A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
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Comment from squid152
I loved your openening stanza. A lot of big words here that I need a dictionary to understand. I don't want to insult you.-Gary
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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I loved your openening stanza. A lot of big words here that I need a dictionary to understand. I don't want to insult you.-Gary
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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No worries, enjoy once you understand them it all makes perfect sense...
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Syphilis is a debilitating disease if not treated properly and timely. The product of unsafe sex it is spread easily. If I take a symbolic approach, syphilis can represent a sick mind that relishes in the vilest acts of life. Both can ruin the minds of careless men. Curtis
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Syphilis is a debilitating disease if not treated properly and timely. The product of unsafe sex it is spread easily. If I take a symbolic approach, syphilis can represent a sick mind that relishes in the vilest acts of life. Both can ruin the minds of careless men. Curtis
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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My sentiments exactly, much appreciated.
Comment from Grace Campbell
This rythmes great! It's very thought provoking, I thought. I like the last line, really funny--in a way. The picture and the poem work great together. I really felt like I was involved with the poem.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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This rythmes great! It's very thought provoking, I thought. I like the last line, really funny--in a way. The picture and the poem work great together. I really felt like I was involved with the poem.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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I hope so it is a light hearted gesture to some a serious reprove to others...I hope...!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bipen,
I see you choose a eye opening metaphor ( how some people have a disease describing their insulting thoughts about some writers here on Fanstory .
I know I may be way off.
I know one thing I don't let it worry me of what they say.
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Hello Bipen,
I see you choose a eye opening metaphor ( how some people have a disease describing their insulting thoughts about some writers here on Fanstory .
I know I may be way off.
I know one thing I don't let it worry me of what they say.
Gert
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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No worries...
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Sounds like you may eel the same way?
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I dont mind criticism but it must be constructive and correct...afterall this is a learning website not just a social website.
Comment from Glasstruth
Very creative and unusual. Even though I didn't fully understand it. It draws me back to another read. I can't say it's wrong. Syphilis like writing just grows in you and you just can't stop it. Sometimes it's destructive like syphilis, but well that's the best I can. In it's creative approach I give a fiver. Les
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Very creative and unusual. Even though I didn't fully understand it. It draws me back to another read. I can't say it's wrong. Syphilis like writing just grows in you and you just can't stop it. Sometimes it's destructive like syphilis, but well that's the best I can. In it's creative approach I give a fiver. Les
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Many thanks...
Comment from Tina McKala
Rather do not comment if you have nothing constructive to say? I am not sure if I got the message right, but I just wanted to let you know that I really liked it and I wanted to give it those 5 stars as a support for nice things with a message :) Tina
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Rather do not comment if you have nothing constructive to say? I am not sure if I got the message right, but I just wanted to let you know that I really liked it and I wanted to give it those 5 stars as a support for nice things with a message :) Tina
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Excellent.
Comment from Peter@Poole
Please don't pay so handsomely for poetic acclaim. Reviewers pay scant attention to your lines and just take the money. What you need is tutoring and advice on poetics. P@P
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Please don't pay so handsomely for poetic acclaim. Reviewers pay scant attention to your lines and just take the money. What you need is tutoring and advice on poetics. P@P
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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That maybe true can I just ask why the four anything technically amiss that I should address...
Comment from c_lucas
An infected mind has no control. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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An infected mind has no control. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Thanks Charlie, much appreciate.
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You're welcome, George. Charlie
Comment from lappmellott
YOur piece is well written, even though I wouldn't choose to write a poem about this subject. Apparently it is a subject that is on your mind.
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YOur piece is well written, even though I wouldn't choose to write a poem about this subject. Apparently it is a subject that is on your mind.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Better on the mind than anywhere else...
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Bic,
I think we have all had some unfair and uncalled for reviews. If their criticism is instructive I can live with that but there are those who review an have no idea what they are talking about. A clever and compelling poem and you hit the nail on the head with this one. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Hi Bic,
I think we have all had some unfair and uncalled for reviews. If their criticism is instructive I can live with that but there are those who review an have no idea what they are talking about. A clever and compelling poem and you hit the nail on the head with this one. Well done, chey
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Thanks chey much appreciated.
