Her Lover is Lost to Her At Sea
A Ditty: Every Night She Keeps Watch for Her Captain54 total reviews
Comment from LaFrance
This is a strong free verse poem and an excellent entry. I enjoyed the poem within the poem. It gave a nice echoing reminder of her longing heart left behind.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This is a strong free verse poem and an excellent entry. I enjoyed the poem within the poem. It gave a nice echoing reminder of her longing heart left behind.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hey LaFrance:
Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed... I'm honored and humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from Janet Foor
Very nice free verse poem for the contest. Excellent artwork to compliment your work. Vivid imagery throughout and good use of alliteration.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Very nice free verse poem for the contest. Excellent artwork to compliment your work. Vivid imagery throughout and good use of alliteration.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hey Jmf:
Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed... I'm honored and humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from victor 66
This is a very good, very sophisticated poem and the illustration is perfect. I have several thoughts that come to mind after reading your poem. What do people have that have never had this kind of emotion? Are they better off never having loved, or of had the loss of it? To realize a love has passed for whatever reason, and to move on takes courage. Secondly, not everyone has the courage and they end up drowning in their continued sorrow until it's a habit that they can't break. I never want to be one of them. Hey, best wishes.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This is a very good, very sophisticated poem and the illustration is perfect. I have several thoughts that come to mind after reading your poem. What do people have that have never had this kind of emotion? Are they better off never having loved, or of had the loss of it? To realize a love has passed for whatever reason, and to move on takes courage. Secondly, not everyone has the courage and they end up drowning in their continued sorrow until it's a habit that they can't break. I never want to be one of them. Hey, best wishes.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hi Victor... all very good questions... To me is the lovers pathos... unable to say goodbye. It is truly sad. Courage is th operative word. I think you are right that to take back your life and become whole again... that is the answer... yours, diana
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You are most welcome, Diana.
Comment from Robbie Yates
Great poem. I love the use of the stand-alone lines in italic - they had such power and emphasis. It also seems to mark the passage of time - a theme that has importance in the story you tell. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Great poem. I love the use of the stand-alone lines in italic - they had such power and emphasis. It also seems to mark the passage of time - a theme that has importance in the story you tell. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hi Robbie... I think it is fun to write a poem inside of a poem... It pleases me. Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed... I'm honored and humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great job with your free verse 'ditty' as she keeps watching for her Captain's return. Nice alliteration with the - essence evaporates -
Love the final verse - nailing drapery over her reality - great line. Good luck in the contest.
cheers.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Great job with your free verse 'ditty' as she keeps watching for her Captain's return. Nice alliteration with the - essence evaporates -
Love the final verse - nailing drapery over her reality - great line. Good luck in the contest.
cheers.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hey Pearl:
I had to laugh I almost sent this without the l... wondering if that happens often. Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed... I'm honored and humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from Raul1
Excellent poem! This is to me an excellent poem. It describes what is going on and what this woman thinks what will happen in the end. At the end she walks away. Excellent work!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Excellent poem! This is to me an excellent poem. It describes what is going on and what this woman thinks what will happen in the end. At the end she walks away. Excellent work!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hey Raul:
Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed... I'm honored and humbled. Yours, diana
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You're welcome.
Comment from meeshu
this is a fine tale of longing and unrequited love. I was taken by surprise when I got to witness her turning out and never looking back..
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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this is a fine tale of longing and unrequited love. I was taken by surprise when I got to witness her turning out and never looking back..
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hey Meeshu... I'm tired of Hollywood Endings. I need to take it to a more realistic light. thanks kiddo. yours, diana
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is a sweet, sad, love poem/story. I guess after a while, the heart sometimes gets restless when it seems like the thing desired seems to be only a dream. I like how you've constructed this with hope initially. Then, at the end, her heart had waited and tried to believe long enough. She already felt in her heart that he wasn't coming back long before she gave in to it. You've done a superb job with this well written poem. I enjoyed reading it! Well done. You should do well in the contest with this!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This is a sweet, sad, love poem/story. I guess after a while, the heart sometimes gets restless when it seems like the thing desired seems to be only a dream. I like how you've constructed this with hope initially. Then, at the end, her heart had waited and tried to believe long enough. She already felt in her heart that he wasn't coming back long before she gave in to it. You've done a superb job with this well written poem. I enjoyed reading it! Well done. You should do well in the contest with this!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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You got this right on the nose Jeffrey... Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed... I'm honored and humbled. Yours, diana
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a sad, poignant and well-written poem, and the inserted "parenthetical phrases" add a personal touch, bringing the reader "behind the scenes." You did well at creating a mood of sadness and loss.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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This is a sad, poignant and well-written poem, and the inserted "parenthetical phrases" add a personal touch, bringing the reader "behind the scenes." You did well at creating a mood of sadness and loss.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hi Michele: Thanks so much for the constellation bestowed... I'm honored and humbled. Yours, diana
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It's my pleasure.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, the many forms of love the love of the sea as it is beautiful, scary and demanding, how could one choose this over the love of another human which is beautiful, scary, and demanding, this is a wonderful poem, best wishes for your competition****kahpot
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Excellent, the many forms of love the love of the sea as it is beautiful, scary and demanding, how could one choose this over the love of another human which is beautiful, scary, and demanding, this is a wonderful poem, best wishes for your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2018
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Hey kahpot: This poem needed to write itself and I needed it to be realistic. No Hollywood endings here. yours, diana