Falling Off The Edge
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Comment from seaglass
How sad she would say such things to you
And what a mean lawyer! A few boo boo
In one word coffin, I think its mis-spelled. I'm one place,
The word recognized should be recognize. I look froward to the rest of this story
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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How sad she would say such things to you
And what a mean lawyer! A few boo boo
In one word coffin, I think its mis-spelled. I'm one place,
The word recognized should be recognize. I look froward to the rest of this story
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much, seaglass, I have been without inter net for two days, so I am hopelessly behind. All the best. Ulla
Comment from DonandVicki
You have a way of writing that hold on to the reader attention and then you end the story with the reader wanting more. Good solid story written very well.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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You have a way of writing that hold on to the reader attention and then you end the story with the reader wanting more. Good solid story written very well.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much. I am very pleased. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Ulla, it is hard for me to imagine what you lived through. To be adopted and end up with a souless woman. Reading this chapter, your description of how things were gives me a greater understanding of your feelings for your adoptive mother. Then having to sit through this funeral service brought flashbacks for you to remember. The attorney, what a piece of work!
I am looking forward to your next chapter. This is an exceptionally written story and thank you for sharing your true life experience.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Ulla, it is hard for me to imagine what you lived through. To be adopted and end up with a souless woman. Reading this chapter, your description of how things were gives me a greater understanding of your feelings for your adoptive mother. Then having to sit through this funeral service brought flashbacks for you to remember. The attorney, what a piece of work!
I am looking forward to your next chapter. This is an exceptionally written story and thank you for sharing your true life experience.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much for this great review. I am so pleased that you like it. Yeah, she was something else. Very Victorian, really, living in another world. Thanks ever so much again. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Drew Delaney
where she threw the earth on the coffint while reciting,"from earth have you come and to earth will you again return," and the service came to its natural ( I think threw earth could be changed. Throwing is like throwing a ball or large object. Possibly spreading some dirt )
Coffint while reciting
Remove the t and add a capital letter when you begin some speech inside quotes.
You tell a wonderful story which is filled with pain from your past.
I hope things will eventually improve in your heart. I can't imagine that mouse of a lawyer talking to you like that. How horrid!
Drew xx
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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where she threw the earth on the coffint while reciting,"from earth have you come and to earth will you again return," and the service came to its natural ( I think threw earth could be changed. Throwing is like throwing a ball or large object. Possibly spreading some dirt )
Coffint while reciting
Remove the t and add a capital letter when you begin some speech inside quotes.
You tell a wonderful story which is filled with pain from your past.
I hope things will eventually improve in your heart. I can't imagine that mouse of a lawyer talking to you like that. How horrid!
Drew xx
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Hi Drew, Thanks so much for this great review. I have made the corrections. I can't say too much about the lawyer nor my adoptive mother as I would reveal too much of the story. But a piece of work he was. I am so pleased for all your support. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Sherylsart
Sounds like a very uncomfortable experience. And I know panic attacks are no fun, so getting away from her was a good choice. The customs are very different from what I know, so it is very interesting to me. (I am Jewish, and live in the US.)A few spags:
collar that resembled a clown(')s collar.
I faded out(,) not capable to listen to the nonsense and my thoughts ... Better wording might be 'able to listen', or 'capable of listening'
I stood watching as six men from the congregation, (who) I didn't recognise(d), ... Get rid of the (d).
Very interesting reading. Of course you again left us at a critical moment...
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Sounds like a very uncomfortable experience. And I know panic attacks are no fun, so getting away from her was a good choice. The customs are very different from what I know, so it is very interesting to me. (I am Jewish, and live in the US.)A few spags:
collar that resembled a clown(')s collar.
I faded out(,) not capable to listen to the nonsense and my thoughts ... Better wording might be 'able to listen', or 'capable of listening'
I stood watching as six men from the congregation, (who) I didn't recognise(d), ... Get rid of the (d).
Very interesting reading. Of course you again left us at a critical moment...
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Sheryl, I can assure you she was not a nice person at all. Have made corrections and thanks a lot for reading. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
paragraph 12, line 3: They made me feel (as if) I was suffocating. I could barely breath(e)
It must have been awful for you, Ulla. I can't believe that man has said those things, can't wait to see what you reveal in the next chapter. Take care, Giddy
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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paragraph 12, line 3: They made me feel (as if) I was suffocating. I could barely breath(e)
It must have been awful for you, Ulla. I can't believe that man has said those things, can't wait to see what you reveal in the next chapter. Take care, Giddy
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Hi Giddy. Thanks a lot. Don't know how I didn't see this but have made corrections. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Ric Myworld
There are always those greedy bastards (sorry for the word choice, but it is fitting) like the lawyer who are not in the least bit worried about anything, but money of course. I already want to choke him. And, I learned early in my childhood that it's much easier to ask for forgive after beating someone's butt, than obtaining permission. Great chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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There are always those greedy bastards (sorry for the word choice, but it is fitting) like the lawyer who are not in the least bit worried about anything, but money of course. I already want to choke him. And, I learned early in my childhood that it's much easier to ask for forgive after beating someone's butt, than obtaining permission. Great chapter. :-)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Oh, Rick, you make me laugh. Thanks a lot for this uplifting review. He was excactly as you describe him and so apt it is as well. You'll see how bad he actually was. Thanks for all your support. All the best. Ulla:)
Comment from doggymad
I know just how you felt in that church. I suppose people sympathized out of politeness despite barely knowing you.
I don't know what year the law changed here to allow adopted children inherit from the adoptive parents, but they can now
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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I know just how you felt in that church. I suppose people sympathized out of politeness despite barely knowing you.
I don't know what year the law changed here to allow adopted children inherit from the adoptive parents, but they can now
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Hi Freda, thanks a lot for this great review. At this stage I can't say too much as it would give too much away. Hugs. Ulla
Comment from JTStone
I love your work on both stories. I remember you mentioning something about both your adoptive and natural mother in my last review. You have done a marvelous job of differentiating the two. In this story, you have clarified it constantly in your writing. Anyone paying attention knows they are worlds apart geographically. This story is in the Netherlands, your natural mom is in California.
Well done story. It follows your thought. Which I find as good as anyone's writing that uses dialog. It's harder to write, though you've made it easy to follow.
Great reading.
Jimmy
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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I love your work on both stories. I remember you mentioning something about both your adoptive and natural mother in my last review. You have done a marvelous job of differentiating the two. In this story, you have clarified it constantly in your writing. Anyone paying attention knows they are worlds apart geographically. This story is in the Netherlands, your natural mom is in California.
Well done story. It follows your thought. Which I find as good as anyone's writing that uses dialog. It's harder to write, though you've made it easy to follow.
Great reading.
Jimmy
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Hi Jimmy, thanks a lot for your great review. Just so there is no confusion this story takes place in Denmark. At least so far. Thanks a lot for reading. All the best. Ulla
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That was presumptuous don't you think? She WAS your mother after all. Maybe you WERE estranged, but you might have attended out of respect for the fact she was instrumental in raising you. What an insult! And how embarrassing that had to be. I hope you had a good retort! xsx Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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That was presumptuous don't you think? She WAS your mother after all. Maybe you WERE estranged, but you might have attended out of respect for the fact she was instrumental in raising you. What an insult! And how embarrassing that had to be. I hope you had a good retort! xsx Nancy
Comment Written 18-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Well, to be honest, Nancy. I didn't really know why I bothered to travel all the way from London to Copenhagen to attend her funeral. I am to find out now though. I am sorry if this sounds callous, but I had lost all respect for her years prior to this. What I will never understand is, why she treated me as she did. But that is all water under the bridge. More is to follow soon. All the best. Ulla