Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Stranger"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from seaglass
This is beautifully rhymed and the intro verse and its repetition gives it the eerie feeling I'm sure you intended. The interpretation might be many things; the gold digger looing for financially secure widows, the predator who seek to exploit children, or the serial killer looking for another victim. It toys with the reader's thought.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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This is beautifully rhymed and the intro verse and its repetition gives it the eerie feeling I'm sure you intended. The interpretation might be many things; the gold digger looing for financially secure widows, the predator who seek to exploit children, or the serial killer looking for another victim. It toys with the reader's thought.
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Comment from dmt1967
This is a really good poem and I liked the way it flowed. The structure of the poem was good and I liked the style of writing as well. The picture added to the poem. Thank you for sharing.
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This is a really good poem and I liked the way it flowed. The structure of the poem was good and I liked the style of writing as well. The picture added to the poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
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Comment from rjuselius
This is an interesting way to bring up a strangers lure dear Brett! Someone to make your heart beat faster and faster until you are ready to explode. A strangers love is pure lust in my humble opinion.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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This is an interesting way to bring up a strangers lure dear Brett! Someone to make your heart beat faster and faster until you are ready to explode. A strangers love is pure lust in my humble opinion.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice job Brett,
I liked these lyrics a lot. But I hate the estranger :)
-good flow
-kept my interest from start to end
-excellent story lines
-excellent rhythm
Write On!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Nice job Brett,
I liked these lyrics a lot. But I hate the estranger :)
-good flow
-kept my interest from start to end
-excellent story lines
-excellent rhythm
Write On!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Believe me, I will write on.
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haha... I started to write 'write on!' because reviewers were writing that to me and I thought it is a cool phrase.
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Thank you. I started that phrase on this site and it is starting to catch on. Write on.
Comment from patcelaw
Brett this is a sad commentary on the life of a lonely woman. I have dealt with those who wanted me because they saw me as one to be conquered. I no longer want to deal with men like this and am quite happy to be alone. Blessings Patricia
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Brett this is a sad commentary on the life of a lonely woman. I have dealt with those who wanted me because they saw me as one to be conquered. I no longer want to deal with men like this and am quite happy to be alone. Blessings Patricia
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments and support as always.
Comment from Sis Cat
This is an excellent country music poem. I can hear the words sang in my ear in a gravelly voice accompanied by a steel guitar. This poem possesses great musicality and images that resonate in my memory and my heart.
The only suggestion I would make is to add a comma before "darling" for clarity in this sentence: "He's a danger to you darling. . ."
This country song poem engaged my imagination. Thank you for sharing.
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This is an excellent country music poem. I can hear the words sang in my ear in a gravelly voice accompanied by a steel guitar. This poem possesses great musicality and images that resonate in my memory and my heart.
The only suggestion I would make is to add a comma before "darling" for clarity in this sentence: "He's a danger to you darling. . ."
This country song poem engaged my imagination. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
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Comment from Pantygynt
Another one I could sing from first view. The tunes just jump into the mind. This has to be the sign of a good lyric, particularly one that is going to be set to a relatively simple piece of music as most country style music is. This is a simple and universal story. Very effective.
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Another one I could sing from first view. The tunes just jump into the mind. This has to be the sign of a good lyric, particularly one that is going to be set to a relatively simple piece of music as most country style music is. This is a simple and universal story. Very effective.
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Comment from royowen
I admire the poet who can be so imaginative that he plucks a a theme seemingly out of the air, and does it brilliantly as you have done so here! The poem is articulate, unpretentious, it uses language perfectly in its image endeavours, the narrative is smooth and expressive, nice couplet rhyming with proximates, well done, blessings, Roy.
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I admire the poet who can be so imaginative that he plucks a a theme seemingly out of the air, and does it brilliantly as you have done so here! The poem is articulate, unpretentious, it uses language perfectly in its image endeavours, the narrative is smooth and expressive, nice couplet rhyming with proximates, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
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Most welcome,
Comment from mfowler
This story/poem has a dark and daunting mood. It warns the girl about this self focussed gambler who's conquering hearts and bodies for miles around. It's a real C&W tale of dirty dealings, a poor woman scorned and a trail of broken hearts. Your verse flows well through good rhyme and rhythm. A very entertaining piece.
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This story/poem has a dark and daunting mood. It warns the girl about this self focussed gambler who's conquering hearts and bodies for miles around. It's a real C&W tale of dirty dealings, a poor woman scorned and a trail of broken hearts. Your verse flows well through good rhyme and rhythm. A very entertaining piece.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
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Comment from Eric1
Hi Brett, beautifully structured and well written poem / lyrics, you have used description to it's full advantage,
Great rhyming, rhythm and flow lift this to a lot greater height than most my friend.
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Hi Brett, beautifully structured and well written poem / lyrics, you have used description to it's full advantage,
Great rhyming, rhythm and flow lift this to a lot greater height than most my friend.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments and support. Trying to decide if I should pursue building my lyrics into a poetry book and looking for feedback about that from people familiar with my lyrics.
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You are welcome Brett, personally I would go for the book my friend.
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Thanks for your feedback. Appreciate it very much.