Comment from Princesseunice

Excellent

Aww, mango dear.
Going to school....could be annoying, even for dogs.
I especially liked the part where Bert told her she would have to stop saying 'aint'
Nice.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013

I try to put messages throughout the story. Thank you for reading this. I appreciate it very much. John

Comment from goompa

Excellent

To me, this is a very delightful and extremely well-written children's story. I especially like the mood it creates, the dialogue and the lessons taught. Thanks!

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 Comment Written 21-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013

Goompa... Hopefully you can read this to your grandchildren. Thanks for stopping by. John

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

This well-written, touching narrative has lessons for all--children and adults alike. You've made excellent use of dialogue.

Misuse of "there" and "their" in paragraph starting "On Monday . . ." (You reversed them.)

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 Comment Written 21-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2013

Thank you Janice. I just made those corrections. I appreciate the encouraging review. John