Falling Off The Edge
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Comment from Sasha
What a relief! You really had me worried but it seems you have a good lawyer and she knows what she is doing. I cannot wait to read the next chapter and hopefully hear some more good new.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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What a relief! You really had me worried but it seems you have a good lawyer and she knows what she is doing. I cannot wait to read the next chapter and hopefully hear some more good new.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Sasha, thank you so much. I am so hopelessly behind in answering, fell quite bad about it. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Whew! You made it! You had a very busy day and I think you deserved that double if that's what yanks your chain. LOL
Putting it in the hands of a lawyer you trusted took a load off your shoulders. She would no doubt sort it all out for you. No pain , no strain. Well done. xsx Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Whew! You made it! You had a very busy day and I think you deserved that double if that's what yanks your chain. LOL
Putting it in the hands of a lawyer you trusted took a load off your shoulders. She would no doubt sort it all out for you. No pain , no strain. Well done. xsx Nancy
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Oh dear, Nancy, I'm so late in answering but thanks a lot for the great review. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from BruceMiller
I found this to be an interesting read. It held me right from the start. The dialogue certainly was believable. The story line moved smoothly without the interruption of spelling or grammatical glitches. Also, it's refreshing to read something written by an author the has a good knowledge of punctuation. I'll look out for your next installment. Cheers.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I found this to be an interesting read. It held me right from the start. The dialogue certainly was believable. The story line moved smoothly without the interruption of spelling or grammatical glitches. Also, it's refreshing to read something written by an author the has a good knowledge of punctuation. I'll look out for your next installment. Cheers.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Thanks a lot for this great review. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Douglas Paul
I think you did a good job of closing out this phase of your story and setting us up for future developments. Your writing is always fluid and you make good use of conversation. Well done, Ulla
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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I think you did a good job of closing out this phase of your story and setting us up for future developments. Your writing is always fluid and you make good use of conversation. Well done, Ulla
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Hi Douglas, Thank you so much for this great review. All the best. Ulla:)
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
So, you managed to find a competent lawyer who seems intent on helping you get your inheritance. I don't think it's a bit greedy to want what you are owed, and especially after having been treated poorly. I can't wait to find out how it turns out for you.
Rhonda
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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So, you managed to find a competent lawyer who seems intent on helping you get your inheritance. I don't think it's a bit greedy to want what you are owed, and especially after having been treated poorly. I can't wait to find out how it turns out for you.
Rhonda
Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Hi Rhonda, Thank you so much for the great review, All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Ulla
= Oh, wonderful! You're on your way to what is rightfully yours!
= I missed the first part of your autobiography, so I've never read about why you and your adoptive mother didn't get along. Must have been traumatic.
= Sad, and it must have been hard to be adopted, but not have a good relationship.
= Just some minor SPAG.
= Typo: for warned / forewarned.
<> Upper case: no / No
= she said was, "[no](No) need for that, Ulla."
<> Slight edit.
= YOURS=
= Another taxi, and half an hour later I was in the airport.
=SUGGEST=
= Another taxi, and a half-hour later I was in the airport.
<> Add: it
= please, and could you make (it) a double!"
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Hi, Ulla
= Oh, wonderful! You're on your way to what is rightfully yours!
= I missed the first part of your autobiography, so I've never read about why you and your adoptive mother didn't get along. Must have been traumatic.
= Sad, and it must have been hard to be adopted, but not have a good relationship.
= Just some minor SPAG.
= Typo: for warned / forewarned.
<> Upper case: no / No
= she said was, "[no](No) need for that, Ulla."
<> Slight edit.
= YOURS=
= Another taxi, and half an hour later I was in the airport.
=SUGGEST=
= Another taxi, and a half-hour later I was in the airport.
<> Add: it
= please, and could you make (it) a double!"
=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)
=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Hi Jax, thanks for this and sorry about the late reply. Have corrected ages ago. I'm beginning to catch up now. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from konni
You've got a story here that's interesting, but over-explained. eg. Description of lawyer: Severe bun, dk blue suit= power look--all you need.
Eg. Fifth par. Second sentence is over-burdened. Ask yourself, does this info further the plot? That she ordinarily would be in the courtroom, had represented her before, etc.?
Consider starting your story with a meager description of the lawyer and the actual important conversation. You can show the prettiness/kindness of the lawyer that way, if necessary. Omit the hi and how are ya, nice day--always.
Hope this helps. Best of luck with this project.
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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You've got a story here that's interesting, but over-explained. eg. Description of lawyer: Severe bun, dk blue suit= power look--all you need.
Eg. Fifth par. Second sentence is over-burdened. Ask yourself, does this info further the plot? That she ordinarily would be in the courtroom, had represented her before, etc.?
Consider starting your story with a meager description of the lawyer and the actual important conversation. You can show the prettiness/kindness of the lawyer that way, if necessary. Omit the hi and how are ya, nice day--always.
Hope this helps. Best of luck with this project.
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Comment Written 16-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2016
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