Ashes in the Wind
Short poem contest entry51 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Contains 20 syllables, so the poem meets the prompt. A lot of truth revealed in the comment "how precarious is mankind's foothold". Man believes he is the center of the universe, however, that could all change in a moment's notice. "Ashes in the wind" describes precisely what mankind really is and how fleetingly it can all disappear. Well written poem.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Contains 20 syllables, so the poem meets the prompt. A lot of truth revealed in the comment "how precarious is mankind's foothold". Man believes he is the center of the universe, however, that could all change in a moment's notice. "Ashes in the wind" describes precisely what mankind really is and how fleetingly it can all disappear. Well written poem.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Brett,
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from karenina
Gasp. This is how I felt reading this....a fleeting gasp of shock and then it was gone...and so I came back to look again...and sure enough you'd captured life on the head of a pin. Having recently received my Ash Wednesday cross this stirred my soul and made me recommit to making every second count....
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Gasp. This is how I felt reading this....a fleeting gasp of shock and then it was gone...and so I came back to look again...and sure enough you'd captured life on the head of a pin. Having recently received my Ash Wednesday cross this stirred my soul and made me recommit to making every second count....
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Karenina,
Sometimes these short poems really "pack a wallop." They surely are challenging but exciting to attempt! Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
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Indeed! When well written they are a shot to the heart!---Karenina
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Ashes in the Wind", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Short, succinct and very much to the point. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a definite six! I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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"Ashes in the Wind", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Short, succinct and very much to the point. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a definite six! I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello duchessofdrumborg!
So very honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review. I love attempting to pen short verses, and so pleased that you appreciate this one.
Thank you again!
diane
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Hello diane, you certainly deserved the six,sparkling stars. It was a pleasure to read and review your latest post.
Take care and bless you, the Duchess !(-_-)!
Comment from LIJ Red
I count twenty syllables, here, and am able to fathom the message, so you should be in the running for a "Short Poem" contest. The prompt needs to be more specific,
Most two/four/twos are "short"....excellent post.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I count twenty syllables, here, and am able to fathom the message, so you should be in the running for a "Short Poem" contest. The prompt needs to be more specific,
Most two/four/twos are "short"....excellent post.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello LIJ Red!
So pleased you enjoyed. This poem was a challenge but enjoyable to pen.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written short poem with exactly twenty syllables as required. We don't always realize how precious our lives are and we often waste many chances to make the best of life.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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A very well-written short poem with exactly twenty syllables as required. We don't always realize how precious our lives are and we often waste many chances to make the best of life.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Sandra,
So pleased you enjoy my verse. Thank you for your kind review!
diane
Comment from Katie Solis
Beautiful work, your words are very profound, and makes one contemplative of the future. Most people are aware of dust to dust, or from dust you arose and to dust you must return. I love how you captured that thought and incorporated it.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Beautiful work, your words are very profound, and makes one contemplative of the future. Most people are aware of dust to dust, or from dust you arose and to dust you must return. I love how you captured that thought and incorporated it.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Katie,
So very pleased that you enjoy my short poem. It was an interesting challenge to pen.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your succinct description of the world we inhabit. The fleeting "ashes in the wind" is a very appropriate metaphor, and your picture selection with the precarious nest is very reinforcing. Cheers and best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I admired your succinct description of the world we inhabit. The fleeting "ashes in the wind" is a very appropriate metaphor, and your picture selection with the precarious nest is very reinforcing. Cheers and best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Joan!
Thank you ever so much for your thoughtful review.
It was a challenging little verse to pen...
diane
Comment from MelB
Hi Diane, very nice description and imagery in this short poem. Excellent syllable count. We do never know how long we have in this life, so we shouldn't take it for granted.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hi Diane, very nice description and imagery in this short poem. Excellent syllable count. We do never know how long we have in this life, so we shouldn't take it for granted.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello MelB,
So very appreciative of your thoughtful and kind review.
Thank you!
diane
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My pleasure:)
Comment from ameen786
Hello KT, a profound and thought provoking write; succinct, yet, speaks volumes; the last line is a beaut! Wonder, if this is a picture inspired verse? Good luck to you my friend.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello KT, a profound and thought provoking write; succinct, yet, speaks volumes; the last line is a beaut! Wonder, if this is a picture inspired verse? Good luck to you my friend.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello ameen786,
Thank you for your thoughtful and complimentary review.
I had been searching for artwork for a haiku that I have written, but not yet posted, when I came across the artwork that I have attached to this poem.
When I realized that the perching bird was next to his mate who was impaled upon the hawthorne branch - the fragility of life really struck me. One thing led to another and "Ashes in the Wind" came to be.
So pleased you enjoyed...
diane
Comment from Boogienights
I liked this very much, and your words ring true...life could be snatched away from one or all of us at anytime. We need to seize the day and live each one as if it were our last. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I liked this very much, and your words ring true...life could be snatched away from one or all of us at anytime. We need to seize the day and live each one as if it were our last. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you so much for your thoughtful review!
We need to appreciate every moment!
diane