Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Philosophy Jones"A collection of my poems
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Comment from beautyseeker
Oh this is really great one! The competition is fierce in this one such amazing stories/entries! I loved drawing as well! Especially enjoyed most
" then his soul shone pure and his path was sure" ... :)
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Oh this is really great one! The competition is fierce in this one such amazing stories/entries! I loved drawing as well! Especially enjoyed most
" then his soul shone pure and his path was sure" ... :)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thank you.
Yes, the competition is always fierce in this - it is the one contest I have yet to win, although I've been placed a couple of times.
Steve
Comment from Dean Kuch
What an epic tale, kiwisteveh, and so well written, with perfect rhyme, meter and flow. This has such a bouncy feel to it, despite the subject matter, which I found to be just as amazing as the verse itself.
Poor old Philosophy. I suppose he'll have three squares and a cot for Christmas after all...
Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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What an epic tale, kiwisteveh, and so well written, with perfect rhyme, meter and flow. This has such a bouncy feel to it, despite the subject matter, which I found to be just as amazing as the verse itself.
Poor old Philosophy. I suppose he'll have three squares and a cot for Christmas after all...
Well done!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Dean.
Yep, it must be a tempting thought for mny - free food and board.
Steve
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Sure thing, you're welcome.
Comment from ennahanid
A virtual 10 because I am out of 6's and I can. A standing ovation this is one swell piece for sure plus I am a bit of an O'Henry fan myself.
Got me a chuckle and a silly grin here and I thank you for it - Dinah
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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A virtual 10 because I am out of 6's and I can. A standing ovation this is one swell piece for sure plus I am a bit of an O'Henry fan myself.
Got me a chuckle and a silly grin here and I thank you for it - Dinah
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Dinah.
He has some of the best 'twisty' plot lines I have ever read - hope I've done his tale justice.
Steve
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I think you did him very, very proud with this one. My favorite was always the dying girl who says when the last ivy leaf falls she will die.
Comment from MissMerri
This is an exceptional poem without a doubt and I SO wish I had six stars to give it. But I'm quite sure there will be a bunch bestowed in the days ahead. You have told a great story and told it so well. There is no fault to find and my praises could fill a book. I love the lilting, rolling cadence, and the unusual and difficult to accomplish rhyme pattern, but of course the story is the centerpiece and you have told it beautifully. O. Henry came to mind as I finished reading, because of the genius twist at the end, which he was so good at, but your story stands on its own merit. I know you have a winner here.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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This is an exceptional poem without a doubt and I SO wish I had six stars to give it. But I'm quite sure there will be a bunch bestowed in the days ahead. You have told a great story and told it so well. There is no fault to find and my praises could fill a book. I love the lilting, rolling cadence, and the unusual and difficult to accomplish rhyme pattern, but of course the story is the centerpiece and you have told it beautifully. O. Henry came to mind as I finished reading, because of the genius twist at the end, which he was so good at, but your story stands on its own merit. I know you have a winner here.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks MM for the wonderful review. I have to learn to not post on the weekend when the sixer cupboards are all bare - this has got more virtuals than anything else I've written. :o(
Steve
Comment from gramalot8
Kiwi, this is a good story. I loved the scenes you paint of Philosophy Jones and the many scenarios he'd get into. And, then, just as he seems to want the change, he goes to jail anyway..At least he is warm again for one for Christmas and maybe then he'll continue mending his ways in the new year. LOL... Great job and thanks for sharing this with us. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Kiwi, this is a good story. I loved the scenes you paint of Philosophy Jones and the many scenarios he'd get into. And, then, just as he seems to want the change, he goes to jail anyway..At least he is warm again for one for Christmas and maybe then he'll continue mending his ways in the new year. LOL... Great job and thanks for sharing this with us. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks for your kind words.
Have a great day!
Steve
Comment from SPIsanddollar
Wonderful writing and telling of the story! I will read at the next family gathering. The conniving character is difficult to dislke! Thank you.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Wonderful writing and telling of the story! I will read at the next family gathering. The conniving character is difficult to dislke! Thank you.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks for the kind words and the six stars - much appreciated.
Steve
Comment from AudreyRose
This was wonderfully done, what an ironic ending. The details really brought the poem to life, helped to make this mans plight and solutions clear. The emotions were clear as we'll. Good job.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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This was wonderfully done, what an ironic ending. The details really brought the poem to life, helped to make this mans plight and solutions clear. The emotions were clear as we'll. Good job.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks, AR
Have a great day!
Steve
Comment from w.j.debi
So your character is twice blest in the end, by getting off and getting the warm bed he planned on.This is an excellent tale. I have an O. Henry book on the shelf so I'll have to pull it down a read a tale or two. Good end rhymes and go flow to your rhythm.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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So your character is twice blest in the end, by getting off and getting the warm bed he planned on.This is an excellent tale. I have an O. Henry book on the shelf so I'll have to pull it down a read a tale or two. Good end rhymes and go flow to your rhythm.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thank you!
The O. Henry story is called 'The Cop and the Anthem'
Steve
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wow this is great! I had forgotten about O Henry! This poem deserves a six but alas it is Saturday and I don't have one. The poem was very well written and shows the irony of life. Well done Steve. It's a keeper. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Wow this is great! I had forgotten about O Henry! This poem deserves a six but alas it is Saturday and I don't have one. The poem was very well written and shows the irony of life. Well done Steve. It's a keeper. Nancy
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Nancy
I always seem to end up posting on a Saturday and get lots of 'virtual' sixes.... :o(
The O. Henry story is called 'The Cop and the Anthem'
Steve
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is one of the best story poems that I have read. Your rhyme and meter were great as well as the story you told. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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This is one of the best story poems that I have read. Your rhyme and meter were great as well as the story you told. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Teresa, thanks for the high praise.
Have a great day.
Steve