Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from judiverse
Great development of the attraction that Jana has for the Sheriff. And I suspect that he returns the feelings, as he's been so generous in his compliments to her. Rick notices the cozy exchange between the two, but doesn't seem to like it. Sounds like he has a crush on Jana. That should make things interesting. Interesting discovery about Jana's relative that had committed suicide after being abused by priest. Great conclusion here, lots of suspense with Hank wondering about the lights being turned off. And then the discovery of the ear. Scarey stuff! Quite exciting to read. judi
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Great development of the attraction that Jana has for the Sheriff. And I suspect that he returns the feelings, as he's been so generous in his compliments to her. Rick notices the cozy exchange between the two, but doesn't seem to like it. Sounds like he has a crush on Jana. That should make things interesting. Interesting discovery about Jana's relative that had committed suicide after being abused by priest. Great conclusion here, lots of suspense with Hank wondering about the lights being turned off. And then the discovery of the ear. Scarey stuff! Quite exciting to read. judi
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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much, judi. I'm glad you like the enhanced romantic angle. I'm hoping, like you, readers will have seen the revelation of the feelings coming. So appreciate your support and generosity, my friend. Hugs, Bev
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You're so welcome. judi
Comment from AprilShower
Oh my! Is it Mr. Buell's ear? Is he in the box below this small gift wrapped box? I wonder who is doing these horrible murders. Could it be someone in law enforcement be doing these horrid murders? I'm anxious to find out, Bev. This is well done, but gruesome. LOL.
April
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Oh my! Is it Mr. Buell's ear? Is he in the box below this small gift wrapped box? I wonder who is doing these horrible murders. Could it be someone in law enforcement be doing these horrid murders? I'm anxious to find out, Bev. This is well done, but gruesome. LOL.
April
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April, thank you so much for reading and reviewing my 'gruesome' chapter. I really appreciate the support, my friend. Hugs, Bev
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You're very welcome, Bev. Hugs, April
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Oh can I just say yuck! I have both my ears so it doesn't belong to me. Fascinating post for the continuation of this story. Well penned as always.
Thanks for sharing it, so glad I read this in daylight:)
Maureen
Edit check:
""Has an APB has been issued?""// double use of 'has'
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Oh can I just say yuck! I have both my ears so it doesn't belong to me. Fascinating post for the continuation of this story. Well penned as always.
Thanks for sharing it, so glad I read this in daylight:)
Maureen
Edit check:
""Has an APB has been issued?""// double use of 'has'
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
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Hi, Maureen. Thanks so much for this generous and helpful review. Always good to hear from you! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Glasstruth
Superb writing! Love the tension as the janitor finds the lights and then the ear. The suspense is awesome. A great detective story. Well done! Les
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Superb writing! Love the tension as the janitor finds the lights and then the ear. The suspense is awesome. A great detective story. Well done! Les
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Les, thank you so much for this very encouraging, generous review! I appreciate your support very much. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
Yuck to finding a human ear gift wrapped. I thought it was going to be the whole head. Either one would be a horrible find.
I have a crucifix blessed by the pope. A friend brought it back. Apparently any merchandise sold in Rome is blessed by the pope. Who knew???
"sorry to hear of (Stanley's Eitner's) death" - only one name needs apostrophe, I think.
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Yuck to finding a human ear gift wrapped. I thought it was going to be the whole head. Either one would be a horrible find.
I have a crucifix blessed by the pope. A friend brought it back. Apparently any merchandise sold in Rome is blessed by the pope. Who knew???
"sorry to hear of (Stanley's Eitner's) death" - only one name needs apostrophe, I think.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
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Hi, Joy. Thanks so much, my friend, for your supportive and generous review. Correction made - glad you caught that.
I did think about a head, but too much blood to deal with LOL.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from c_lucas
The suspense factor is increased as the reader gets a brief glimpse of the killer. You are leaving enough clues but nothing that will directly point to the killer. Good job.
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The suspense factor is increased as the reader gets a brief glimpse of the killer. You are leaving enough clues but nothing that will directly point to the killer. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much, charlie. I appreciate your generosity and support! Warm regards, Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
An ear - not a head? Oh, my over-active mind!!
A great tense read, Bev - so exciting and seems so real. A sign of a good writer, my friend.
and well-liked[.](,)" Derek replied. - comma
to Frather Brian [he] confirmed - Father
...and lose "he"
for the best[.](,)" Derek began
"Has an APB [has] been issued?" - lose 2nd "has"
He'd not noticed (it) in his
Margaret
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An ear - not a head? Oh, my over-active mind!!
A great tense read, Bev - so exciting and seems so real. A sign of a good writer, my friend.
and well-liked[.](,)" Derek replied. - comma
to Frather Brian [he] confirmed - Father
...and lose "he"
for the best[.](,)" Derek began
"Has an APB [has] been issued?" - lose 2nd "has"
He'd not noticed (it) in his
Margaret
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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HaHa. Thanks so much for your supportive and generous review, Margaret. Appreciate the spaggie alerts! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from jadapenn
How gruesome. A human ear! Poor Henk seems to be on the hit list if you ask me. I liked the way you built tension in this chapter. The attraction between Jana and Oelsen is something special. Wonder if it will develop. I still love this book.
Little gremlins for you to catch:
"Has an APB (has) been issued?"
He'd not noticed [it] in his brief sweep of the hallway.
Well written and good progress. Luv jada
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How gruesome. A human ear! Poor Henk seems to be on the hit list if you ask me. I liked the way you built tension in this chapter. The attraction between Jana and Oelsen is something special. Wonder if it will develop. I still love this book.
Little gremlins for you to catch:
"Has an APB (has) been issued?"
He'd not noticed [it] in his brief sweep of the hallway.
Well written and good progress. Luv jada
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Hiya, Jada. Thank you so much for reading and supporting my write. Your suggestions are most helpful, and I really appreciate your generosity, my friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from chasennov
a single human ear. This is the type of incident that starts a good detective story rolling. Your writing is okay, just watch your paragraph let-downs. Good structure, well written and coordinated with good extensions. I liked the flow of your storytelling and I found the Indian component rather interesting.Well done. Kind regards.
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a single human ear. This is the type of incident that starts a good detective story rolling. Your writing is okay, just watch your paragraph let-downs. Good structure, well written and coordinated with good extensions. I liked the flow of your storytelling and I found the Indian component rather interesting.Well done. Kind regards.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
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Hi, chasennov. Thank you much for stopping in to read my chapter. I will have to admit my ignorance of the term, 'paragraph let-downs'. Have to google that LOL.
I appreciate the support and generosity of your review.
Warm regards, Bev
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You're very welcome Bev, I doubt whether even Google would know this one. Only poets have the rights to it. Kind regards.
Comment from lakeport
Along the Jericho Road indeed there is a lot of mystery and suspense going on. I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you,lakeport.
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Along the Jericho Road indeed there is a lot of mystery and suspense going on. I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you,lakeport.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
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Hi, lakeport. Thank you for taking time to read and support my chapter. I really appreciate that! Warmest regards, Bev
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your welcome.Lakeport.