All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 " One Pure Note"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Hitcher
First of all, Congratulations on the win friend :) It is a great little poem, full of powerful emotions, and it is true, from the depths of despair one can rise like the phoenix and be reborn... live again. A worthy winner :)
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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First of all, Congratulations on the win friend :) It is a great little poem, full of powerful emotions, and it is true, from the depths of despair one can rise like the phoenix and be reborn... live again. A worthy winner :)
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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That's what we do, Hitcher, isn't it? Amazingly resilient sometimes! :) S
Comment from Wendyanne
Wow what a wonderful, well-written piece of vividly descriptive poetry. The imagery throughout this is awesome, for example,"to crack the classic chandelier." Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Wow what a wonderful, well-written piece of vividly descriptive poetry. The imagery throughout this is awesome, for example,"to crack the classic chandelier." Well done.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much Wendy! :) Sharyn
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Sharon,
A really incredible poem thattook me from the depths to the hights. Both the dark imagery and inspiring imagery were done perfectly. I think this is one of your best. Congrats on the well-deserved win--Ted
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Dear Sharon,
A really incredible poem thattook me from the depths to the hights. Both the dark imagery and inspiring imagery were done perfectly. I think this is one of your best. Congrats on the well-deserved win--Ted
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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"Aloha" Ted - wow! thank you so much for reading, the lavish praise, and for your special '6' my dear!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from ocruickshank
I really enjoyed the positive aspect of this poem and how one thing ...in this case a joyful note in a song, can change one's perspective. I haven't read the other submissions for this contest but can see why this would be a winner as far as flow and structure. My only critic is a personal taste sort of critic ....simple works better for me and overly flowery language sometimes muddles the emotion of a piece for me. Thanks for sharing and congrats on your win!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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I really enjoyed the positive aspect of this poem and how one thing ...in this case a joyful note in a song, can change one's perspective. I haven't read the other submissions for this contest but can see why this would be a winner as far as flow and structure. My only critic is a personal taste sort of critic ....simple works better for me and overly flowery language sometimes muddles the emotion of a piece for me. Thanks for sharing and congrats on your win!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thanks so much my dear - this one is meant to be read aloud - i.e. performed - so the alliteratation/ assonance etc will have much more impact if you do that. But yes, I do tend to weave longer poems - somehow they just come out that way! :0) Sharyn
Comment from fairydancer
This is a fantastic entry for this contest. You had my vote ;)
Love the rythm of your well constructed free style and the occasional rhymes really enhance that rhythm.
Congratulations! - Cally
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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This is a fantastic entry for this contest. You had my vote ;)
Love the rythm of your well constructed free style and the occasional rhymes really enhance that rhythm.
Congratulations! - Cally
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Well what a sweetie! thank you so much, Cally - for reading, enjoying, voting with your quill, for your wonderful review AND, of course, for the fabulous '6'. I'm so encouraged!
Blessings
Sharyn
Comment from GWHARGIS
It is funny what helps lift people's spirits. I was depressed once and I remember hearing my two college aged neighbors fighting about who ate the last of the peanut butter. I don't know why it made me start to laugh but it did. Yours in much more charming and beautiful but whatever works. Nice job.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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It is funny what helps lift people's spirits. I was depressed once and I remember hearing my two college aged neighbors fighting about who ate the last of the peanut butter. I don't know why it made me start to laugh but it did. Yours in much more charming and beautiful but whatever works. Nice job.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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aaah, then you know exactly what I'm talking about GW - things somehow get put into perspective, yes? Now, if we can only just choose to STAY in that space!!!
Bless you,
Sharyn
Comment from justjo66
Wonderfully written. Despair turning to Hope.
A concept we can all use sometime in our
own lives. This is a wonderful time of year
filled with hope and love. You did a fantastic
job on this poem.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Wonderfully written. Despair turning to Hope.
A concept we can all use sometime in our
own lives. This is a wonderful time of year
filled with hope and love. You did a fantastic
job on this poem.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Than you SOOOO much for your lovely review!
:) Sharyn
Comment from cinamonsunrise
This is a serenade to my soul. Very melodious and sweet. The range of emotions I felt as you carried me from sadness to elation...well written. Very enchanting. Thank you for sharing and congratulations on your win! cinamon
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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This is a serenade to my soul. Very melodious and sweet. The range of emotions I felt as you carried me from sadness to elation...well written. Very enchanting. Thank you for sharing and congratulations on your win! cinamon
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thank you so much for your lovely review cinamon (LOVE your name!) :) Sharyn
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
now I see a strand of warm
golds, high skies, treasured birds
of white grace, and blues
so deep and luscious pleasured
I can plunge my hands in, never measured,
and come out overflowing
in all five senses
feel again
heal again
all because
of
one
pure
note
sung
in
exultation
the six will speak for itself, Sharyn - no wonder
it was a winner, my friend.
Congratulation.
Margaret
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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now I see a strand of warm
golds, high skies, treasured birds
of white grace, and blues
so deep and luscious pleasured
I can plunge my hands in, never measured,
and come out overflowing
in all five senses
feel again
heal again
all because
of
one
pure
note
sung
in
exultation
the six will speak for itself, Sharyn - no wonder
it was a winner, my friend.
Congratulation.
Margaret
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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"Aloha" Margaret - the six does, indeed, speak for itself, my dear - and a HUGE thank you for your magic '6' and for such lovely encouragement. I'm delighted that you resonated with this, because I enjoyed writing it!
:0 Sharyn
Comment from mauial
Wow, I love the way you developed this from the powerful methaphor of the fist two lines, (all cried out in this land of plenty) to the contrast of being exulted at the end.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Wow, I love the way you developed this from the powerful methaphor of the fist two lines, (all cried out in this land of plenty) to the contrast of being exulted at the end.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thx so much Al! :) Sharyn