Comment from joann r romei

Excellent

so scary, so she will go there and find the creepy doll, my neice is petrified of dolls, some can give off a vib or stare, lol good luck.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thanks so very much for your supportive comments, Joann. By the looks of things and the way the voters are voting, it seems I will need all of the luck that I can get to pull this one off.

Thanks again, I do appreciate it just the same. :)

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely. You deliver a complete thriller of a story which is thoroughly engaging and very well penned. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thanks, Monica, I appreciate your comments. It's not doing very well in the booth right now, but it's still early enough to mount a comeback, I suppose. :}

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Ok then...you are hooked in a porcelain stare...can't get loose...girlfriend going to Europe ..lucky thing ..you are struck with the doll...stick with the doll...who knows what Beth will find when she gets home...curses e bay
God bless

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Hopefully, the guy has lots of friends, right Jenny?

Thank you very much for your comments and support. They are appreciated. :)

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

This is a wonderful entry for this one hundred word dash competition my friend, great story told perfectly by the master of gore, good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thanks, Eric, and by the looks of things and the way the voters are voting, it seems I will need all of the luck (and votes!) that I can get. Cuteness gets 'em every time! Oh, when will I learn?!:}


Never, heh-heh...

reply by Eric1 on 18-Oct-2014

You are very welcome my friend, I voted for you!!!

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

I appreciate your support, Eric. :}

Comment from dennis0530

Excellent

eBay's description was true after all.

Some dolls are just like that. You look at them and somehow their gaze locks into yours. It mesmerizes to a point of being frozen.

Unfortunately, the real real doll is off for a European jaunt. Alone? That really mesmerizes.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

An impromptu visit to see her mum in London, spur of the moment thing. Beth was hoping to catch him at home, fill him in on all of the details, but he was otherwise... engaged at the moment.

See, Dennis? It's not too hard to explain away, happens all the time. :}

Thanks a bunch for the review.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

vivid detail in an attention-grabbing intro
I love the locked in her deadly stare line - it creates tone/mood so well
you do a good job at hinting at what fate is about to befall the speaker - a creepy story - it's difficult to create horror in so few words
Brooke

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thank you, Brooke, and you're right. Writing an effective horror story, of any length, is far more difficult than people might think. Kinda like poetry, heh-heh...

Thanks so much for your encouraging comments. I needed a few for this one! :(

reply by adewpearl on 18-Oct-2014

Yep, so many people think - hey, it's a poem. It's only 12 lines long. How much time or thought can it take to knock that off? LOL

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

If they only knew, right? :}

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

Okay - flash doesn't get much better than this, in my opinion- what a scary little story, and so polished! Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thanks a bunch, Dawn, I truly am grateful for your words of encouragement and by your generous rating, my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed this story. :}

reply by Dawn Munro on 18-Oct-2014

My pleasure.

Comment from daeneam

Excellent

Whoa! Brace yourself, dear! No one's there to help you. Haha...

I apologize for reading this the last. Next time, I'll read all entries first before casting my vote. I know you'll understand. lovelots, Mae c",

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

No worries, Mae, it happens all the time. It's not doing very well in the voting, but there's still time.

Thanks so much for your encouraging comments.

Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

An interesting story, maybe a little scary for Halloween..I am a collector of china dolls...Had one the other day fall out of her rocker (a tiny red chair that came with her years ago), she is an old looking grandma doll, & my husband & myself, hadn't a clue how this grandma fell...Ha, ha, think she was begging for some attention...As long as they don't put their little hands around my neck...I'll keep them...E-bay, though, who knows what "extra" might come with those...

Caressa

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

I'm very creeped out by porcelain dolls, Caressa, and my wife inherited 92 of them when her mother passed away in 2012. Some are okay and don't bother me too much. But there are a pair of child clowns that creep me out so badly, I can't even bring myself to glance in their direction. They're over 80 years old, too.

Strange about your grandma doll falling off the chair the way it did. Gave me chills just thinking about it!

Anyhow, this story is doing quite poorly in the contest right now, but it's still early enough, I guess. I really appreciate your thoughtful review and support.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

You have managed to cram a lot into the bare 100 words and ended up with a genuinely scary tale. I thought the ending was a tiny bit contrived - not much of a goodbye for a trip to Europe....

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thanks, Steve, and I appreciate you letting me know what worked and what didn't for you in the story. I'd hoped that people would perceive Beth as running late and having to hurry, but still wanting to get her goodbyes before she did. Well, I tried, at least. LOL...

Thanks so much again!:}