All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Buried Treasure"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow this is beyond what you do and this is the real you. Absolutely the best read I have done today. It takes me beck to the day I found a box with my mothers rings in.
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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Wow this is beyond what you do and this is the real you. Absolutely the best read I have done today. It takes me beck to the day I found a box with my mothers rings in.
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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oh bless you Barb - high praise from you, and totally appreciated! :))Sharyn
Comment from wordsareus
What a wonderful entry for the Free Verse poetry contest! You have such a way with words. This piece is so well written. It held my attention. Good luck in the contest!
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What a wonderful entry for the Free Verse poetry contest! You have such a way with words. This piece is so well written. It held my attention. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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oh bless you my dear for your lovely six on this one! So much appreciated - you brought a big smile to my face before I hit the bed tonight!
:)Sharyn
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You're welcome!
Comment from Rondeno
Gorgeous, absolutely gorgeous! Lovely bitter-sweet nostalgia, with three strands intertwining through the poetic skein - your father's love of sailing ships, your rediscovered cache of memorabilia and the salty (but now sadly lost to desecration) Port Douglas. Each element harmonises with, and complements, the others. Gorgeaous!
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Gorgeous, absolutely gorgeous! Lovely bitter-sweet nostalgia, with three strands intertwining through the poetic skein - your father's love of sailing ships, your rediscovered cache of memorabilia and the salty (but now sadly lost to desecration) Port Douglas. Each element harmonises with, and complements, the others. Gorgeaous!
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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oh bless you Michael! I'm so glad you 'got' this one my dear! And thank you for your lovely sixer!
:)Sharyn
Comment from GregoryCody
Wow that is really beautiful. See? An instrument...
...box...earrings...delicate...carved...mother-of-pearl...all tear-drops...
It flows so well starting with box then da da da Boom on the last word "drops". I'm not saying the other words aren't special in that I'm simply trying to explain how it is "falling down the stairs". Well now I sound odd. But, its a strong talent. Oh, is "sniff" supposed to be "sniffs" -last lines. Or not? Regardless, this is a Beautiful tribute and the vivid descriptions paint a fantastic picture. All in all an elegant and superb piece.
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Wow that is really beautiful. See? An instrument...
...box...earrings...delicate...carved...mother-of-pearl...all tear-drops...
It flows so well starting with box then da da da Boom on the last word "drops". I'm not saying the other words aren't special in that I'm simply trying to explain how it is "falling down the stairs". Well now I sound odd. But, its a strong talent. Oh, is "sniff" supposed to be "sniffs" -last lines. Or not? Regardless, this is a Beautiful tribute and the vivid descriptions paint a fantastic picture. All in all an elegant and superb piece.
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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You've totally got it Greg - I love your putting it in words as "falling down the stairs" but that's exactly right. And thanks for "sniffs" - I'd originally written "I" and decided to change it at the last moment! bless you for the catch! and glad you enjoyed it! We definitely speak the same language - yeah!:)S
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Yeah. We definitely do! It really was a beautiful piece, and definitely had That flow. Great job!
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Wait I didn't give it a six? Yes I did. Hmmm. That doesn't make sense.
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Have you already given me two this month? You may have - FS rule that you can't give an author more than 2 x 6's per month - another one of their funny rules! :)
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Really? That's odd. Well, just so you know, I am Absolutely being genuine, that has nothing to do with your kindness, but strictly your writing. I am actually stingy with the six stars. When I Do give one it is for a very good reason. It has to really stand out but also make me feel something, and that is very very hard to do in a poem with me personally. So You deserve the credit. Your writing deserves the credit! :). And that is absolutely sincere.
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I really appreciate that Greg - and thank you so much for a wonderful compliment my dear!
:)Sharyn
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I really appreciate that Greg - and thank you so much for a wonderful compliment my dear!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A very interesting and enjoyable post.
Your love and devotion for your dad shines brightly from the words on the screen.
Lasting memories and recollections have been delicately and very nicely share.
A lovely presentation and picture.
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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A very interesting and enjoyable post.
Your love and devotion for your dad shines brightly from the words on the screen.
Lasting memories and recollections have been delicately and very nicely share.
A lovely presentation and picture.
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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thx so much my dear! :)
Comment from Sasha
This is a marvelous story and tribute to the love and fond memories you have of your father. Beautifully written with a lovely and gently flow. I enjoyed this one very much. Excellent entry for the contest and I wish you all the best.
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This is a marvelous story and tribute to the love and fond memories you have of your father. Beautifully written with a lovely and gently flow. I enjoyed this one very much. Excellent entry for the contest and I wish you all the best.
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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thx so much sg! :))
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a lovely poem about memories shared with your father who has since passed away. Time flies past and sometimes nostalgia gets the better of us when we come across little treasures stored in boxes.
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This is a lovely poem about memories shared with your father who has since passed away. Time flies past and sometimes nostalgia gets the better of us when we come across little treasures stored in boxes.
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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Indeed, Nicole. :)S
Comment from Tina McKala
powerful free verse with such smooth flow!
the imagery was really engaging, the story told too.
very well framed!
good luck in the contest!
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reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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powerful free verse with such smooth flow!
the imagery was really engaging, the story told too.
very well framed!
good luck in the contest!
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Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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thx Tina! :))S
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
>>mapped by her father, whose ship has long since sailed
Just beautiful! Very touching. As for the journey ahead, you'll have fun getting there, and it will hopefully take a very long time, but when you arrive, you'll be wearing the earrings and your dad will notice when he greets you. :)
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>>mapped by her father, whose ship has long since sailed
Just beautiful! Very touching. As for the journey ahead, you'll have fun getting there, and it will hopefully take a very long time, but when you arrive, you'll be wearing the earrings and your dad will notice when he greets you. :)
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Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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He'd better! Damned things always did pinch Phyllis! :)))
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He will, and nothing pinches up there. They'll feel like angel feathers on your ears. ;)
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Well that's ONE good thing to look forward to then!