Comment from ameen786

Excellent

There cannot be any verse that could compete with this brilliant composition, masterful creativity in wonderful couplets, perfect rhyming and what a tale! Full of wit and humor with great rhythm...a different kind of rhythm. I know you got this wrapped up!

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Thank you, Kamran for your positive review and great confidence - yes, it is in the lead in the contest...

Comment from Bina1

Excellent

What a hoot! I think you have this contest in the bag! The detail here is superb! Thank you for sharing, good luck in this contest! Fine read!

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Nothing's ever 'in the bag' in FS contests I've discovered, but it's in the lead for now, so you may have picked the winner. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Hello Mystery Author! This is quite an entertaining rhyming conversation between husband and wife. The flowery compliments gradually turned to fiery insults. Well done. Best wishes in the contest :)

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Thanks, Joy. Glad you enjoyed my bit of fun. I started with the idea of gradually changing from lovey-dovey to vitriolic as you noted.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

Wow! The word choices are inspired. "Munchausen couldn't lie like you" so funny! "That gormless clod, that Fenian troll" Great piece of work.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Thank, Bill - glad you enjoyed.

Comment from WilliamDeen

Excellent

Your Husband and Wife Talking poem, Murphy's Bar, sounds like this couple is in serious trouble. Your poem follows the rhyming rule very well and the cadence is smooth and easy.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Thank you for your review - yes, I don't think the marriage will last much longer...

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

A great poem from beginning to end. The rhyme and meter are perfect, and the conversation is hilarious. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Thank you for the positive review - glad you enjoyed my little romp.

Comment from tinams

Exceptional

Well one. This is an excellent entry for the Husband/Wife Poetry Competition. It is wonderful the gradual change from devoted couple to devoted deceivers and adulterers. Very funny :) Tina

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Thanks, Tina, for the great review and the six stars. Glad you enjoyed my bit of fun. I started with the idea of gradually changing from lovey-dovey to vitriolic as you have noted.

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

Ah! COnversations that start with loving consideration sometimes end not so sweetly. It is amazing what havoc a few well-put words can wreak! Excellent and sadly humorous contest entry. Best of luck!

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Thank you - I guess the funniest farces are when you can see the reality underneath.

Comment from oNray

Exceptional

So the others will need the luck in this contest. What a riot, as I read it to everyone I know and they all deem it a six pluss. Better than outstanding

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Thank you - what a great compliment. Just think what a couple of good actors could do with this...

Comment from LAFraser

Excellent

Oh! hahaha Well done, you! This is a great poem of husband and wife dialogue.
I've certainly enjoyed reading Murphy's Bar!
Good luck in the contest.
This has been a treat. :D
~Eilish

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2012

Thank you, Eilish - glad you enjoyed.

reply by LAFraser on 10-Apr-2012

You're welcome. :)
~Eilish