All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Sticky-notes"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Robert Lee Brown
You are convincing me that you are a great entertainer. When you can make your own miseries laughable this indicates a great propensity for entertaining others. I truly enjoyed the read and thank you for sharing your artistry with me. Your friend, Bob
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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You are convincing me that you are a great entertainer. When you can make your own miseries laughable this indicates a great propensity for entertaining others. I truly enjoyed the read and thank you for sharing your artistry with me. Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Well I always look forward to entertaining YOU Bob, you know that!
Bless you!
:) Sharyn
Comment from TheWriteTeach
Oh, wow. You blind-sided me with this one. I expected a totally different ending. Because I expected something different, I was very moved by your ending. So-much-so, that I actually welled up with tears. You picked your words carefully to best convey your thoughts. The placement of your words to suggest the sticky-notes fluttering to the ground was clever and very effective/affective. Everything about this piece was good. I find nothing to be problematic. Good luck in the contest.
Suzanne
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Oh, wow. You blind-sided me with this one. I expected a totally different ending. Because I expected something different, I was very moved by your ending. So-much-so, that I actually welled up with tears. You picked your words carefully to best convey your thoughts. The placement of your words to suggest the sticky-notes fluttering to the ground was clever and very effective/affective. Everything about this piece was good. I find nothing to be problematic. Good luck in the contest.
Suzanne
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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I'm so glad you liked this one Suzanne, and that I caught you a little off kilter!
:) Sharyn
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
I loved this. The way it seems to ramble on and on, but each line is nestled into its own correct place. Lovely job, my friend. Good luck with this.
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I loved this. The way it seems to ramble on and on, but each line is nestled into its own correct place. Lovely job, my friend. Good luck with this.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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oh bless you for that lovely six KY!! Thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend you have done very well with this poem enclosing so much feeling of love in this poem it reads very well and is beautiful well done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Yes my friend you have done very well with this poem enclosing so much feeling of love in this poem it reads very well and is beautiful well done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thx so much Jill!
:)Sharyn
Comment from teresa.b
Really amazing work. You have a way with words for sure. I love the way you have the words fall like the sticky notes in the poem. Great work and congrats on the recognition.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Really amazing work. You have a way with words for sure. I love the way you have the words fall like the sticky notes in the poem. Great work and congrats on the recognition.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Teresa, thank you SO much for your wonderful six on this one - I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Ed_Anderson
What an intriguing, emotional poem. This was one of those times where I wanted to stop reading because it was too much for me, but then I had to finish reading. Great job!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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What an intriguing, emotional poem. This was one of those times where I wanted to stop reading because it was too much for me, but then I had to finish reading. Great job!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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AAh I show no mercy, Ed - you HAVE to read me to the end! Bless you - I'm so glad and honored that my piece moved you.
:)Sharyn
Comment from Gianinas
I would guess the poem is about love that we can impart and receive every day. Others would probably say we are in a rut, or that we go through the motions, or that we are a mid-life crisis waiting to happen. Only the subjects, we know, this is the way we impart love with every breath. Love is not only to be felt at sixteen, passion seems to be missing sometimes, but if we like and wish to impart love, we find the way.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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I would guess the poem is about love that we can impart and receive every day. Others would probably say we are in a rut, or that we go through the motions, or that we are a mid-life crisis waiting to happen. Only the subjects, we know, this is the way we impart love with every breath. Love is not only to be felt at sixteen, passion seems to be missing sometimes, but if we like and wish to impart love, we find the way.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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We do indeed, my dear. I'm so glad you enjoyed my piece, and thank you so very, very much for your lovely six!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Leineco
Powerful imagery..... a definite "whistling past the graveyard" vibe at the start, slowly evolving into melancholy....and then sliding into sorrow. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Powerful imagery..... a definite "whistling past the graveyard" vibe at the start, slowly evolving into melancholy....and then sliding into sorrow. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you very much Leineco!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Selina Stambi
Nothing precarious. All precise, present and correct .. love the images that come to my head - nice alliteration.
in silent
slow
motion
No one's at the door, as I contemplate
my bare
creamy
heartless
walls
Love the slo -o-w motion!
Nicely done ... I smiled as I have a brief insight into the present circumstances . You're missing him, aren't you?? :)
My daughters were away for a year on international exchange - one's just got back, the other returns on Sunday - while they were away, their rooms were in beautiful, magazine cover shape .... not any more! You created stark, marvelous pictures in my head.
Great work, Twinnie. A fine start to my reviewing week.
Hugs xxx
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Nothing precarious. All precise, present and correct .. love the images that come to my head - nice alliteration.
in silent
slow
motion
No one's at the door, as I contemplate
my bare
creamy
heartless
walls
Love the slo -o-w motion!
Nicely done ... I smiled as I have a brief insight into the present circumstances . You're missing him, aren't you?? :)
My daughters were away for a year on international exchange - one's just got back, the other returns on Sunday - while they were away, their rooms were in beautiful, magazine cover shape .... not any more! You created stark, marvelous pictures in my head.
Great work, Twinnie. A fine start to my reviewing week.
Hugs xxx
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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well bless you darlin' - so glad you enjoyed this one! :)))
Comment from janxavier
Cool poem . About someone one loves nt being near. People r so busy wit worldly things tat tey frget to spend tym with each othr. Love the way you've written it in free verse. Kudos :)
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Cool poem . About someone one loves nt being near. People r so busy wit worldly things tat tey frget to spend tym with each othr. Love the way you've written it in free verse. Kudos :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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thx so much jan! :)S
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If possibl plz review my poem "touch of love" . Thanks