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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from Angels27
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The poem is very beautifully worded and it creates a picture of warmth and sleep and slumber. Ha ha....the layout is beautiful and the coloring grabs the attention.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
    thx for sharing the snooze Angels! :)
Comment from Chris Tee
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To answer your question, you must have dosed off on the beach this afternoon.This is absolutely marvelous and the alliteration magnificent. Another great piece of poetry girl!

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
    So glad you enjoyed it Chris - I grabbed some "laze" time yesterday dear! :) S
Comment from nancyjam
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You're lucky the Sunami didn't hit.(lol)
Nice seductive language and
Lovely images.
Nice use of alliteration throughout.
I really enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
    thx nancy - yep, we were glad it missed - third time in 3 years! ouch! :) Sharyn
Comment from Deorre Leonard
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Beach Sleep!! Good colors the picture is great. This is an expressive piece. It has a good flow. Thanks for sharing. Deorre

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
    Thx Deorre! :) Sharyn
Comment from Glasstruth
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This has a fantastic flow, right down the screen it goes like a rushing stream with a sensual feel as nature is, of course very sexy. The title to this created a mood before I started reading. Superb! Les

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
    oh good! glad you enjoyed it Les ... every so often I have to remind myself to stop running around like a decapitated chicken, but just to sit still and enjoy being where I am ... Hawaii is so beautiful, but sometimes I forget, dammit! I'm so lucky - good to remember that too. Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from Patti R.
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You are such a brat! To flaunt this kind of afternoon, while I endured 80 km/hr winds, okay, yes there was sunshine, but it's too windy and cold to enjoy it...Loved this. Svelt! Perfectly pared, trimmed, and fit together like pomegranate seeds...beautiful, flowy (thank you for not using neon yellow as a background, laughing!)

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
    thought you might enjoy neon aquamarine as a gentle change darl'! Glad you enjoyed the beach snooze ... can't do winter for long,though love to play in snow for a few weeks - am a terrible skiier, (but awfully good spectator sport! and yes, I'm the proud owner of a neon pink ski suit, with matching jacket - or I borrow my husband's neon orange one ... good if you're buried in a hole, which most of the time I am ...) :)))))
reply by Patti R. on 31-Oct-2012
    Oh you make me laugh!
    Once I was ever so grateful for my 1980 turquoise ski suit as I crashed a snowmobile down some stupid mountainside...stupid hairpin turns!! Loved the suit, the frickin' doctor cut it off - ass! I had but one bruise!!
    Sleeping on the beach is so therapeutic - like swaying in a hammock.
    smiling
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
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Reading your poem makes me want a nap. I love your one word alliterations. I am currently taking Brooke's course in free verse. I am studying yours also. You write so beautifully about so many things. Keep it up. Bob

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
    hey Bob - did you mean to give me four stars? If so, please do tell me what needs to be improved!
    :) Sharyn
reply by Robert Lee Brown on 31-Oct-2012
    NO. I must have dozed off. I have changed it to 5. Sorry. Bob
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
    oh that'll teach me to put people to sleep!!! :)
Comment from fairy77
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haha loved it your on a sunny beach and I'm in a downpour.I'm glad you doing well!Liked dappled kisses and sea sleep.Well written!beth fairy77.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
    I know where I'd rather be Beth!!! though we could use a little of your rain at the moment! :) S
Comment from artemis53
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Well, some people have to work for a living so you can guess how mine went. Even though I'm in Florida I'm not a beach sleeper. I mostly prefer the woods.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
    aaah there you are Diane ... I love both!
Comment from Cumbrianlass
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Yeah, okay, okay. Guess how I spent mine? No, don't. Let's just say I'm jealous. LOL! This reads like a dream. Which it actually IS for some of us Sharyn.

Lovely. Just lovely. But that's enough now. Okay?


;o)


Av

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2012

reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
    Plenty of room at the beach Av ... come on over!!! :) Sharyn