Crave
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Comment from pearlecat
The first three lines are excellent and drew me right in, 'relentless nudge of time'
time really is relentless and coffee is the best smell to wake up to. I've seen those strawberry kitchen curtains before so I could totally visualize those. I have to say the third stanza is my favorite though. Loved the ending :)
I think Crave is the perfect word to revert back to. Awesome Jimi!
Pearl
P.S. I love that song too. I have it on my spotify.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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The first three lines are excellent and drew me right in, 'relentless nudge of time'
time really is relentless and coffee is the best smell to wake up to. I've seen those strawberry kitchen curtains before so I could totally visualize those. I have to say the third stanza is my favorite though. Loved the ending :)
I think Crave is the perfect word to revert back to. Awesome Jimi!
Pearl
P.S. I love that song too. I have it on my spotify.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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pearlecat, beautiful lady, I once again am honored by your support and wonderful reviews of my work. You, truly are one of the most magnificent writers on this site. you truly are. I know one swhen I read one. you are.. thank you dear sweet gentle soul.. jimi
Comment from jusylee72
I like my life too. Even when it means putting myself together early in the morning to get out the door on time. I thought your descriptions were very clever. Thank you.
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I like my life too. Even when it means putting myself together early in the morning to get out the door on time. I thought your descriptions were very clever. Thank you.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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jusylee72,
Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jlsavell
Comment from RGstar
Lovely. I like the way you take the subject matter and add silk, perfume and passion with logic and understanding. The ending allows the reader to interpret. Taste, sight and colour add to this beautiful write.
One little thing,''O'er''might not be needed, beter the conventional way as the rest of the language does not follow the pattern so kind of stands out...probably needs a few more words of same family.
Yet, does not deter.
An excellent piece of work.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Lovely. I like the way you take the subject matter and add silk, perfume and passion with logic and understanding. The ending allows the reader to interpret. Taste, sight and colour add to this beautiful write.
One little thing,''O'er''might not be needed, beter the conventional way as the rest of the language does not follow the pattern so kind of stands out...probably needs a few more words of same family.
Yet, does not deter.
An excellent piece of work.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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RG,
I do not have the words to express to you my appreciation and my humbleness that YOU found this worthy of a six much less a stellar review. I appreciate you so very much and I am so very honored.. jimi
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You are welcome, dear lady :)
Comment from CEO2020
Your poetry is well written...the imagery is vivid...the words give meaning and feeling.
"My nakedness is clothed in Barefoot Dreams"
Interesting line.
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Your poetry is well written...the imagery is vivid...the words give meaning and feeling.
"My nakedness is clothed in Barefoot Dreams"
Interesting line.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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CEO2020,
Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jlsavell
Comment from PaulRoberts68
An excellent poem filled with rich imagery and wordplay. Her poem does tantalize the senses, but not just the sense of smell or sight. She adds little provocative glimpses into a sensual realm of her confident sexuality. Also, I really love the abstract painting posted next to the title. It really goes with the poem. Is it hers? Because if it is, then she is a true artist!
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An excellent poem filled with rich imagery and wordplay. Her poem does tantalize the senses, but not just the sense of smell or sight. She adds little provocative glimpses into a sensual realm of her confident sexuality. Also, I really love the abstract painting posted next to the title. It really goes with the poem. Is it hers? Because if it is, then she is a true artist!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Paul Robert68, well what a compliment. I am humbled, but no the artwork was not mine, though I do dabble in art but not very good at it.. again a huge thank you,, jlsavell
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Yeah, love it. Love the message and the way you delivered it. It's an inspirational read that I suspect would strike a chord with many women. We are prone to underestimate ourselves, often shaped to believe we 'crave' or should crave certain things in life, when in fact, we don't need them at all.
Nice one, Jimi.
Av
xx
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Yeah, love it. Love the message and the way you delivered it. It's an inspirational read that I suspect would strike a chord with many women. We are prone to underestimate ourselves, often shaped to believe we 'crave' or should crave certain things in life, when in fact, we don't need them at all.
Nice one, Jimi.
Av
xx
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
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AV,
Well, I am just going to be apologizing for the rest of the night it seems. again a big big thank you... jimi
Comment from TPAC
Writer illustrates their extreme passions, filling views captivating within projected conceptions: charming ideals with delighting viewpoints. I found appealing in interests. A good read.
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Writer illustrates their extreme passions, filling views captivating within projected conceptions: charming ideals with delighting viewpoints. I found appealing in interests. A good read.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
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TPAC,
Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jlsavell
Comment from TAB_that's me
You always have such a great way with words:)
Great free verse with some great occasional rhymes. Great enjambment too.
teresa
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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You always have such a great way with words:)
Great free verse with some great occasional rhymes. Great enjambment too.
teresa
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
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TAB-THAT'S -ME..
Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jIMI
Comment from Ulla
This is a wonderful poem that draws on all the senses. The imagery is great. I can smell the coffee as it hits my nostrils. Great use of alliteration. All the best. Ulla:))
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This is a wonderful poem that draws on all the senses. The imagery is great. I can smell the coffee as it hits my nostrils. Great use of alliteration. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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ulla,
Though my thank you is quite late, it is no less appreciated. I am honored you stopped by to read and review. Thank you so very much.. jlsavell
Comment from Irish Rain
Wonderful poem of wishful longing, only to realize that it's fulfillment she really craves....a complete life....I like this...me...I was craving that coffee!!! Blessings....
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Wonderful poem of wishful longing, only to realize that it's fulfillment she really craves....a complete life....I like this...me...I was craving that coffee!!! Blessings....
Comment Written 22-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
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Irish Rain, oh my, another big thank you and another big apology for just responding.. jlsavell
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You are always welcome!!!!