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Comment from Artasylum
This is a fun poem to read and I always love when anyone does a history slant in the poem...nicely written and told. Great, good luck in your contest... looking forward. diana
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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This is a fun poem to read and I always love when anyone does a history slant in the poem...nicely written and told. Great, good luck in your contest... looking forward. diana
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2019
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Thank you Diana. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from poetwatch
This is a good poem. I like the way you bring it all together. :) He was a man that wanted to be, he though he was invincible and too much off himself. He got his men killed.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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This is a good poem. I like the way you bring it all together. :) He was a man that wanted to be, he though he was invincible and too much off himself. He got his men killed.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from LG Wolfe
Great poem with a good history lesson for me, along with a little humour. Your rhyming works, although I wondered if it could be formatted a little more tightly so the rhyming couplets are closer in spacing, whether as their own stanza or with a few other stanzas. A note for consideration; the third line and twelfth line are single spaced with the remaining lines being double spaced. Not sure whether that was intentional.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Great poem with a good history lesson for me, along with a little humour. Your rhyming works, although I wondered if it could be formatted a little more tightly so the rhyming couplets are closer in spacing, whether as their own stanza or with a few other stanzas. A note for consideration; the third line and twelfth line are single spaced with the remaining lines being double spaced. Not sure whether that was intentional.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review. Nice catch on the line spacing. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Contest Author,
Ha ha ha. Yup, this is what happens when an academic lifelong failure is put in charge as a leader. Likely his family was wealthy. I don't know as I do not find pleasure in studying how the settlers enslaved, slaughtered, and abused the Native Americans. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Hi Contest Author,
Ha ha ha. Yup, this is what happens when an academic lifelong failure is put in charge as a leader. Likely his family was wealthy. I don't know as I do not find pleasure in studying how the settlers enslaved, slaughtered, and abused the Native Americans. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Actually his dad was a blacksmith, the family didn't have a lot of money. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Good job with the great rhymes, smooth flow, and informative storyline. Although I know Custer's story, you added a fresh approach. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Good job with the great rhymes, smooth flow, and informative storyline. Although I know Custer's story, you added a fresh approach. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much Jan. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A light tribute to Custer with a nice flow and good rhyme. The artwork represents WWII soldiers or later. Perhaps look for a cavalry image. The verse was great and no edits or adjustments.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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A light tribute to Custer with a nice flow and good rhyme. The artwork represents WWII soldiers or later. Perhaps look for a cavalry image. The verse was great and no edits or adjustments.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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The picture came with the contest and I can't change it. I do appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from l.raven
very well done... and it has a good rhyme...
if you don't mind me saying...and it is up to you...put because you choose Custer...you might change the picture to the wild west...this would have been a great Patton picture...either way...very well written...and good luck...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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very well done... and it has a good rhyme...
if you don't mind me saying...and it is up to you...put because you choose Custer...you might change the picture to the wild west...this would have been a great Patton picture...either way...very well written...and good luck...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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The picture came with the contest entry I can't change it. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
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it's ok...it's very well written...pictures help...but it the poem that comes first...you are so very welcome...love xxoo
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a simple historic poem that has unforced rhymes. But I think it should be formatted in rhyming couplets not single lines with one rhyming couplet at the beginning and a non rhyming couplet at the end.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
dragonpoet
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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This is a simple historic poem that has unforced rhymes. But I think it should be formatted in rhyming couplets not single lines with one rhyming couplet at the beginning and a non rhyming couplet at the end.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
dragonpoet
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
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No problem. It is what we are here to do.
~Joan
Comment from RGstar
When I was a kid, Custer was a series on tv that I didn't want to miss, for all the money in the word. Help me to steer a path of being upright and brave, even though just a series. I like the humor here.
Brought back memories.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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When I was a kid, Custer was a series on tv that I didn't want to miss, for all the money in the word. Help me to steer a path of being upright and brave, even though just a series. I like the humor here.
Brought back memories.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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I watched the same series as a kid, thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Tina Crute
I did as you said and enjoyed! If I had a history teacher that would write poems like this, I would have liked history !Great writing. It flowed smoothly and I was able to read it and absorb it quickly. Some poems try on purpose to be complicated, haha. Liked it a lot!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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I did as you said and enjoyed! If I had a history teacher that would write poems like this, I would have liked history !Great writing. It flowed smoothly and I was able to read it and absorb it quickly. Some poems try on purpose to be complicated, haha. Liked it a lot!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Nothing complicated about my writing, simple things by a simple mind. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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No problem! I
look forward
to more!