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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "I Wonder Dad."From victim to survivor of abuse.
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Comment from AnnieDawn
This must be a true story that you have portrayed in your poem and must have been terribly difficult to write about. I find maybe a bit of revue of sentence structure would be beneficial. A good poem and I wish you luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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This must be a true story that you have portrayed in your poem and must have been terribly difficult to write about. I find maybe a bit of revue of sentence structure would be beneficial. A good poem and I wish you luck in your contest.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your review.
I appreciate it.
Comment from joneau2
A very endearing and sad poem. It's trult tragic when children must pay for the sins of their parents. In your situation, it's very sad you were unable to reconcile when your dad was alive. Your testimonial is just that ... empty, with a feeling of emptiness, and that's too bad.
However, the poem is well written and heartfelt.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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A very endearing and sad poem. It's trult tragic when children must pay for the sins of their parents. In your situation, it's very sad you were unable to reconcile when your dad was alive. Your testimonial is just that ... empty, with a feeling of emptiness, and that's too bad.
However, the poem is well written and heartfelt.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2013
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Thank you for a generous review and comments.
I appreciate your time.
Comment from Sam Mendonca
That was definite a very strong written poem from the heart.
You did an excellent job writing about your childhood
The photo certainly got my attention.
Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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That was definite a very strong written poem from the heart.
You did an excellent job writing about your childhood
The photo certainly got my attention.
Well done.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thanks for another generous review.
I appreciate it.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I'm so sorry. Nothing really makes up for not having one parent or the other in your life. It's too bad parents don't let their children have access to an absent parent. It's too common. The poem is heart felt and a bit sad, but well done. Rox
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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I'm so sorry. Nothing really makes up for not having one parent or the other in your life. It's too bad parents don't let their children have access to an absent parent. It's too common. The poem is heart felt and a bit sad, but well done. Rox
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thanks for reviewing and commenting. I appreciate it.
Comment from Jade Lawson
This is beautiful, and sad. However you can't blame yourself for hat you should have done and didn't. Somewhere, where your father is, he knows how you feel and you can always talk to him, he will listen. One can always wonder why your mother said those things, but maybe never know. I know it was a terrible to do to you both, but try to find peace within, even with her, it is the best way to move forward and to smile at your father's memory, at least the good ones you know about him. This poem has very good word choices. I suppose when we speak from the heart, always works best.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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This is beautiful, and sad. However you can't blame yourself for hat you should have done and didn't. Somewhere, where your father is, he knows how you feel and you can always talk to him, he will listen. One can always wonder why your mother said those things, but maybe never know. I know it was a terrible to do to you both, but try to find peace within, even with her, it is the best way to move forward and to smile at your father's memory, at least the good ones you know about him. This poem has very good word choices. I suppose when we speak from the heart, always works best.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks for reading and reviewing generously. I appreciate your comments. It was a very long time ago now but I have never openly acknowledged how much the absence of a father affects your life. Dad passed away in 2008 at the age of 85 years and I felt awful because I was a home birth and dad felt a strong connection to me which I never had
Comment from kiwijenny
Thank you for this tough poem. I wish you had had a dad.... Are you a father yourself? If you are here is your chance to shine as an involved dad. My father was never hugged as a child but he sure hugged us.
Thank you and God bless
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you for this tough poem. I wish you had had a dad.... Are you a father yourself? If you are here is your chance to shine as an involved dad. My father was never hugged as a child but he sure hugged us.
Thank you and God bless
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks for a generous review.
I wish I'd had the father-daughter bond that my six girls have with their dad. Unfortunately it wasn't to be.
I appreciate your time and comments.
Comment from Insane Membrane
like this and can empathise with you ... my dad left when I was six weeks old and was having an affair when my mother was in hospital having . Some people are just not worth time and effort even if your related
I liked your write a lot
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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like this and can empathise with you ... my dad left when I was six weeks old and was having an affair when my mother was in hospital having . Some people are just not worth time and effort even if your related
I liked your write a lot
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your generous review and comments. I appreciate it.
I'm sorry to hear that you experienced hurt also.
Comment from Tina McKala
I went your funeral// went to
this was a really sad poem full of deep feelings and regret. impressive piece with perfect rhymes and it was excellent when it comes to feelings expression.
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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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I went your funeral// went to
this was a really sad poem full of deep feelings and regret. impressive piece with perfect rhymes and it was excellent when it comes to feelings expression.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much for your generous review and comments. I appreciate it.
Thank also for the heads up on the word omission.