The Products of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Good Love Gone Wrong"...the story of Jenny and Ron
75 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
I can definitely relate to your poem dear patty! I just left a boyfriend for cheating on me the whole time we were together. He was a manipulator and a narcissist.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
I can definitely relate to your poem dear patty! I just left a boyfriend for cheating on me the whole time we were together. He was a manipulator and a narcissist.
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi Rebekka; I'm so sorry to hear about your latest breakup - I imagine the poem resonated with you deeply. Thank you for stopping by to read and review and I hope things start to look up for you soon,
~patty~
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Thanks my friend! Hugs!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That happens all the time. The love-hate triangle. We think it's the real thing, then it blows up in our face. Leave town. In my case, I left the country. LOL. Well done, this is a wonderful Etheree poem, with some subtle rhyme as well. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
That happens all the time. The love-hate triangle. We think it's the real thing, then it blows up in our face. Leave town. In my case, I left the country. LOL. Well done, this is a wonderful Etheree poem, with some subtle rhyme as well. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi Sandra; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review this poem. I had a good time constructing the etheree.
~patty~
Comment from Mame
I rather like this because it says everything so clearly without wasting words and how true it all is. Great the way you set the poem out in easy to read format with blue and white colours.I wonder whether it would work just as well if not better if the punctuation marks were omitted. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
I rather like this because it says everything so clearly without wasting words and how true it all is. Great the way you set the poem out in easy to read format with blue and white colours.I wonder whether it would work just as well if not better if the punctuation marks were omitted. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it and the presentation. I never really know what to do about punctuation in my poetry - if I leave it out, I get feedback on how it needs it, and when I put it in, people wonder how it would read without it.
*sigh*
~patty~
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Patty
Loved the form...never saw this style before. It's funny, when we fall in love we cannot bear to be apart, but once the love fades the opposite unfortunately occurs.
Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
Good morning, Patty
Loved the form...never saw this style before. It's funny, when we fall in love we cannot bear to be apart, but once the love fades the opposite unfortunately occurs.
Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi Ray; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. The etheree pops up in contests once in awhile on the site, and its listed in shadowpoetry.com as one of the poetic forms. I like writing them because they are somewhat challenging to work with the syllable count and still have a cohesive piece.
Love is fickle,
~patty~
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great double reverse Etheree patty and choosing the love/hate them makes it work very well, because unfortunately that is what does happen with a lot of couples when ecstasy and passion turn to hate and hurt. Well done with this one,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
Great double reverse Etheree patty and choosing the love/hate them makes it work very well, because unfortunately that is what does happen with a lot of couples when ecstasy and passion turn to hate and hurt. Well done with this one,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi Valda; I'm so glad you dropped by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece,
~patty~
Comment from robina1978
The artwork is excellent and complements your poem very well It is a double Etheree alright. Nothing needs changed. Just the title makes me sad.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
The artwork is excellent and complements your poem very well It is a double Etheree alright. Nothing needs changed. Just the title makes me sad.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for the lovely review of this piece,
~patty~
Comment from dragonpoet
Sounds like like this guy changed with the relationship. From the emotion in the poem, it seems he may have been an abuser of some kind. At least there's hope at the end for a real healthy love.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
Sounds like like this guy changed with the relationship. From the emotion in the poem, it seems he may have been an abuser of some kind. At least there's hope at the end for a real healthy love.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. Many things happen in the course of a relationship,
~patty~
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You are so very welcome.
Joan
Comment from Bucketlist
A sad, yet true account of many love situations. The double etheree is very effective.
I enjoyed your poem
There is nothing to change, I wish the 150 character message would leave!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
A sad, yet true account of many love situations. The double etheree is very effective.
I enjoyed your poem
There is nothing to change, I wish the 150 character message would leave!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi Trisha; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I had a really good time constructing the double etheree. I appreciate your lovely comments,
~patty~
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning Patty, this is a great double etheree poem. I love that you have used the antonyms to describe the love/hate in love and hate. I love the way you so neatly lined up each sentence. I also agree with everything you said in your poem, so tru, so true...
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
Good morning Patty, this is a great double etheree poem. I love that you have used the antonyms to describe the love/hate in love and hate. I love the way you so neatly lined up each sentence. I also agree with everything you said in your poem, so tru, so true...
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi Tier; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it and I greatly appreciate you noting the lining up of each sentence.
~patty~
Comment from Sankey
Great poem, mate. Loved the sorrowful sad tale, of the good then the bad, and hope you found something greater to replace whatever from before. Loved the artwork too. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
Great poem, mate. Loved the sorrowful sad tale, of the good then the bad, and hope you found something greater to replace whatever from before. Loved the artwork too. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. I had a great time constructing the double etheree - its a fun poetic form to work with,
~patty~
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