Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Country Justice"A collection of my poems
100 total reviews
Comment from Dave Russell
What can I say, this was genius from start to finish. I needed a good laugh tonight, and you certainly filled the need there. I don't have a six to give you, or I most definitely would.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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What can I say, this was genius from start to finish. I needed a good laugh tonight, and you certainly filled the need there. I don't have a six to give you, or I most definitely would.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Dave - I will accept it as a virtual six.
Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Glasstruth
This quatrain is a perfect story poem with humor. The picture is a match; with the judge looking a bit comical I can see why he adjourned the case. Her assets astutely exploiting will change justice in a wink. The rhyming keeps the rhythm of the poem going. Well done!
Les
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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This quatrain is a perfect story poem with humor. The picture is a match; with the judge looking a bit comical I can see why he adjourned the case. Her assets astutely exploiting will change justice in a wink. The rhyming keeps the rhythm of the poem going. Well done!
Les
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Lee
Yes, I was happy to find a suitably comic picture to go with my disreputable judge.
Thanks for reviewing.
Steve
Comment from sunnilicious
Humor on a Friday night. 'Country Justice' is a cute poem. Well written. Clear story. Enjoyable read. Nice job. Congratulations of the contest win.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Humor on a Friday night. 'Country Justice' is a cute poem. Well written. Clear story. Enjoyable read. Nice job. Congratulations of the contest win.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind words. Glad you got enjoyment out of this.
Steve
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Kiwisteveh. This is a ballad of sorts it seems ....and A very good one too. I realize it is a quatrain and I think you will do very well in the competition. You should. Your use of strong verbs throughout shines. I liked this stanza in particular:
"Well, a tear glistened there on her features so fair,
A crystal clear sign of repentance;
Mr. Justice McGraw clearly liked what he saw-
He paused before passing his sentence."
Bravo! (wish I had another six) Bob
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Hi, Kiwisteveh. This is a ballad of sorts it seems ....and A very good one too. I realize it is a quatrain and I think you will do very well in the competition. You should. Your use of strong verbs throughout shines. I liked this stanza in particular:
"Well, a tear glistened there on her features so fair,
A crystal clear sign of repentance;
Mr. Justice McGraw clearly liked what he saw-
He paused before passing his sentence."
Bravo! (wish I had another six) Bob
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Bob. I appreciate your kind words and the virtual six.
Competition was tough, but I've snatched a win...
Steve
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Sorry, I was not aware! Congratulaitons! Bob
Comment from Frankeddy
Very well thought out and really well written with good rhyming scheme.
Excellent accompanying humorous drawing.
All put into a wonderful setting.
Lots of humor in last verse.
Well done. Frankeddy
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Very well thought out and really well written with good rhyming scheme.
Excellent accompanying humorous drawing.
All put into a wonderful setting.
Lots of humor in last verse.
Well done. Frankeddy
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thank you for your kind words. Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from jgirlie152
This quatrain poem is delightful. It tells such a fine tale of the judge and defendant....who would guess until the end the hilarious prank played on the judge. Ah, tis well as he deserved what he got. Most excellent.
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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This quatrain poem is delightful. It tells such a fine tale of the judge and defendant....who would guess until the end the hilarious prank played on the judge. Ah, tis well as he deserved what he got. Most excellent.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2011
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Thanks, Joan.
I wanted to foreshadow the surprise, but the best I could do was change her from 'petite' to 'tall'!
Steve
Comment from rudion
Clever, adorable, readable, fun. What great verse and flow this has. You did an excellent job. Picture and poem compliment one another.
Rudion
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Clever, adorable, readable, fun. What great verse and flow this has. You did an excellent job. Picture and poem compliment one another.
Rudion
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from mountainwriter49
hello poet
You've written a delightful and funny
poem in a well written, cleverly crafted
set of quatrains that make excellent use
of word play. An excellent read this
evening. I can see why it won the contest.
Congratulations!
Ray
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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hello poet
You've written a delightful and funny
poem in a well written, cleverly crafted
set of quatrains that make excellent use
of word play. An excellent read this
evening. I can see why it won the contest.
Congratulations!
Ray
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you, Ray, for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from mermaids
I can see why you won the contest. You have me laughing and the ending surprised me. Excellent rhyming and great flow of verses.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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I can see why you won the contest. You have me laughing and the ending surprised me. Excellent rhyming and great flow of verses.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from healfromwithin
I LOVED this! Favorite lines: "In a courtroom of mine, you had best toe the line."; His growling voice gritty as gravel.;She was tall, she was sweet; from her crown to her feet,; Exploiting her assets astutely. I had no SPAGs to nit pick. Well done! More, please.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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I LOVED this! Favorite lines: "In a courtroom of mine, you had best toe the line."; His growling voice gritty as gravel.;She was tall, she was sweet; from her crown to her feet,; Exploiting her assets astutely. I had no SPAGs to nit pick. Well done! More, please.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2011
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Thank you, HFW, for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve