope you do well the contest. Rox
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Many of us, especially if you are a person who loves to craft, such as myself, have a hoarder in us. This is very fun and I saw no error. Was well written and I hope you do well the contest. Rox
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much Rox. It took third. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Wow, 3rd place is great. Congrats. =}
Comment from Tootie
You did make me laugh and I thoroughly enjoyed, and could relate to, this poem. Great rhyming here and perfect title and graphic. Loved the mention of the single socks! Wishing you the best in the contest. Blessings, Cathy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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You did make me laugh and I thoroughly enjoyed, and could relate to, this poem. Great rhyming here and perfect title and graphic. Loved the mention of the single socks! Wishing you the best in the contest. Blessings, Cathy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much Cathy. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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It got my vote! Really enjoyed it! :)
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is funny. I thought that at one point that I might be considered a hoarder. I guess I really didn't know what the definition of a hoarder was until I saw some on TV. I'm definitely not a hoarder. You've absolutely nailed the attributes of a hoarder down to a tee in this. I enjoyed this well written poem. Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This is funny. I thought that at one point that I might be considered a hoarder. I guess I really didn't know what the definition of a hoarder was until I saw some on TV. I'm definitely not a hoarder. You've absolutely nailed the attributes of a hoarder down to a tee in this. I enjoyed this well written poem. Well done!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from clsandau
Nicely done, Poet! So true, many people do save all kinds of things. When you get older you think Why? Meanwhile what you've written is very humorous, but I do know people who keep all that "stuff". I have a feeling you too must be a hoarder to know all those great collector items. lol
Good luck in the contest! Carol
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Nicely done, Poet! So true, many people do save all kinds of things. When you get older you think Why? Meanwhile what you've written is very humorous, but I do know people who keep all that "stuff". I have a feeling you too must be a hoarder to know all those great collector items. lol
Good luck in the contest! Carol
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Carol. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Raul1
This story in a poem is very funny. I like how you put it all together. The right words to make the lines rhyme. This is excellent. I like your poem. Thanks for sharing! Very good work!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This story in a poem is very funny. I like how you put it all together. The right words to make the lines rhyme. This is excellent. I like your poem. Thanks for sharing! Very good work!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You're welcome.
Comment from royowen
I think there might be a little of the hoarder in all of us, but some have been hoarding so badly, they can barely move in their house, well done, beautifully written and rhymed, in no set meter, and aabb rhyming, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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I think there might be a little of the hoarder in all of us, but some have been hoarding so badly, they can barely move in their house, well done, beautifully written and rhymed, in no set meter, and aabb rhyming, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Roy. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Welcome Earl