2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "5/7/5 (putrid cadaver)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from LIJ Red
Sounds like the CDC is nearing a cure for the zombie apocalypse. Originally a cannibal cadaver was a ghoul. Gombies? Zhouls? I am not the authority on Haiku or five seven five. This seems fine to me.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Sounds like the CDC is nearing a cure for the zombie apocalypse. Originally a cannibal cadaver was a ghoul. Gombies? Zhouls? I am not the authority on Haiku or five seven five. This seems fine to me.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the review. :)
Comment from rspoet
This is a horror-able poem
I guess that's a good thing
for a 5-7-5 horror contest
Excellent horrific imagery
with good connection
Very good use of alliteration
Excellent presentation with art? work
and blood red font
Well done, or should I say "raw"
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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This is a horror-able poem
I guess that's a good thing
for a 5-7-5 horror contest
Excellent horrific imagery
with good connection
Very good use of alliteration
Excellent presentation with art? work
and blood red font
Well done, or should I say "raw"
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review. I really appreciate it.
Comment from patcelaw
Now let me see if I can guess who this writer might be. Nah, I will just keep the secret in my head, lest he/she suck the blood out of my weary body. Nice going. Patricia
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Now let me see if I can guess who this writer might be. Nah, I will just keep the secret in my head, lest he/she suck the blood out of my weary body. Nice going. Patricia
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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LOL Thank you very much Patricia, I appreciate your review and kind words. You may be surprised :)
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I know all too well I could be surprised, but.........
Comment from trumby
very gross, mate. But it could be a summary of any zombie movie out there.
Very topical & current. I find it interesting that horror writing & movies are quite popular, yet killing people in real life is frowned upon.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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very gross, mate. But it could be a summary of any zombie movie out there.
Very topical & current. I find it interesting that horror writing & movies are quite popular, yet killing people in real life is frowned upon.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much trumby, I appreciate your review and kind words. I think it is different in real life than in the movies, but I get what you're saying.
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I tend to wax lyrical on occasion, mate. forgive me
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no worries :)
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I'm not even allowed to sharpen my knife in public and cleaning my guns in public is DEFINITELY frowned upon. LOL
Comment from frogbook
Scary words and artwork too. great use of the prompt in a great contest. Best of luck with the contest.....as well as the virus.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Scary words and artwork too. great use of the prompt in a great contest. Best of luck with the contest.....as well as the virus.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much frogbook, I appreciate your review and kind words.
Comment from l.raven
OMG this sounds like the master of horror...Dean...so very well thought of...and so very well written...your artwork and your poem brilliant...luff xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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OMG this sounds like the master of horror...Dean...so very well thought of...and so very well written...your artwork and your poem brilliant...luff xxoo
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much l raven, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. : It is not Dean but thank you for the compliment. :)
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you are so welcome...for both...it a great poem...Luff xxoo
Comment from c_lucas
Ghouls gather around
Bodies freshly slain, sightless
Salt and pepper, please.
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Somehow, Dean has to be involved. This is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Ghouls gather around
Bodies freshly slain, sightless
Salt and pepper, please.
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Somehow, Dean has to be involved. This is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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It is not Dean but thank you for the compliment. :) No, Dean had nothing to do with it, but thank you for the compliment.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Joy Graham
You have a great display of pictures here. Someone has been learning from Dean, me thinks :) Your syllables are all correct. You should do well in this contest. I'm thinking you'd be a strong contender.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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You have a great display of pictures here. Someone has been learning from Dean, me thinks :) Your syllables are all correct. You should do well in this contest. I'm thinking you'd be a strong contender.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much :) I have learned a lot from Dean but this is all me. I didn't ask him for help. Thank you for your great review. :)
Comment from Glasstruth
Yuk! Nice alliteration for a soulless bag of bones. Gross, but that's the goal here. Great presentation with pictures and blood splattered. Awesome! Les
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Yuk! Nice alliteration for a soulless bag of bones. Gross, but that's the goal here. Great presentation with pictures and blood splattered. Awesome! Les
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much Les, I appreciate your excellent review. :)
Comment from RodG
I like how you have paired your poems with bright, garish photos.
The first two lines really work for me. The words "putrid cadaver" are a perfect phrase for describing a zombie. It brings out ALL five senses. And "soulless" gives us still another anti-human trait. But your third line changes the TONE of your poem drastically from horror to parody. "Rare character" seems to suggest he's a character on a stage, not something gruesome climbing out of a grave.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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I like how you have paired your poems with bright, garish photos.
The first two lines really work for me. The words "putrid cadaver" are a perfect phrase for describing a zombie. It brings out ALL five senses. And "soulless" gives us still another anti-human trait. But your third line changes the TONE of your poem drastically from horror to parody. "Rare character" seems to suggest he's a character on a stage, not something gruesome climbing out of a grave.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Thank your Rod, I appreciate your feedback and review.