And then there's Grace
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Mercy's Rain"A collection of Spirtual poems
56 total reviews
Comment from Titanx9
Thanks for your author notes to help understand your poem. It is smooth and flows nicely with a sense of urgency in its fervent message.
Quickly come, Oh Lord of Light
Rescue those from life's sad plight
Strengthen hearts to feel no strain
Touched once more with much to gain
When hearts can stand in Mercy's Rain
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thanks for your author notes to help understand your poem. It is smooth and flows nicely with a sense of urgency in its fervent message.
Quickly come, Oh Lord of Light
Rescue those from life's sad plight
Strengthen hearts to feel no strain
Touched once more with much to gain
When hearts can stand in Mercy's Rain
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the review and the understanding you have of the poem. Best always, Carolyn
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Well Done ~ Carolyn
This poetry speaks a powerful message. The rhymes
are nicely placed and I like the way the words are
arranged on the page. It flows evenly and is easy
to read. The attached photo is a befitting accent
that helps the reader visualize the message. Thank
You for your creation.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Well Done ~ Carolyn
This poetry speaks a powerful message. The rhymes
are nicely placed and I like the way the words are
arranged on the page. It flows evenly and is easy
to read. The attached photo is a befitting accent
that helps the reader visualize the message. Thank
You for your creation.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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And thank you for such a sweet and generous review. I am glad you liked Mercy's Rain. Best always, Carolyn
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
No doubt, this is a beautifully written poem. Flows perfectly with no seemingly 'forced' words.
However, there is one 'oops'. You begin with the letter 'H' and the next should be 'I' (not 'A')
May I suggest for that second line
"inept to feel sweet Mercy's rain"
Also these lines could use just a little tweaking
Monstrous greed and evil lurk (lurkS)?
Near might and wealth whose duty shirk (shirkS)? 'whose duty shirk' sounds a bit odd. or possibly 'duties shirk'?
Great poem. Enjoyed the read very much. Wishing you the best in the contest (but better change that second line.:) Betty
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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No doubt, this is a beautifully written poem. Flows perfectly with no seemingly 'forced' words.
However, there is one 'oops'. You begin with the letter 'H' and the next should be 'I' (not 'A')
May I suggest for that second line
"inept to feel sweet Mercy's rain"
Also these lines could use just a little tweaking
Monstrous greed and evil lurk (lurkS)?
Near might and wealth whose duty shirk (shirkS)? 'whose duty shirk' sounds a bit odd. or possibly 'duties shirk'?
Great poem. Enjoyed the read very much. Wishing you the best in the contest (but better change that second line.:) Betty
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Betty, thank you for such a wonderful review. I can't believe the many times I have read this poem that I passed right over the 2nd line. I followed all of your suggestions. Thank you so much and I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Carolyn
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
A similar theme in countless poems but yours catches the 'light' one might say, illuminated by "Oh Lord of Light" coming to the rescue of lost souls struggling to keep from being devoured by "Monstrous greed and evil".
Sounds like the rapture in Revelations. Excellent imagery..Mercy's Rain...the sacrement perhaps,or the blood of Christ?
Regards:
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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A similar theme in countless poems but yours catches the 'light' one might say, illuminated by "Oh Lord of Light" coming to the rescue of lost souls struggling to keep from being devoured by "Monstrous greed and evil".
Sounds like the rapture in Revelations. Excellent imagery..Mercy's Rain...the sacrement perhaps,or the blood of Christ?
Regards:
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you for such an insightful review. Your comments are wonderful. Best to you always, Carolyn
Comment from linda day
Very Nice! Well written. I really liked the starting of the poem "Hearts not touched by love nor pain, are not in tune with mercys rain." This piece had a nice flow to it. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Very Nice! Well written. I really liked the starting of the poem "Hearts not touched by love nor pain, are not in tune with mercys rain." This piece had a nice flow to it. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thanks Linda for the wonderful review and comments, :-) Carolyn
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well done. I have a hard enough time coming up with rhyming couplets let alone trying to think of things in alpha order. And then it has to make sense. Well written and a good message besides.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Well done. I have a hard enough time coming up with rhyming couplets let alone trying to think of things in alpha order. And then it has to make sense. Well written and a good message besides.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thanks Roxanna, some poems are easier than others, that's for sure. I appreciate your comments. Best to you always, Carolyn
Comment from mbagby23
I like and can relate. Sometimes are heart is so heavy it feels like it could burst just as rain does when the clouds feel up with water. Great.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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I like and can relate. Sometimes are heart is so heavy it feels like it could burst just as rain does when the clouds feel up with water. Great.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much foe such a sweet review. Carolyn
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You're welcome. If you have time please read my two poems and tell me what you think.
Comment from GWinterwin
Beautiful poem about mercy's rain. We all need mercy from almighty God but some n life are in need of it much more so. Good words flowing well and good rhyming make this a great poem.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Beautiful poem about mercy's rain. We all need mercy from almighty God but some n life are in need of it much more so. Good words flowing well and good rhyming make this a great poem.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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I appreciate your encouraging words and I am glad you liked the poem. God is so awesome. Carolyn
Comment from angelface2
Rainbows are beautiful, but we do not get them without the rain. Well, someone once said, 'into your life a little rain must fall.' Very nicely written. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Rainbows are beautiful, but we do not get them without the rain. Well, someone once said, 'into your life a little rain must fall.' Very nicely written. Miss Sally
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thanks for the great review and rating, Miss Sally, I am glad you like the poem. And yes, I have heard that too. into your life a little rain must fall. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Gary D. Hardy
How can love be true if never tested? How can one say forever if they've never. How can one know the good times if they've never seen the bad time. Seen the beauty of a rainbow if they haven't seen the rain. This is a lovely and thought provoking poem and is beautifully presented. great job!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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How can love be true if never tested? How can one say forever if they've never. How can one know the good times if they've never seen the bad time. Seen the beauty of a rainbow if they haven't seen the rain. This is a lovely and thought provoking poem and is beautifully presented. great job!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Thank you Gary, I really appreciate such an insightful review. Best to you always, Carolyn
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You're most welcome! And it was my pleasure!!