Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

HAHAHAHAHA! OMG, if this is a blind entry contest, what's the point? I'd recognize this style anywhere (and that says a LOT about the author)!

What a GREAT little story! If I am wrong about who the writer is, my apologies, but then again, if it isn't him, you've been complimented (because he is so talented)!

Best of luck with this small nightmare...:)

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Hah, well, now if all the voters of the contest entries would just
agree with you, I'd be in hog heaven right now, Bwa-ha-ha-haaaaaaaaaaa!

Thanks, Dawn, I really appreciate the fun, encouraging review!

reply by Dawn Munro on 08-Jun-2014

LOL - well, you're most welcome, but if it ISN'T Dean, please tell me who it is after the contest, would you? :)

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Most assuredly...

Comment from a.w.brooks

Exceptional

A great story, a teenager curiosity of the young girl want to know what it would be like to kiss death or in other words what to know how it would be to be dead LOL a great story and a six star great thanks for sharing and happy writing.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Thanks a million, a.w.! You nailed the meaning of the story to a tee, my friend. Many teens are so preoccupied and curious about death, especially today. Poor Jenny, well...she get a little too curious.

Thanks again, 'T'!

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

the kiss of death well portrayed with your well chosen words and vivid images
curiosity kills

cheers ..smoothiecool

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

You got it, right on the money, SC! Thanks for the encouraging review.

reply by Smoothiecool on 08-Jun-2014

most welcome..SC

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Ewwww.. gross. He kisses them and kills them? What kind of carnival is this.. a carnival in Hell? Grimm... is that the guy from the fairy tales?

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Non other than Mr. Reaper himself, Phyllis. The Kiss of Death, you might even say, LOL...

Thanks for the review, my friend. It's always a pleasure to read your unique takes on my humble offerings.

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 08-Jun-2014

Ohhh... Grim Reaper! Got it. :)

reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

8>}

Speaks to the curiosity many kids have with death, and for those who sometimes take it a bit too far.

Comment from Twonunsandachimp

Excellent

I thought it was a good story. I don't think I have any room to criticize, but was curious why you put so many S's on the end of your yes? Was it a hiss?

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Thanks, Twonunsandachimp (great user's name by the way).

Yeah, sort of like a hissing sigh, in anticipation. That's all it meant.

I appreciate the review.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This story was very well done! I liked the quick description of the two girls, especially the Goth, and the swift dialog between them. The challenge & curiosity and then the ironic ending. My kind of horror story.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Thanks, Rod, I just wish more of the voters in the contest felt the same way you do. I'm down by a single vote with just hours to spare.

Oh...woe is me!

Comment from highlander104

Excellent

OOOH! Nasty Grimm! Imagine, the girl actually paid for her demise, and a complete story in just a few words.
Good luck.

Jean K.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Yeah, thanks, Jean. I'm going to need all of the luck I can get. I'm losing in the contest, down by a single vote.

I appreciate your review, however.

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Well, that certainly is a different take on both
the prompt and the carnival kissing booth. I applaud your creativity. This line threw, though:


Avidly into Goth, Jenny was an anomaly for someone so young.

It seems to beg some explanation.

Best of luck at the polls.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Thanks a bunch, Lee. I appreciate it!

Peace...out.

Comment from Hareem.S

Excellent

This is a very interesting chpater. It's short and crisp and I like the twist in the end. Goodluck for the contest. Enjoyed reading it.

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 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014

Thanks, Hareem. Actually, it's a 100 word dash for a flash fiction contest. See the description for more details, but put quite simply, it had to be written as a stand alone story, complete, in 100 words or less.

Comment from LoannaLois

Excellent

This was a great way to take one hundred words and spin them into quite a surprising story. It started out so innocently that the surprise was complete.

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 Comment Written 08-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014

Thanks, Lois. I'm glad somebody thinks so, LOL...