All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Back and Forth"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Enrique28
You certainly have a style of your own. I love the slick rhythm, and images such as:
"as his oar slices the water just so, blade curving", and...
"around another bend temporarily out of sight"...
Vivid memories that you wish your so could look into.
A fine poem indeed!
Enrique
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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You certainly have a style of your own. I love the slick rhythm, and images such as:
"as his oar slices the water just so, blade curving", and...
"around another bend temporarily out of sight"...
Vivid memories that you wish your so could look into.
A fine poem indeed!
Enrique
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Bless you Enrique - thanks so much for reviewing and enjoying.
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the rowing machine that brought back memories of times with your father. i enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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this is very well written, visionary, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the rowing machine that brought back memories of times with your father. i enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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thx so much sweets! :)S
Comment from fairydancer
Great free verse. You have a nice rhythm and flow with good occasional rhymes. Very emotive and revealing descriptions of your Dad's rowing and your feelings. A beautfiul and elegant poem - Cally :)))
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Great free verse. You have a nice rhythm and flow with good occasional rhymes. Very emotive and revealing descriptions of your Dad's rowing and your feelings. A beautfiul and elegant poem - Cally :)))
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely six on this one Cally - it was a special write for me. So appreciated!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from Cedar
I really enjoyed reading this tribute to your father. I'm sure all the readers felt as though they were in the boat with you, traveling down the river. Perhaps, one day your son will see him... Great job. Bill
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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I really enjoyed reading this tribute to your father. I'm sure all the readers felt as though they were in the boat with you, traveling down the river. Perhaps, one day your son will see him... Great job. Bill
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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thx so much Cedar - I do hope so! :)Sharyn
Comment from Jerry Rauhuff
It's sad in a way to remember the ones we've lost but makes us so happy when a good memory retraces itself in our minds. I read this poem and it takes me back to building a patio at my parents home, working side by side with my father. (He passed a year ago next month.) Thank you so much for the trip down memory lane. I say well done.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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It's sad in a way to remember the ones we've lost but makes us so happy when a good memory retraces itself in our minds. I read this poem and it takes me back to building a patio at my parents home, working side by side with my father. (He passed a year ago next month.) Thank you so much for the trip down memory lane. I say well done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your splendid '6' on this one Jerry! My dad's been gone almost 25 years now, and there are times I still see him. :)Sharyn
Comment from ravenblack
love the structure of this piece, how you begin w/ an artificial row on the rowing machine which then becomes your father rowing ( excellent descriptions, by the way) the waters of time, the bend drawing your father away to wishing your son could see him. back and forth indeed - as natural and fluid as the tide.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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love the structure of this piece, how you begin w/ an artificial row on the rowing machine which then becomes your father rowing ( excellent descriptions, by the way) the waters of time, the bend drawing your father away to wishing your son could see him. back and forth indeed - as natural and fluid as the tide.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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thx so much my dear! :)S
Comment from c_lucas
Stationary rowing is a good time of reflection, rememoring our days of youth. It is a good time to work our bodies and our minds, using our memories to plan for our tomorrows.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Stationary rowing is a good time of reflection, rememoring our days of youth. It is a good time to work our bodies and our minds, using our memories to plan for our tomorrows.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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thx so much Charlie! :)S
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You're welcome, Sharln. Charlie
Comment from 9999pool
A great poem and the story was a tender one. The back and forth does create many imagery including on a hot summer night making out under the starlit night.
The other meaning is our musing of back and forth in the future and past.
The other metaphor is the gym exercise - back and forth. Reminded me of the rocking baby's cradle and I almost wanted to doze off in a trance, rocking back and forth in the cradle! LOl.
Thanks for sharing this great write.
Cheers.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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A great poem and the story was a tender one. The back and forth does create many imagery including on a hot summer night making out under the starlit night.
The other meaning is our musing of back and forth in the future and past.
The other metaphor is the gym exercise - back and forth. Reminded me of the rocking baby's cradle and I almost wanted to doze off in a trance, rocking back and forth in the cradle! LOl.
Thanks for sharing this great write.
Cheers.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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back & forth is the rowing dear ... and the courses of life, I guess ... :)
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Welcome. Just a joke of course. I understood clearly - loud too. Cheerio, Ritchie :). Incidentally this is the best among the three I reviewed.
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yes, I think so too dear! :)
Comment from jaeladarling
I love this poem! Fluid, nostalgic, all-around wonderful read. I found myself traveling along with the narrator; way to pull the reader in. :) Nice work - thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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I love this poem! Fluid, nostalgic, all-around wonderful read. I found myself traveling along with the narrator; way to pull the reader in. :) Nice work - thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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my pleasure jaela! thx for reviewing! :)Sharyn
Comment from mizzkris20
This is a heartfelt, beautiful poem. I like the way you have eased the reader into the memory with the spacing of the lines.
we're connected
by
our
fluid
thread
of
time
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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This is a heartfelt, beautiful poem. I like the way you have eased the reader into the memory with the spacing of the lines.
we're connected
by
our
fluid
thread
of
time
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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you've chosen my favorite lines my dear - thank you so much! :)Sharyn