Christine's Poems
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Comment from BLACKDYKE
Earthy and sunny to the last Chris' you had me down a more sexy path just for a moment. What a great read this Sunday I find, a tail, then a twist and the sunn comes out, such a lot to shout about. A lovely poetic plea from the sun. An so funny with it.
I must look you up. eric
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Earthy and sunny to the last Chris' you had me down a more sexy path just for a moment. What a great read this Sunday I find, a tail, then a twist and the sunn comes out, such a lot to shout about. A lovely poetic plea from the sun. An so funny with it.
I must look you up. eric
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Thank You eric, for stopping by to read my poem and for your fabulous six star I am glad you thought this worthy and I do so appreciate your lovely review. Ha Ha I had you and it was just a SUN bake . I am addicted to sunbaking I love the warmth and feel like it warms up my bones. I love writing and this site has given me so much fun and made me strech my imagination and creativity. Again many Thanks and nice to meet you Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Eric1
Hi Christine, there are some excellent poems on here today and this one is above them all!
Your rhyming, rhythm, meter and flow are all impeccable, the story within is a delight and that ending is sublime my friend.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Hi Christine, there are some excellent poems on here today and this one is above them all!
Your rhyming, rhythm, meter and flow are all impeccable, the story within is a delight and that ending is sublime my friend.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Oh Eric You have made my night (it is 1205am having a late night) Thank you very much for your smashing six and lovely comments for my poem. I revere you as a great poet and this has made me feel like I have made the grade. I love writing and have found my poetry home here and wonderful friends like you . My sincerest thank you Eric. Cheers Christine
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I don't think you realise just how good your poetry is Christine, you write from the heart as all good poets do my friend,I would have gladly given this a ten if I were able.
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a great poem above a passionate sun. I will forgive you for indulging in this personification because you wrote a well-crafted and entertaining poem with a twist at the end. What struck me most was the smoothness of your rhymes and rhythm. I can hear your words in my ear. Your description is passionate and I thought you were describing a couple of lovers:
"For years I've been your one desire
To warm your heart with burning fire."
Alas, it is only a sunbake, and a polished, funny love poem to the sun. Thank you for sharing. Please put on sunscreen.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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This is a great poem above a passionate sun. I will forgive you for indulging in this personification because you wrote a well-crafted and entertaining poem with a twist at the end. What struck me most was the smoothness of your rhymes and rhythm. I can hear your words in my ear. Your description is passionate and I thought you were describing a couple of lovers:
"For years I've been your one desire
To warm your heart with burning fire."
Alas, it is only a sunbake, and a polished, funny love poem to the sun. Thank you for sharing. Please put on sunscreen.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Hi Sis Cat, I am pleased you thought this a funny love poem to the sun .I do love the sun it always makes me feel alive and warms the cockrels of my heart. I couldn't resist one last sunbake before the cold sets in. No sunscreen for me haven't used that for years. ( I know .I Know LOL ) Thanks for your great review and support Cheers Christine
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Christine, this is a very cleverly written poem. I had to read it twice to fully appreciate it. Initially it reads like two lovers, which I'm sure is your intention. However, by the time the end of your poem is reached it's all about sunshine and sunny days. Well done for this excellent read. ~DD
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Christine, this is a very cleverly written poem. I had to read it twice to fully appreciate it. Initially it reads like two lovers, which I'm sure is your intention. However, by the time the end of your poem is reached it's all about sunshine and sunny days. Well done for this excellent read. ~DD
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Hi DD, Ha Ha, yes it is about the Sun ( I love the sun and sunbake as often as I can and we are like two lovers LOL) I am glad you like it's double meaning and Thank you so much for your review. Your comments made me smile.. Sending you some Sun Cheers Christine
Comment from Kooky Clown
What a great poem it rhymes well and keeps you interested to the last line when the whole rhyme is explained great read, loved it well done. Kooky
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What a great poem it rhymes well and keeps you interested to the last line when the whole rhyme is explained great read, loved it well done. Kooky
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Hi Kooky, Thank you so much for your review and great rating for my poem. I wasn't sure how it would go so I am pleased you liked it. You have made my night (it's 1145pm) Cheers Christine