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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from OLA THOMAS
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I love the masterly-done rhyming scheme, done with smooth words. I'm afraid to say that it is rather too early to sing this song, but a well done strings of quatrain.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    yes, too early for me Ola - but not for my mother ... this one's really about her :)
Comment from Tina McKala
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To seek the light, and sing stars' song // loved this line!!

Wonderfully magical poem, the ambiance of it was great, and engaging, you created a nice own word with this little poem :)

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    thx so much Tina! :)S
Comment from Allison78
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You have written such a beautiful kyrielle! It is very moving and dream like. Your syllable count is perfect in every line. Well done!

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    thank you so Allison :)S
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Absolutely perfect kyrielle and it just flows. I love the subject and the rhyming is spot on. Really a great piece and I loved the part"I want to answer all unknowns". I think that is everyones wish. It is mine.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    absolutely! thx so much Barb! :)S
Comment from Opal H.
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Wow, deep poem, Sharyn! And a great message to all! Indeed we should all seek to blaze across the sky like a shooting star.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    thx so much Opal! :)S
Comment from vkmack
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Just magical. The lilt, the tone, the phrasing, and the absolute dignity are gorgeous here. I love the refrain, "and sing star's song." What a wonderfully creative phrase. Thanks for sharing this paean to living for today--in hope of tomorrow.
Beautiful. Wish I had another star.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    Bless you vk - thank you so much for reading and reviewing, my dear...
    :)Sharyn
Comment from MizKat
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Sharyn - Th is a fabulous Kyrielle poem. It written reall well and is very interesting. I really enjoyed the read. Kat

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 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    thx so much kat! :)Sharyn
Comment from Gungalo
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So let me go, while wisdom's bright
Please take me home, where I belong
And let me blaze, in blue, tonight
To seek the light, and sing stars' song

Oh you have written a beautiful Kyrielle girl. The addition of the title line is great:

And let me blaze, in blue, tonight

I'm glad you are blazing in blue tonight.

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 Comment Written 18-Mar-2013

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
    thx Gungalo - thought about writing this for my mother, but then I t hought that was rather morbid ... so i changed it! :)S
reply by Gungalo on 18-Mar-2013
    Smiling at you.