Dolphins
...let them find your happiness44 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is so profound Tony and so deserving of my last six for the week. I too am that person at times who looks in instead of out.
Teresa
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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This is so profound Tony and so deserving of my last six for the week. I too am that person at times who looks in instead of out.
Teresa
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much, Teresa, for your review and six stars. Honoured that you should part with that precious 'last of the week' bundle!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I know very little about Greek mythology and the association with the star constellations. I could never see past the moon. LOL Thank you for your notes. Was the picture your inspiration? Well done Tony. :<) Nancy
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I know very little about Greek mythology and the association with the star constellations. I could never see past the moon. LOL Thank you for your notes. Was the picture your inspiration? Well done Tony. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Nancy. No, the poem came first. It was serendipity that there was a matching picture on FanArtReview.
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WOW I bet it was! LOL
Comment from Mark Schardine
Thank you for the author notes, without which I would not have understood the poem.
The ancient gods were often as emotional and erratic as any human being, and in spite of their supernatural powers, they could also be unhappy. You capture a moment when despair afflicts one of the gods, and it seems he will never recover.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thank you for the author notes, without which I would not have understood the poem.
The ancient gods were often as emotional and erratic as any human being, and in spite of their supernatural powers, they could also be unhappy. You capture a moment when despair afflicts one of the gods, and it seems he will never recover.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Mark. The ancient gods were certainly an unpredictable lot. I suppose they mirrored the Greeks' experience of life in that.
Comment from Lost n Thought
This is a captivating poem! It tells a story that is interesting and fun to read. The presentation is done very well. A beautiful piece, great job!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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This is a captivating poem! It tells a story that is interesting and fun to read. The presentation is done very well. A beautiful piece, great job!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Lost n Thought. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Pili Pubul
Thank you for this delightful poem inspired by Greek Mythology
Love very much the style and the love tale, good imagery.
Very meaningful first stanza, can relate sometimes....
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thank you for this delightful poem inspired by Greek Mythology
Love very much the style and the love tale, good imagery.
Very meaningful first stanza, can relate sometimes....
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Pili. Relating to this kind of introspection can be good at times, just so long as you don't overdose! LOL
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You are right... Pili
Comment from Whitemorn
I enjoyed this. It made me think. I catch myself having Neptune's attitude far too often ... especially regarding the first three lines. I enjoy mythology, so thank you. ;)
I am at a loss with this new rating format, but I awarded 5 stars because I found no reason for less. ;)
Carry on my friend, Whitemorn :)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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I enjoyed this. It made me think. I catch myself having Neptune's attitude far too often ... especially regarding the first three lines. I enjoy mythology, so thank you. ;)
I am at a loss with this new rating format, but I awarded 5 stars because I found no reason for less. ;)
Carry on my friend, Whitemorn :)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thanks for you empathetic review, Whitethorn. I can relate to your difficulties with the new format. I've retreated back into the 'classic' mode for the moment.
Comment from Nosha17
You have captured the sense of melancholia that he feels for the loss of his loved one well with your choice of words. Good use of imagery and descriptive language to convey your thoughts. Informative notes on the mythological story, an enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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You have captured the sense of melancholia that he feels for the loss of his loved one well with your choice of words. Good use of imagery and descriptive language to convey your thoughts. Informative notes on the mythological story, an enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Faye. It' not good to sit about moping, even if you're a god - especially if you're a god! LOL
Comment from Dean Kuch
How wonderfully romantic is much of Greek mythology, I ask you, Tony? Your poem showcases yet another couple of characters, King Neptune and Salacia, who eventually became his wife of Neptune. At the behest of Dolphins the King sent to fetch her, they brought her back to wed him and share in his kingdom.
Your poem makes an interesting, yet powerful statement. We can drown in self-pity and sorrow...or....we can look deep into the depths of our souls and realize that perhaps we have much to be thankful and happy for after all.
Excellent work! ~Dean
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How wonderfully romantic is much of Greek mythology, I ask you, Tony? Your poem showcases yet another couple of characters, King Neptune and Salacia, who eventually became his wife of Neptune. At the behest of Dolphins the King sent to fetch her, they brought her back to wed him and share in his kingdom.
Your poem makes an interesting, yet powerful statement. We can drown in self-pity and sorrow...or....we can look deep into the depths of our souls and realize that perhaps we have much to be thankful and happy for after all.
Excellent work! ~Dean
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Dean. That was exactly what I was trying to get across.
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It's always a pleasure, Tony. :)
~Dean
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Tony.
I've had the same problem as a suitor, in that many of my potential recipients have disappeared from sight - perhaps at sea, or in fact intentionally drowned themselves to escape my not so 'distinguished' manner. ;-)
seriously, this is a very poetic offering of whimsy (if that's the right word).
With much respect, maybe consider a sub for repeated, 'darkness' in 2nd line.
I'd humbly suggest, 'blackness' would infer a deeper double-meaning, and also 'b' alliterate with, 'blinding' in same line.
Very interesting and entertaining read.
Excellent!
Cheers, Ray.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Hi, Tony.
I've had the same problem as a suitor, in that many of my potential recipients have disappeared from sight - perhaps at sea, or in fact intentionally drowned themselves to escape my not so 'distinguished' manner. ;-)
seriously, this is a very poetic offering of whimsy (if that's the right word).
With much respect, maybe consider a sub for repeated, 'darkness' in 2nd line.
I'd humbly suggest, 'blackness' would infer a deeper double-meaning, and also 'b' alliterate with, 'blinding' in same line.
Very interesting and entertaining read.
Excellent!
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Hi, Ray. Courtship can often lead to tears! LOL. Thanks for the darkness/blackness comment. I shall go back and have another look in a moment. I was a bit uncertain about having darkness repeated on two consecutive lines.
Comment from donaldww
Hi Tony,
I felt your poem opens with a strong statement, the speaker is feeling introspective, dark thoughts, possible depression, when talking about walking in the shadows and being drawn to the depths of his being.
"and like to drown in them,"
[The metaphor appears to be moving from walking in shadows to drowning.]
I was a bit confused with the last line--
We could just as easily disport with dolphins.
--which appears to function as a kind of revelation.
Up till that point, the poem seemed to be about a single speaker's metaphoric journey into yearning and despair. So I didn't understand how the plural "we" or frolicking with dolphins related to that theme.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Hi Tony,
I felt your poem opens with a strong statement, the speaker is feeling introspective, dark thoughts, possible depression, when talking about walking in the shadows and being drawn to the depths of his being.
"and like to drown in them,"
[The metaphor appears to be moving from walking in shadows to drowning.]
I was a bit confused with the last line--
We could just as easily disport with dolphins.
--which appears to function as a kind of revelation.
Up till that point, the poem seemed to be about a single speaker's metaphoric journey into yearning and despair. So I didn't understand how the plural "we" or frolicking with dolphins related to that theme.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 06-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014
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Thanks for your thoughtful review, Donald. The parallel with Neptune was intended to suggest that we both spent too much time sitting about feeling sorry for ourselves. He was saved from the doldrums by a dolphin as, metaphorically, we all can be.