Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Redemption"A collection of my poems
97 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
This one sent chills up my spine with the sadness, the gloom and storm. Good job building the tension and fear right up to the end and then the wonderful ending...
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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This one sent chills up my spine with the sadness, the gloom and storm. Good job building the tension and fear right up to the end and then the wonderful ending...
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thanks for the warm words and the six stars - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from 9999pool
A great story of redemption. He sinned in his younger days and now three lives are gone and someone paid for his deceit.
Now it's time he saved the lives of his mate with his own. He paid his dues in blood and a life for a few lives, he did sacrifice his life.
Now at home with the stranger, he is Home again. And who that stranger is - needless to dsay it will depend on our faith and belief, smiles.
Beautiful write and well penned.
A wonderful story in a poem well told.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Have a pleasant and great weekend!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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A great story of redemption. He sinned in his younger days and now three lives are gone and someone paid for his deceit.
Now it's time he saved the lives of his mate with his own. He paid his dues in blood and a life for a few lives, he did sacrifice his life.
Now at home with the stranger, he is Home again. And who that stranger is - needless to dsay it will depend on our faith and belief, smiles.
Beautiful write and well penned.
A wonderful story in a poem well told.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Have a pleasant and great weekend!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Ritchie
Glad you enjoyed my abab tale.
Steve
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A wonderful story of redemption. At least his conscience can be clear now after all those years of haunting due to the guilt.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Redemption' is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. This talented poet's work carries an important message. It was a privilege to read and review a poem of this standard.
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'Redemption' is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. This talented poet's work carries an important message. It was a privilege to read and review a poem of this standard.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thanks for the warm words and the six stars - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow!
This poem is so well written and you
grabbed my attention at the start and
held it until the end.
I really like the concept of redemption and the good turn that saved the others.
Very well rhymed in ABAB style and very well presented.
Sorry, I only have a five but very worthy of a six.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Wow!
This poem is so well written and you
grabbed my attention at the start and
held it until the end.
I really like the concept of redemption and the good turn that saved the others.
Very well rhymed in ABAB style and very well presented.
Sorry, I only have a five but very worthy of a six.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thanks for the warm words and the virtual six stars - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from JonnyRhymes
This was a compelling read; haunting, mysterious and mythical in tone and a story packed with vivid and at times violent imagery. Excellent stuff!
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This was a compelling read; haunting, mysterious and mythical in tone and a story packed with vivid and at times violent imagery. Excellent stuff!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thanks for the warm words and the six stars - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Divine Justice stalks the night, at last finding the repentant murderer. Excellently even-handed: painful death for the man and redemption for the repentant soul. Well done, as always, Steve. :) nancy
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Divine Justice stalks the night, at last finding the repentant murderer. Excellently even-handed: painful death for the man and redemption for the repentant soul. Well done, as always, Steve. :) nancy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Nancy!
Steve
Comment from Rondeno
The strong rhyme and rhythm are maintained throughout this excellent story, and your usual verbal pyrotechnics are very much on display. Great work.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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The strong rhyme and rhythm are maintained throughout this excellent story, and your usual verbal pyrotechnics are very much on display. Great work.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Mike
...and here I was thinking I'd kept the pyrotechnics under control this time.
Steve
Comment from onkughosh19
Quite a lomg poem but hald my interest right through.You have expresed your thoughts beautifully here.Not once did I think it wsa a father and son relationship.
The picure is alright and the title is apt.The rhyming is good.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Quite a lomg poem but hald my interest right through.You have expresed your thoughts beautifully here.Not once did I think it wsa a father and son relationship.
The picure is alright and the title is apt.The rhyming is good.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Author Unknown
Hi Steve...This is wonderfully sad...perfectly written, and so sorry to have no more sixers. The flow and rhyme are great. The last lines are beautiful. Lovely work! Best in the contest too. A.
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Hi Steve...This is wonderfully sad...perfectly written, and so sorry to have no more sixers. The flow and rhyme are great. The last lines are beautiful. Lovely work! Best in the contest too. A.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Thanks for the warm words and the virtual six stars - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh, I do hope you get out of this deathly mood, soon Steve. Nevertheless, this is magnificently written. I always enjoy your perfect rhyming and your meter seems to read with out a slip-up. Once again I read it out loud and the story became very plain on the second reading. Well done, Giddy
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Oh, I do hope you get out of this deathly mood, soon Steve. Nevertheless, this is magnificently written. I always enjoy your perfect rhyming and your meter seems to read with out a slip-up. Once again I read it out loud and the story became very plain on the second reading. Well done, Giddy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013
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Giddy, thanks for the warm words and the six stars - glad you enjoyed.
Steve