Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "To Sappho"Poems written using the pantoum form
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Comment from n.rosej.
Wow, this is a very beautiful poem. It touches my heart. I love the fourth stanza:
"Cruel Eros made it hard for me
To sing my soul's eternal tune
He set my heart adrift at sea
My lyric voice beseeched the moon"
The background color compliments the image you chose. Great write. Blessings :)
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Wow, this is a very beautiful poem. It touches my heart. I love the fourth stanza:
"Cruel Eros made it hard for me
To sing my soul's eternal tune
He set my heart adrift at sea
My lyric voice beseeched the moon"
The background color compliments the image you chose. Great write. Blessings :)
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, N.Rosej. I appreciate you taking the time to review and your kind comments.
Comment from Spitfire
An excellent theme, although I don't like the exclamation point in line 2. I don't see the reason for it. Word choices indicate that the seeker went mad:
my heart adrift at sea
notes of tidal lunacy
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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An excellent theme, although I don't like the exclamation point in line 2. I don't see the reason for it. Word choices indicate that the seeker went mad:
my heart adrift at sea
notes of tidal lunacy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Spitfire. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars. I have no idea how that exclamation mark crept in. It wasn't meant to be there and I have removed it. Thank you!
Comment from paulah60
Again, it seems you've mastered this difficult form of poetry, Tony. A beautifully written haunting piece. Captures the tragedy of Sappho's unrequited love, which, in the typical style of our wonderful (and largely misunderstood) ancient myths, you have personified (Eros). Six stars for successfully rising to the challenge.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Again, it seems you've mastered this difficult form of poetry, Tony. A beautifully written haunting piece. Captures the tragedy of Sappho's unrequited love, which, in the typical style of our wonderful (and largely misunderstood) ancient myths, you have personified (Eros). Six stars for successfully rising to the challenge.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Paulah. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your very kind comments and your generous six-star rating! I suspect Sappho would be saddened to be remembered more for her sexuality than her poetry. History can sometimes be cruel. I imagine that she was a highly educated woman and a wonderful friend at any level.
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I'm sure. I'm not familiar with her work, but I think that if man could overcome his arrogance in this tech-savvy world, he might see that he could learn a lot about life from the ancients.
Cheers
Paula
Comment from krys123
Thank you Tony for sharing this wonderful piece of work with fans, myself and other readers/writers. Your use of double rhymes and this rhyming quatrain were done so well that neither of the rhymes were forced, labored or strained. Your rhyming was very good and made it easy for me to read and understand your poem easily. For a while there arrows had them leading in the wrong direction for the Isle of Lesbos. What it is that mythology of the years of gods and written geniuses who wrote about them. You have a good one Tony and God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you Tony for sharing this wonderful piece of work with fans, myself and other readers/writers. Your use of double rhymes and this rhyming quatrain were done so well that neither of the rhymes were forced, labored or strained. Your rhyming was very good and made it easy for me to read and understand your poem easily. For a while there arrows had them leading in the wrong direction for the Isle of Lesbos. What it is that mythology of the years of gods and written geniuses who wrote about them. You have a good one Tony and God bless.
AK
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, AK. I appreciate you taking the time to review and your kind comments. You have a good and blessed one too!
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You are so welcome Tony
Comment from tbacha58
With notes of tidal lunacy
I set out on a lonely trip
Will Sappho ever join with me
Aboard my silent silver ship
Professor, what an amazing picture, the more beautiful is the beauty described in that unforgettable poem. You are unbelievable sir, do believe, you are a poet to be honored. Bless you Terry
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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With notes of tidal lunacy
I set out on a lonely trip
Will Sappho ever join with me
Aboard my silent silver ship
Professor, what an amazing picture, the more beautiful is the beauty described in that unforgettable poem. You are unbelievable sir, do believe, you are a poet to be honored. Bless you Terry
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Terry. I appreciate you taking the time to review and your kind comments. Your fulsome praise does the heart good!
Comment from Brocha1
you have done a really fabulous job with this pantoum.
Basing this poem on history gave it a certain richness in content. I hardly even noticed the repeating lines, only after carefully reading it a couple of times did I see the way they were so cleverly used.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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you have done a really fabulous job with this pantoum.
Basing this poem on history gave it a certain richness in content. I hardly even noticed the repeating lines, only after carefully reading it a couple of times did I see the way they were so cleverly used.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Brocha. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your very kind comments and your generous stars!
Comment from mystery poet
This is in itself a very fascinating story.
The pantoum has allowed you the power to
recite a story of high caliber by way of
the use of repeating lines. The rhythm and
rhyme are like lyrics of a song. Sad that
her beautiful work was lost. A commendable
quest on your part.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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This is in itself a very fascinating story.
The pantoum has allowed you the power to
recite a story of high caliber by way of
the use of repeating lines. The rhythm and
rhyme are like lyrics of a song. Sad that
her beautiful work was lost. A commendable
quest on your part.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Mystery Poet. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your very kind comments and your generous stars!
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My pleasure!
LOL:} Joyce
Comment from A Jesterstear
That is a great poem, but I have read it before. I saw the challenge in Yeltel's reviews. At the time I remember thinking, my god! did he just come straight back with that, or was there some kind of time span? Very clever . AJ.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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That is a great poem, but I have read it before. I saw the challenge in Yeltel's reviews. At the time I remember thinking, my god! did he just come straight back with that, or was there some kind of time span? Very clever . AJ.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, AJ. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your very kind comments and your generous stars! It took me a day or two to sift through various options before settling on this one!
Comment from Alan K Pease
I think you approach your quest in all the beauty of this poem of yours. Certainly in this phantom, is an odyssey in itself. I wish I had a sixth star
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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I think you approach your quest in all the beauty of this poem of yours. Certainly in this phantom, is an odyssey in itself. I wish I had a sixth star
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Alan. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your very kind comments and your generous stars!
Comment from kenni
You've mastered this form. It's one of the best I've read, and definitely the most interesting. Talented and learned, a winning combination. kenni
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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You've mastered this form. It's one of the best I've read, and definitely the most interesting. Talented and learned, a winning combination. kenni
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Kenni. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your very kind comments and your generous stars!